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"Good evening, Kabuto-kun." The silver-haired ninja gave a friendly smile and walked over to a seat with his hands shoved in his pockets. He pulled a chair out with a sharp *screech* and sat down while looking over the shop, obviously looking for something.
"How do people know what you have to offer when there aren't any menu's around?" he finally asked in a bored tone. I sighed loudly and grabbed one from on top of the cabnet. BUt instead of giving it to him I mearly hid it bahind my back and smirked.
"Ok, what are you up to?" the dark-eyed ninja asked nervously, noticing the smirk on my face.
"Tayuya said you cooked dinner today." I said defencively
"your point?" he asked, still confused.
"My point is,"I started as the smirk on my face grew,"you should have eaten with everyone else." A frown grew on his pale face as he rested his chin on his folded arms making him look sulkish.
"Oh come on, Sozan! You know you never have enough food to cook for all of us! I thought you would be kind enough to make your tired brother some food." I put my free hand over my chin to make it ook like I was thinking it over, which made his face twist into a disgusted frown.
"OH come on!" he proclaimed while sulking even more,"I'm starving here!" I looked at him and started laughing. He looked so pathetic sitting there with puppy dog eyes.
"Ok, ok. You caught me in a good mood. I'll make you anything you want." HIs face lit up as I pulled out the menu from behind my back.
"Thanks, Sozan. Your a life-saver!" he said in a sarcastic voice. I stuck out my long tounge at him and handed it to him. He eagerly grabbed it and opened it up so he could see all of the contents inside with a clear view.
"hmmm.." Kabuto's dark eyes went back and forth over the menu then shut it and handed it back to me,"I'll take two misu ramens and some chicken please." I took the menu from him and placed it back in it's original spot on top of the cabnet. A low hiss caught my attintion and I looked down and made eye contact with my grey boa. Another note was around his smooth neck. I bent down and got it from around his neck and read it to myself.
'Sozan,
Don't worry about Ickie, Hachie was able to calm him down. Also, Kimmimaro got hurt messing around with Kabuto's freaking needles again! Could you tell him to get his butt back over here?
Kick butt!
Tayuya'
I softly shook my head and placed the note down, away from the stove. I fixed Kabuto's order and put it in a to-go back and handed it to him. He just stared at it for a few seconds before looking at me.
"What's this?"
"Your order. Tayuya needs you at home. Kimmimaro got in your needles again." The grey-haird ninja shook his head and sighed before taking the bag out of my hands. Getting up he looked at me.
"Your coming home now, right?" I nodded and told him to wait outside the shop for me. Before he could reply I dashed into the backroom and changed back into my kimono, wrapping Hachie around me and grabbed my twin katanas as I did so. Locking the door behind me, I stepped outside into the darkened streets of Konaha, where my medic brother was waiting patiantly under a dull street light, his glasses reflecting the light from it. I walked over to him and he started walking with me.
"It's gonna be a long walk home."
"And lonely for you. I have to go groccery shopping first." The silver-haired ninja nodded and jumped off. I continued down the street and into the smal groccery store. I rushed through and grabed all the things I needed and was out before you knew it. With 4 bulging backs of food I walked toward the gate of the village, an azure ocean filled with glittering diamonds shining above me as I walked along silent streets.
"It's such a pretty night," I said silently to myself,"I'll walk home." When I reached the gate, the patrolling guards spotted and stoped me about 6ft away.
"I'm sorry, Miss. No one is allowe to leave the village after sunset."
"So you finnaly got your dream job, Jen?" I asked recognizing the first guard. Seeing the confused look on his face, I stepped forward into a moonlit spot letting him get a good look at me before it finally came to him who i was.
"It's Sozanara! Open the gate" he said to his partner who had already had it open about a quarter of the way and still opening it. When it was completely opened, they stood on oppistie sides from each other, thier free hands by thier sides limply. They both greeted me goodnight as I made my way through the gate and into the forest just outside the gate.
well that's all for now! thanks for your time, and attintion!





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    XxHidden Mist NinjaXx
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    commentCommented on: Sun Nov 19, 2006 @ 07:35am
    i love it!!! Its kind of funny too^.- You know what? u should be an author an anime author biggrin


    commentCommented on: Sat Mar 17, 2007 @ 05:19pm
    It's a pretty good beginning but I think you lack some description and characterization, and I think Kabuto is a little OOC. The journal isn't the best format for stories but it's okay, it works. You should describe your OC's more, especially if it's a main character, and you need to work more on describing the environment to get the right feeling for the story. It feels a little shallow and short, but keep working 3nodding



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