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New Song for a New Band

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Kurai_kotori

PostPosted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 6:50 pm


So yeah, my buddy and I are gonna start a band, and when I was thinking about that, this song just popped into my head fully formed.
I think this is called....

Memories

This ember,
it burns so I
will remember.
It shines in
the cold
of December.
It sings,
"In delight, oh,
In delight!

And this fire,
it's light shines
out all the brighter.
The cold burns,
and drives me higher.
It screams to me,
" Remember
December,
Remember
Forever!"

Well, Don't stop
spinning as the
snow drops.
Breathe me in
and don't you
ever let me go.
Please keep
memories
of all we
ever had,
it's lovely,
Never let me go,
I'll never let you go!

These winds,
they blow so
we won't stand still,
they move us
past the small hills,
and plains of past,
let's hope it lasts.

And these rivers,
flow so they
can deliver,
Thoughts of home,
and shivers,
of delight
all through the night!

Well, Don't stop
spinning as the
snow drops.
Breathe me in
and don't you
ever let me go.
Please keep
memories
of all we
ever had,
it's lovely,
Never let me go,
I'll never let you go!

And don't call,
running as the snow falls,
breathe it out
and never let it in again,
to spin again,
let it in again.

Never let it in again,
Never let it in again,
Never let it in again,
breathe it out and start again.
Never let it in again,
Never let it in again,
as the mem'ries start to spin,
Never let it in again!

Well, Don't stop
spinning as the
snow drops.
Breathe me in
and don't you
ever let me go.
Please keep
memories
of all we
ever had,
it's lovely,
Never let me go,
I'll never let you go!

Well, Don't stop
spinning as the (Never let it in again)
snow drops.
Breathe me in (breathe it out and start again)
and don't you
ever let me go. (Never let it in again)
Please keep (Never let it in again)
memories (as the mem'ries start to spin)
of all we (Never let it in again!)
ever had,
it's lovely, (as the mem'ries start to spin)
Never let me go, (Never let it in again)
I'll never let you go! (Never let in in again!)

All the mem'ries start to spin!
PostPosted: Sun Aug 31, 2008 8:12 pm


i still hold fast to what i said.

Good work, as always biggrin
Love it. razz

Cyodie


Song of the Pheonix

PostPosted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 3:00 pm


Have you ever heard "once upon a December"? The first part reminds me of that, and some may tend to think you ripped off that song. Just a bit of a warning. Now other than that I thought this was very good. I love the way this reads. And I have to say that this part is absolutely amazing:
"Well, Don't stop
spinning as the
snow drops.
Breathe me in
and don't you
ever let me go.
Please keep
memories
of all we
ever had,
it's lovely,
Never let me go,
I'll never let you go!"
PostPosted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 9:13 pm


Anastasia's "Once Upon A December?" I see what you mean, but I didn't have that anywhere in mind when I wrote it. I see where you're coming from though. Thanks for the feedback.

Kurai_kotori

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