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 Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 12:25 am
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 12:53 pm
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crying heart mrgreen Dammit Slake I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!! scream cool biggrin And I can't have you!!! neutral
Crimmy, what will you said if I do a story about him? wink I know he's from SoupGoblin actually, and he said I cannot use him as he is, but I could make some character who could be inspired and will look a lot like him but with other name. In other words Slake with other name and some minor changes. Will you allow it, to use your version of his character into this new guy? sweatdrop Please! confused
Let me give you an advance in brief, or as much I could for him at this story:
Back in the past in very ancient Japan, before Imperial Central rule at the state, there were spirits on the land, protectors of nature and guardians of the sacred gates to other dimensions [as heaven, hell, other worlds, and so on, even the outer primigenial void]. The most powerful and greatest ones were the onis, but they got troubles with humans, most of them, as they didn't understand each other: humans though of onis as just destructive forces ignoring how the open new opportunities of creation, and of course onis didn't understand humans way of acting against nature. Though there were some onis and humans who eventually understood each other and got a balance of how things in nature actually worked, benefeting each other as mutual guardians, most of people were into troubles with onis. At the end, central power began to start on the people and they expanded to invade nature even the sacred places keeped by the onis, so war broke up between them. The other natural spirits and forces retreated after this and never came back. Things gotten harder between both quarreling sides, and onis became the wild creatures that people thought of them but because they did pushed into it. But very few knew that. Then onis began to dissapeard, as they lost control over themselves, became mortal creatures on time. The onis who were guardians of people left the world on their sacred gates, closing them behind, they did that to not kill their brothers. The rest of onis were eventually defeated by magic and sacred weapons, and those who weren't killed in battle and just defeated choose to commint suicide inmediatly or slowly by sadness and starvation.
Finally there was left just one oni at what is now Tokio, the powerfulest of all, he held control of the 4 elements of nature and kept being invincible eventhough he was now mortal too. Was blue, with great two colored-eyes ...(it will continue) wink
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 2:27 pm
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(the following of the above part)...(I still cannot decide which two set of color to choose, but it might use, blue, red, green, violet and gold-honey yellow for them at some combination; suggestions are allowed wink ), was heavy-builted yet agile and flexible as a good athlete [somehow a combo of your version and Grisser's one of Slake), he has charming ivory-white fangs and horns, which enlarged when he enraged in full power, becoming a towering, much heavier builted (perhaps even bulkier than Grisser version), with large piercing dark claws and horns then, and a darker yet sensuosly glossy blue skin. He had also deep black shiny hair but larger than the haircut he has here [pretty much the same hair style, but with fallen larger hair behind as Raditz or DBZ perhaps], the same hair grow even larger and magnificent as a lion mane on his fierce form. Hot and slightly proturding but not much yet noticeable, nipples with darkened areolas, a purplish-blue than the rest of him. And a great bulge on his brown loincloth, nor fundoshi, which when erected revealed a nice manly genitals uncut, yet it gotten larger dimensions when he became in heat rage at battles, pretty much as the ones in Kondou and Yuatari art styles. cool Strong legs and arms, wonderful firm abs and huge bulging and tougher butt and pecs. Body hair noticeable yet not so large though thicker on the middle of his chest, armpits, base of genitals and some on arms and legs. Also facial hair on the chin and closer sides. A manly guy, quite as much as your Slake but withoth the tatoo and different color eyes. About the name I'm still searching about but as hommage of Slake, I want it to be an anagram of the original, therefore it could be different and the same of the original one at the same time mrgreen (An anagram is a word or group of words which arranged the letters in a different way from the original have a different meaning; there's a noticeable use of them at The DaVinci Code))
Returning back to story after the description of the main guy:
Just was left him, the fearsomest of all onis, the most powerful, who held control of all 4 natural element forces: water, air, earth and fire, was invincible, as he was also a quite clever one, so eventually no warrior or sorcerer was left undefeated. Seeing it was impossible to defeat him, people ackowledge to retreat from the proximities of the oni's domains, so live in a unsteady peace untill someone from somewhere, perhaps from outside of Japan could defeat him at the end someday. Meanwhile the hatred of the oni of humankind, for having been left isolated and somehow prisioner at the domains he protected, increased; he was in inner total despair of being lonely the only active protector of nature balance from humankind agressive force [eventhough by then people started to acknowledge by themselves the ideas of keeping balance too], of being the last one of his kind, and over all could not leave his domains to destroy by himself once for all the humans. Therefore he became vicious leaving each time more his domains, aproaching the people who left him behind to attack them even now unprovoked as before. People couldn't do nothing, to reason with the oni to acknowledge now how they over time had finally realized their fault. So there was a general fear of this guy from everyone, even the same nature he once vowed to protect. Total rage was him.
But on time, all had come to met its destiny and so the oni did. Then appeard from nowhere a sage, an old man, perhaps a priest thought many people, an outsider. Very elder, but stern and severe yet kind and calmed at the same time. A taller individual. Wear long bear and moustache, and hair, all of them pearl while, though at the top of hair was bald. Wear long gray and dusty old robes and a tall staff of dark and strong wood. No one knew from where he came, but he had one mission: he was sent to punish the oni and make him come to reason that war was over, between nature and man, and that humankind eventually learned the lesson and will became the new guardians of nature.
Of course everyone though that was just a plain mad man, because though he inspired respect, actually they didn't knew how him an very old man could defeat the oni. If he wasn't warrior but a sorcerer it was pretty much the same ending; the oni was more powerfull, skilled and clever than them. Still he promised he'll make true his word, and some expectation was raised.
(it will continue; meanwhile if you want to suggest names of the sage old guy, I beg you do it, I'm very bad about naming character! sad ]
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 3:09 pm
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Continuing the story [this is only a prologue-like, not the main story, it'll be told later wink ]
So the old wise guy come to the forest and the secret spring where the oni held the gate between the worlds on his protection, but now he had almost got forgotten of it, and just loved the spring to relax and bath himself. The wise man who was indeed a sorcerer became a bird, some unique odd and beautiful bird never seen before or after that. A white bird which looked as a mixture of a crane, a dove and a chicken, pretty much as a kagu but it could fly [Look into Wikipedia for a New Caledonian KAGU if you want to know how it does look like] He use this form to spy unnoticed the oni before the attack, to know him better, to study if he had something that he could use to defeat him, because he know anything in universe is actually perfect as totally, so he must have some weakness or something which is the key to undone him. And he founded it, not a physical weakness, not mentally, but some spiritual weakness, the weakness of his soul, the anxiety and grudge he held very deep: anger with everyone and with himself and his duty: he was a so lonely creature and knew that. Then the wizard knew what to do.
The battle came, and the sage confronted the demon. The demon was ackward a bit to having to defeat this guy almost nice and unworthy to destroy by himself [something very hard even for his total hatred to humankind). So the oni made at start some mistakes underestimating the attack of the sage, those attacks were not only magical but suddenly from nowhere the cane became a sword, and then he was fighting something very worthy and harder than he never met before: a warrior sorcerer.
The old man was quite agile and shapeshifted to attack the oni in different ways too: the bird, a white magnificent stag, a white ram, a white leopard, a weasel, a tortoise and so on, most of the sacred white animals that the oni couldn't harm. The oni also shapeshifted into a minotaur, a tiger, a lion, a griff, and a dragon, but was useless, and finally totally tired and with some hard woundings the oni asked for a truce. The old man agreed and sentenced the punishmen for the upper forces of Universe [the "gods"] for his bad behavior to choose either the anhiliation at the outer void of Universe, or ratherly atone for humankind into a duty of services to them, till he might have learned the lesson, and will become into something different of an oni: a man.
The oni was astonished, such harsh punishment for him, to choose between eternal anhilitation or a death in life serving perhaps forever to mankind and over all becoming one of them!! Yet the fear of the total void previous to creation scared him so much, that he agreed that life on the second choice. The wizard gazed in inner happiness and then started to make the spell that will make him a slave and servant of humans, and a stone, a river stone started to materialize in his right hand. But while keeping concentration about it he made a fatal mistake.
Now into the total despair of his fate, the oni enraged as he had never been before, covering all himself of roaring red-yellow flames of fire and his skin darkened into total blackness. Then he kicked the old guy with his giant hand and strucked him with his massive fingers, having a bit of resistance by the powerful cane of the man, But finally the cane broke and he throw the old man with violence to the rocks of the borders of the spring smashing him against them. Then for a moment the oni thought that he won again, as the old man body was totally broken and destroyed so he might be for sure death. But suddenly the river stone raised alone in the air, glimming oddly while a ying-yang symbol was scarved on the surface, and then it hitted the oni on his chest right to the heart.
The oni lost powers in that moment, paled himself totally, as the bruise of a tatto-like mark in ying-yang symbol appeard on his left chest right over the heart. Then as the stone falled down to earth slowly, the powers of the oni were totally removed, except by those of earth and some fire, and absorbed into the rock. Also a bright shine of the whittest light blinded him, and covered himself. Something struck him very inside of him at his all chakra spots. And he shirnked and shrinked in size till he dissapeard into nothing than an energy ray which was trapped inside the stone.
[It will continue smile ]
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 3:34 pm
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sweatdrop Almost done the prologue and rightly going into the main concepts of the story wink ]
So the oni was holded prisioner at the river stone with the ying-yang symbol of one side, and on the other appeard the scarving of the oni fierce face with 6 kanji symbols: peace, life, harmony, love and freedom. Then the rock came back nearer to the hand of the man, who wasn't death but dying.
The powerful shine some moments earlier and the scream of terror and pain of the oni when strucked by the spell, alerted people of the surroundings. So they came as faster they could to see what happened. Then they didn't find the oni anymore neared though all were a bit afraid of being cheated, but all dared to came by some certain hope. And they weren't displeassed in all. Unfortunately also their hero was defeated, at brink of death, and he'll die fastly if someone removed his totally destroyed body, yet his mind has still active yet wanning and called someone to approach him.
A little young 4 to 6 girl came close to him, he put the stone on his custody as well his broken staff, and said her some words in private:
"When 'he' finds inner peace at his heart, finds the true love and acheive the balance of his powers again improving them too, then he'll knew the importance of his life and will be truly free to choose his fate: a wise one which will brought him the happiness he really needed for him".
Already said that, the old man kept silent, breathed, closed his eyes and died. His body and clothes suddenly glowed on the same bright pure white that defeated the oni before, and them vanished into it as a rain of cherry blossoms, white dovy feathers, roses scent and some unearthy mute beautiful music raised up to skies to vanish into nothing. But the girl caught one large silvery feather while they were elevating into the air.
The girl came back with her family to which she told the secret and make them to keep in holding the relics for them being useful to the right guardian and master of the oni who will come and guided him into the prophecy to become true. However one relic came missing, they saved the feather and the broken cane but the stone vanished, no one nows how or when. But everyone thought that it was perhaps a sing of fate after all: who will be the chosen guardian and master of the oni will find the stone and release him to make true his word untill acheiving all the words of the back of the stone.
So now, how it does look like so far? wink
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 4:26 pm
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Main concepts of the story
So that was a prologue-like to explain the origin of the main facts: the lead guy, the oni will be the hero, a reclutant hero whose duty is protect humankind agains its enemies [supernatural and magical enemies most of the time, who had become active to mastered the oni on their own nasty bussiness agains humankind, and attempting to stole the stone which helds him ], something terrible for him as he actually hate humankind, or so he thought at first. Over time he changes his mind: likes the job, likes his master, likes that he's learning other things, likes life, likes people, and acheives all what he was prophetized to got to be free, becoming somehow a man, instead of an oni, though outerly he kept the features of his fangs, horns [usually wearing then a cap or hat, and large large hair to hide them, and not raising questions of people] and blue skin, though now after the spell, it gotten a little bit silverish mixed as a track of the spell set upon him [a beautiful color], then it makes him a good cover as a case of congenital argyrie [Argyrie is a skin 'disease' about a 'poisoning' with silver salts, which sometime ago were considered a nature healing for all sicknesses, then the people which consumed it for long time, got their skin bluish-gray, or purplish; try again Wikipedia if you want to know more about it: ARGYRIE]. He also kept the 'tatoo' mark over his left pecs just a little above over the heart spot.
At the end when finally realeased of the spell and as the stone brokes alone, he chooses to be free with his master to whom he had learnt to live, love, find inner peace, kept balance of his power remastering his lost elemental powers and even acheiving to learn the ultimate uper power: the akasha, or aether, or universal mystical creational force, which was what imprisioned him, and that the old sage mastered totally. So he is happy, very happy at the end with his mate.
And who is his mate you might ask: well for sure is a male as it's a bara story after all, but he's not bara in all, yet neither effeminate or bishonen guy too. Just a standard guy, shy, nerdy, skinny, wimpy, unpopular, freshman student of bussiness management bachelor career. So he's just 18 when he finds the stone, on a vacation trip with some of his former high school classmates to Japan, and in Tokio, or nearby there, he is randomly draged by fate and some strange likening to a relict forest in a small suburban park reserve. He likes the enviornment so natural in the middle of the city, and goes to the spring, and finds while washing a bit his glasses on the water, the strange stone with the craved ying-yang symbol over it. He kepts it by himself, and returns with it to college. His few friends tell him that's a lucky charm so he kept it to not being the same weak unpopular nerdy guy as before, but it eventually goes the same as always. The guy also suffers because he is gay but in closet to even his family and closer friends do not know that, and is anguished. With broken heart once he wishes to find happiness in life to the stone, and while weeping one tear reaches the stone and it activates it, and the light flows of it and for his total awe and delightment a hot heavy-builted yet agile and flexible manly blue guy with little horns and fangs appeared totally naked in front of him in a fetal kneeling position. mrgreen heart cool A blue bara prince dream come true!
So there after the story follows somehow the taming of the beast by the guy, into a great man. The oni at first dislikes the guy, as he is aside of being gay, and the oni thought of himself as straight, though as event and missfortunes and other things come, the big guys finds himself being a gay like the guy and ratherly the bottom guy, enjoying even some ackward disguses that the best female friend and confident of the gay guy sets upon him as soon she discovers him. Those disguses included a bunny suit, a maiden suit, a naughty waiter suit and even a geisha suit [somehow the girl is delighted to see him totally ackward wearing totally humiliating effeminate disguises on his manly body; yet at the very end backfires somehow the plot as he realize that he indeed looks nice or cute there too]. The rest of time fortunately he wears more masculine standard cloths, though he likes to wear the less possible,
The master guy received aid from his two best friends, a girl and another guy, who they eventually ended in couple too, his little annoying yet cute sister, who is actually the one which makes the oni to think that it's worthy his new life after all. Also helped sometimes an eldery lady descendant of the same girl who kept the relicts back in Japan, and sents them to him to master and command the oni when he is freed. Also the old sage reappears as ghost in visions to keep aiding the young master guy and the oni sometimes too on their tasks.
Over time the young guy grows up too, becomes sure of himself, and less introverted and dares to challenge others. He acheives command of his life as he learns to command the oni. At the end he's a bit more bara in attitude and just a bit less in physical, becoming more athletical builted, and a bit more manly featured, not so childish. Perhaps even the voice gets more deeper though it kepts being higher but not now ackwardly neutral. He reforces very well his love for the oni, learning not to idealize him, but love him as he is eventhough he never loves or likes him, but when he succeds in getting his love, is very delightful to know that the guy is actually the bottom, a great guy as Takeshi Matsu's Beast.
(it will conclude soon I promise) wink
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 4:49 pm
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Finishing the main broad ideas of the story:
Finally, the most unexpected thing about the main guy after the curse, and perhaps an aid to kept him with a different open mind, is that him has gotten the gift of creation, not just by magic but biologically. Yes the guy is and will be a guy after all, but by some unknown reason, the spell created inside of him an uterus and ovaries functionally efficent, connected right to the wall of his rectum [yes he keeps being a guy after all so no v****a; also this seems to oddly have happened in real life at some parts of India, and weren't hermaphrodites but men with some well developed internal reproductive system, with a blind end, still being unknown the reason of this]. Therefore they guy is much more than a standard man, so his mind will be affected by hormones sometimes in a month, and be away everyone as he'll be pretty awfull then. Other times he'll be pretty fond and happy. This seems random and annoying but it helps him to think a bit different and therefore start to learn and realize that he almost didn't knew anything in life.
The female intern organs come with a bit side effects on his mammary tissue so they will enlarge a bit but kept being hotly many at the same time, as those of Patrick Fillion guys. wink Also will lactate spontaneously at times.
The climax, though still unsure this time, is that he gets into mpreg and gives birth to fourtleets, 3 girls and a boy, of him and his former master, not his mate, and they raise them togheter. After this, his internal organs dissapeard though is given the choice in a vision by the old sage that he could now regain some of his oni powers, including that of create life, whenever he wants later. So he is just a bit quircky of the possiblities
Yet as the mpreg issue is perhaps too much for many, it's uncertain if that will ever come.
The oni guy learns things hard by his stubborn nature at the beggining and well after facing real hard enemies with most of his powers being missed, he will suffer a lot, express anger, frustration, fears and will weep eventually. But his master will be there to help him into that. The oni rediscovers the emotions, more than attitutes and knowledge, and becomes a great good guy.
I still don't know very much of the enemies or other minor details of the story, but well in a whole that's the main idea.
The oni is a recluctant hero who changes an develops himself into a true hero, by the aid of an unlikely master, and all the bara issue about it.
Hope you like the idea, be free to help on the proyect, even to do some art about it. smile
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2011 5:09 pm
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Suggest names for the lead guy:
Here is the list of the anagrams I made since the original name, pick some of them, not necessarily just one [could be even 8], and tell me which one do you like more for the guy.
Aekls, Aeksl, Aelks, Aelsk, Aeskl, Aeslk
Akels, Akesl, Akles, Aklse, Aksel, Aksle
Aleks, Alesk, Alkes, Alkse, Alsek, Alske
Asekl, Aselk, Askel, Askle, Aslek, Aslke
Eakls, Eaksl, Ealks, Ealsk, Easkl, Easlk
Ekals, Ekasl, Eklas, Eklsa, Eksal, Eksla
Elaks, Elask, Elkas, Elksa, Elsak, Elska
Esakl, Esalk, Eskal, Eskla, Eslak, Eslka
Kaels, Kaesl, Kales, Kalse, Kasel, Kasle
Keals, Keasl, Kelas, Kelsa, Kesal, Kesla
Klaes, Klase, Kleas, Klesa, Klsae, Klsea
Ksael, Ksale, Kseal, Ksela, Kslae, Kslea
Laeks, Laesk, Lakes, Lakse, Lasek, Laske
Leaks, Leask, Lekas, Leksa, Lesak, Leska
Lkaes, Lkase, Lkeas, Lkesa, Lksae, Lksea
Lsaek, Lsake, Lseak, Lseka, Lskae, Lskea
Saekl, Saelk, Sakel, Sakle, Salek, Salke
Seakl, Sealk, Sekal, Sekla, Selak, Selka
Skael, Skale, Skeal, Skela, Sklae, Sklea
Slaek, Sleak, Sleka, Slkae, Slkea
Oh and if you want to give names to the character I mentioned earlier, you're welcome too! wink
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 12:00 am
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 11:39 am
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2011 4:39 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2011 9:13 pm
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