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 Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 12:02 pm
Intro/Summary
I've had a story idea floating around in my head for a while and decided to write it. This isn't really a novel or anything, and each addition I make to it will be too short to really be a chapter, but I plan on having decent end and stopping points through the story. As of now I have no title, but I'm working on it. <.<;
Summary: When a girl's boyfriend is kidnapped by some strange man and taken to an alternate dimension, what's she to do? Go after the evil doers, of course, with the aid of two of her closest friends. However, there is one catch, in order to survive in this other world they have to gain new powers by sacrificing their memories of the real world and take up new lives inside this deminsion. Now Logie must find a way to revive her friends' memories, get them to help save her lover and avoid all kinds of assasins, corrupt governments and spies.
Genre: Action Adventure/Humor/fantasy (with a touch of romance, but mostly the other things)
Read if you like and give me some writing advice. Oh, and don't mind the typos. I know they're there but I'm too lazy to shove this thing through spell check.
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Posted: Thu Jul 14, 2005 11:36 am
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Posted: Thu Jul 14, 2005 2:33 pm
Thankies. I hope it's ok to read.
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The bisque white halls were silent and stirring with thick tension that seemed to grow steadily with each passing second that was announced resolutely by the red arm's ticking on the clock face. Each soft clicking noise seemed to echo down the hall as if to mock the growing excitement that pulsed through the stale air. Time dragged slowly and cruely along until the red arm finally finished it's journey to the roman numberal for 12, dragging along the larger minute hand to their final destination. With that simple action, a bell chimed and all chaos broke lose from the class rooms.
Young teenagers came pouring into the halls in a river of heads and bodies, each one flowing from their own respective final and joining the main stream to burst free of the schools and onto the front lawn of the campus. Along with the occasional moans of dread and worry were cheers of relief and freedom for at last school was out and it was time for the summer break.
A young, slender and lithe girl smiled to herself as she stood behind a small magnolia tree that offered little shade to her ghostly pale freckled skin since it was still a growing youth as well. The girl brushed some of her dark copper hair from her left eye, only to have the stubborn strands to fall right back in place and shifted some in her jeans and Chinese patterned top that had a mostly blue and red design to it. Her hazel green eyes glanced from the campus lawn to the street where cars and buses were already fighting to escape from the building.
"Logie, I did it," a high pitched voice cheered as a tall well built girl all but skipped over to her. She had a wide grin across her slightly plump but well porportioned face as her short and layered brown hair lazily fluttered in the wind. Her chocolate eyes seemed to twinkle with mirth and an energy that would be more fitting on a seven year old. She wore dark blue jeans with a brown belt to keep them from falling down that's color matched her shoes and sweater that she wore even in the 70 degree weather over a green shirt that said 'My reality check balanced' in white letters. "I passed my Chemistry test, I just know it!"
"It was probably just dumb luck," Logie teased with a faint smirk, causing the other girl to grin more.
"Whatever works," she said cheerfully, "as long as I pass Chemistry I'll be the happiest little Achie-san in the world."
"You're the only Achie-san in the world," Logie said, "and thank God for that."
Achie, as she was nicknamed, laughed at that before her eyes brightened at the sight of their other friend. "Erin, I think I passed my Chemistry test!"
"Thinking isn't your highest function," the other girl said in her deep but pleasant voice that could out sing most male Basses. Her eyes were hazel like Logie's, but had a more golden tone to it that stood out against her hair that was such a dark brown it looked black and was always held in a low pony tail. Her baggy clothes, a plain grey top and lose capree pants, made it a little difficult to determine the girl's gender, but they still looked good on her. "Are you waiting for Kev-kun?" Erin asked, turning her somewhat sleepy gaze to Logie.
"Yeah," Logie said, not going into detail on what they had planned for the day, "we're probably going to see a movie or something."
"I don't think there's anything good on, is there?" Achie asked curiously.
"We'll find something," Logie said, "We could always go home and watch an anime or play video games."
"That reminds me, I need to let you borrow this DVD," Erin said then lowered herself down to shift through her backpack as the other two girls watched her curiously or conversed on their own for a while. They were so wrapped up in their own discussion on TV shows and video games the girls didn't notice another person approaching until it was too late.
It was a sudden, sharp pressure in her side that caused Achie to squeal loudly and flinche, nearly losing her ballance as she scampered away from the attacker that jabbed her in the side mercilessly. She turned and tried to scowl at the tall, skinny boy who was quite a bit older than they were. His light blonde hair was whispy and he was laughing softly at the perterved female as Logie and Erin joined in on the amusement. His clothes were horribly worn from use and consisted of black pants, a once red shirt and a blue jean jacket.
"Hello, Kev-kun," Logie said and walked over to hug her boyfriend then, in one quick and fluid motion, dug her fingers into his sides as well, earning a yelp from her boyfriend.
"Ha! Karma!" Achie said, pointing at the young man accusingly.
"Hey, guys," Kevin said, finally getting a hold on himself and putting an arm around Logie's shoulders.
"I'm not going to waste my breath saying hi to you, pleebe," Erin said, turning her head to the side as if she was too important to even look at him. Kevin faked a hurt whine at that while the others chuckled.
"Aw, poor Kev-kun," Logie said as if talking to a small child or pet, "it's so abused..."
"And he deserves it too," Achie said, grinning with a mischievious glint in her eyes.
"You're all so cruel," Kevin said then looked down at his girlfriend, "ready to go?"
"Yeah, let me get my backpack," Logie said as she stepped away to retrieve her bags she had discarded on the ground. Kevin nodded and began chatting with the other two girls until Erin frowned and looked up at the sky.
"Wasn't it sunny a few seconds ago?" she asked. Not that she minded a little rain, but it just seemed strange that the formerly clear blue sky had turned solid grey in the past five minutes.
"I think so," Achie said as she glanced at the sky then frowned, not wanting to get her head wet if she could avoid it.
"Logan, we'd better get going before it rains," Kevin said as he glanced at his girlfriend.
"Right. Bye-bye, peoples," Logie said as she waved to her friends and turned to walk off next to Kevin, but just as the other two were about to wave, a flash of lightening crossed the sky and barrelled down into the ground infront of the couple, tearing into the ground and blowing the two lovers off their feet.
"Logie! Kevin?" Achie cried out as she started to run over to them, alarmed and frightened they had been hurt. Erin was quick to follow, equally upset but not quite as expressive as they looked over their friend's injuries. Logie, miraculously was perfectly fine other than getting the wind knocked out of her but Kevin was unconcious.
"Someone, get the nurse or call 911," Achie started to call out to the other students, but when she turned around and gasped in shock as her eyes widened with disbelief. The busy school lawn was completely empty and still. There wasn't even a car in the parking lot or a voice on the wind. Everyone was gone, vanished into space and time. "What the Hell...?" the brunette muttered softly, trying to get a grip on herself and the situation.
"Oh, I assure you this isn't Hell," a smooth male voice said from behind them, causing the girls to jump and whirrl around.
"What's going on?" Erin asked, frowning at this stranger who had a long black cloak over his body and head to conceal his face. His very presence was very out of place and seemed like something she had seen in a fantasy novel or movie rather than real life.
"It's nothing for you to worry about, my dear," the man said with a light chuckle as he seemed to float over to where Kevin was resting and lifted the college student into his arms, "But I'll be taking this boy with me. Say good bye to your little friend."
"What are you doing? Put him down," Achie snapped, glowering at the man as panic and fear for her friend's life gathered in her chest and melded into anger. "Put him down now!"
"K... Kev-kun?" Logie gasped out, still having trouble drawing in breath after the lightening, or what they assumed was lightening, had knocked her back.
The man only laughed at the three girls and vanished into another flash of lightening that momentarily blinded them. When their vision cleared the rest of the world and students had reapeared again, passing by and celebrating their first day of summer as if nothing had happened. Even the sky had corrected itself back to its original clear and sunny warmth, but something was missing that should of been there. Kevin had been taken away from them.
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Bah, tired of writing for now. @.@;
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2005 4:55 am
I think it sounds like one of thoughs books people stay up all night to finish because you cant put it down
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Codebreaking Autobiographer
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Posted: Mon Jul 18, 2005 4:11 pm
That's a pretty good start. While futuristic/alternate dimension type stories aren't usually my thing, I was fairly interested. I'm curious how the "memory sacrifice" bit will work out.
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Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 9:38 am
Hehe. Thankies. -^^- I'm glad you guys like it.
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For a long time there was a thick silence surrounding the girls that was filled up with doubt, confusion and fear. It didn't seem possible that Kevin had just been taken away into a flash of lightening. There wasn't even a singed blade of grass from the force of electricity nor did anyone seem to notice or care what was going on.
"Did... Did you guys just see that?" Achie finally asked slowly and hesitantly.
"I'm not sure... Maybe we're all delusional?" Erin offered, trying to rationalize what just happened.
"We can't all have the same delusion at once," Achie said then paused, "Can we?"
"K... Kev-kun...." was all Logie could manage to say for a moment before turning to her friends with panic in her eyes and voice, "We have to call the police! Someone! Kevin was kidnapped!"
"Do you really think they'll believe us if we tell them some cloaked freak took him in a bolt of lightening?" Erin asked with a frown.
"We have to do something!" Logie cried out.
"Yeah, but what can we do?" Achie asked with a frown, trying to rack her brain for answers even though it was a little scrambled at the moment from shock and confusion.
"It seems that the Lord Osmar has acted," a soft male voice said from behind them, causing the girls to jump and turn around. Achie immediately went into a defensive stance when she saw a strange man standing behind them dressed in a long white robe. His appearance was that of a young man perhaps in his mid to late twenties with pale blonde hair and brilliant blue eyes that could rival the color of a rick clear sky in spring. Everything about the way he held himself to the way he dressed seem to scream of dignity and power. The girl wasn't sure if she had the strength, being only a yellow belt in karate, but she wasn't going to sit by and let one of her friends get taken again.
Erin frowned some when she noticed that the other kids had dissapeared again and the air had stilled. This was like when the other man had shown himself and she could only hope they weren't going to be taken or harmed as well.
"Who... Who are you?" Logie managed to say, obviously frightened of this stranger, "What are you talking about?"
"There is much to say and little time to speak," the man said, "My name is Gailen, and I am the keeper of the Balance. It is my job to make sure there are no rifts between our world and yours. Unfortunately, I was unable to stop Osmar from taking a human from this world. Now the balance is off."
"You mean Kevin?" Achie asked, "Since you're supposed to fix this balance of yours, you are going to bring him back to us... right?"
"My power has been greatly weakened by Osmar's breach," Gailen said, "As of now I would be no match for his power."
"No, you have to get him back," Logie said almost desperately, "Please... There has to be a way to save Kev-kun."
Gailen seemed to smile some and nodded. "I will temporarily allow you to enter the other world where your Kevin has been taken," he said, "However, you will be unable to survive in it. The world he is in is full of many dangers and creatures that could easily tear you children apart."
"So we're going on a suicide mission," Erin said dryly, "Great. Now that we're all set up for failure, let's get going!"
"I always wanted to go on a real adventure, just like the characters in those animes," Achie said, her eyes twinkling with excitement and joy, "This is going to be fun."
"I... Think you're missing the point here," Erin muttered with an exhasperated sigh.
"No, no, I get it. We've got to save Kevin and we're probably going to get killed doing it," Achie said then turned to the man, "Do you have some magic weapons for us to use or something? They always have those in the animes..."
"As a matter of fact, I do have something like that," Gailen said, "However, there is a price to pay. You must sacrifice your memories in order to obtain the powers I will grant you."
There was a long pause. "Do what?" Logie asked, frowning at that, "I don't understand."
The wizard pulled out a small charm from inside his robe and held out the talisman. The chain was made of a dark pewter and was firmly latched to a daimond shaped rock that was the color of fresh blood. In front of the small neckless was a symbol that resembled an eye that had been inscribed on it. "This will give you the powers you need. Each of you already has a special talent that you were born with and this will take that talent and give you a power based on it," he said, "However, in return you must give the talisman your memories of this world in exchange. Your new powers will implant memories into you and forge a new life in the other world as if you had always lived there. In other words, you're sacrificing your lives and memories of this world in return for powers and lives befitting of the world you're going to."
"I still don't really get it..." Logie admitted with a sigh.
Erin and Achie exchanged glances before the brunette girl stepped forward. "I think I understand," she said, "Me and Erin will give up our memories here in exchange for the powers."
"What?" Logie asked, looking up at them, "Then I'll give up mine too."
"No," Erin said, "One of us needs to remember our world and why we're even there. Since Kevin is your boyfriend, you'd better keep your memories. We'll use our powers to protect you."
Logie was shocked by that, having never assumed her friends would go so far just to help her. "You guys..." she said softly, touched by their unknown devotion.
"Don't mention it," Achie said as she patted Logie's shoulder then got a playful devious glint in her eyes, "You can repay us later with buying us some ice cream."
"I second that idea," Erin said, "but we'll tell you if we think of anything else."
Logie couldn't help chuckling softly. "I should of known there'd be a catch," she said with a shake of her head. Achie and Erin only grinned before turning back to Gailen.
"Place your hands on the talisman," Gailen said, "and inherit the powers of the Roset's Eye." He held the small necklace out to the girls as he spoke.
Erin and Achie hesitated only once before walking over and placing their hands on the stone which they assumed was called the Roset's Eye. The girls shuddered when they felt a firey ice drift from the talisman into their hands. It snaked up their arms then began to fill every pore in their bodies, causing the girls to shiver involuntarily. The freezing power finally made its way to their minds and both girls lost all sense of themselves and were plunged into darkness.
Logie cried out in shock when she saw her friends collapse and started to run over to them when a bright light began to spill out from Gailen's body. She winced and was forced to cover her eyes. "What's going on?" Logie all but shouted in alarm.
"The pact has been made," Gailen said as the Roset Eye dissapeared from his hands and found its way around Logie's neck, "Their memories will call out for them, and the eye will lead you to your friends to help reunite all of you. Logan, you must inlist your friends' aid if you wish to save Kevin. Your duty is now to bring all of them home with you alive. Please, hurry. The Balance is shifting and will break, casting both worlds into chaos if you don't succeed."
"I... I don't understand this," Logie cried out, wondering how Gailen knew her real name, "I'm really freaked out right now."
Gailen didn't answer as the light increased around them, blinding Logie as she felt the world around her start to spin and she lost track of where the ground was before seeming to plumet into a dark spiral.
"See you on the other side," was the last thing she heard before the girl lost all sense of herself.
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Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 9:42 am
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Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 10:59 am
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