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On the loss of my m...i...nd...

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lidless_i

PostPosted: Fri Nov 03, 2006 11:35 pm


We close our eyes while we look to the sky.
What holds up the stars begins to shake.
We smile and laugh as they begin to fall.

I look at you, in tears, and wonder why.
What do I have to do? What will it take?
This isn't fair, it makes no sense at all.

The pain is gone now, I no longer cry.
I haven't looked back, you were only a fake.
I'll always walk, and never crawl.


The pain came back, I mourned your loss.
Why can't we find pleasure? Is the world only pain?
I just have to ask; why are people so unkind?

It took me awhile, but I know I'm the boss.
I'm the only loon in a world of the sane.
So I accept my kingdom, made up of the blind.

I'm sorry you read this to your own loss,
but my faith in what's real is beggining to wane.
This is a pointless lament on the loss of my mind.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 9:34 am


Aw... that's sad. I'll be sane with you... I can make cookies... sweatdrop

Gomenroia


[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 10:18 am


I liked that, especially the style it was written in. Very nice.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 04, 2006 10:57 pm


Thanks. It was a spur of the moment kind of thing, so I didn't expect anyone to like it.

lidless_i


KirbyVictorious

PostPosted: Sun Nov 05, 2006 1:48 pm


I liked ti a ton.

And got it, too.

Have a cookie. *tosses cookies*

AND OMG I HAVE HALLOWEEN CANDY LEFT! *runsawaytoscarfdownendlessmindnumbingsugar*

GASP!

I love the poem.
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Poetry and Lyricism

 
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