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Forever Trapped withing the darkness, Praying for some light, The pain grows everyday, And tears flow every night. Withing the shadows, I remain, Hoping and wishing, For the end of pain. But the prayers are unheard, And my dreams pushed aside, All on that fearfull day, That my heart died. So forever I say good-bye, To all i have ever known, His Love has been the greatest gift, But my true curse has been shown. For inorder for true happyness, I must sacrifice. For him and him alone, My shining white knight So, withing the darkness, I shall hide, Untill the day, That my pain dies. Crystal Boyd/Kia

Posted by: merankia Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 02:20am

even though all seems lost, its our humanity that holds the world together
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my rp character
Kia Rayne

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Commented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 02:49am

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Commented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 02:46pm


	Deep....makes me wonder about.....nvm. Lol, sorry about that. Good job!!!

Commented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 02:54pm


	Your poem "forever" is really well written. Though it is sad in nature, I rather enjoyed how everything flowed smoothly. Keep focusing on your writting. smile You are very talanted when it comes to expressing your feelings in words. Not alot of people can express themselves in such a way. It is a rarity. Excellent job! 3nodding

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Commented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 04:02pm


	Nice but if I may, it's a little overdone with the whole 'trapped in everlasting darkness etc. But your spellings picked up a lot which is good as it shows to the reader that you care about the layout. I obviously do know that you do care about it but some may assume that so just keep it up. Just remember with a new sentance, you have a capital letter, you seem to have slipped on that a few times. Overall good, reads well and expressed well. Good job. ^.^

Commented on: Tue Jun 27, 2006 @ 04:47pm


	CLAPS! I love it! Your a really good poet. I suck at poetry, I can't ryme for a piece of dung! I mean I have a few really good non-ryming poems but nothing major like this. I love it. Ok Now I do have a few bad things to say. I didn't get the last two stanzas. Like I didn't understand what you were trying to say.

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Commented on: Fri Jul 21, 2006 @ 02:58pm


	Damn! that was so good. good job. i love you. lol

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