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Anyone here have any poetry they want read? I have one in my profile. Here's another, the sequel to it.


Cries of the D*ad

A specter shrieks, the owl mocks its
I have lost my way, masking fot now a prison of no walls
All I hear is my own voice, about the grounds it calls
I feel a touch that is unfamiliar and I know true fear

From the stone walls come inhuman screams
Behind the doors the spirits teem
Their wailing shrieks heighten and keen
I hide from then even though I am already unclean

My human ways have been forgotten
Creatures of the soil walk the surface
For hears they said it could end, but when?
Resisting is useless when eternal rest is upon me

My sleep is deep, but not deep enough
My love lays not beside me
The life behind his eyes is what I dream of forevermore
Until he joins me, I shall dream and sleep

That is actually quite good. Though I am not a certified poetry rater, if there is such a thing, I would give your exact poem an eight out of ten. That is the medium rate so if I brought the rate up you would probably get a six but that is for experts. Sorry to be kind of harsh on the last one.

I actually did like it. Oh, and the part I liked the most was that it actually rhymed! Lots of people think their poems are great but they have no base nor go together well. If I were to rate myself though... I would get a six in intermediates... I really suck.


Well, I guess I should do something small that I make up here and now, just give me a second...

Thou art a flower of yonder.
Ye bloom without help nor emotion
And always art kind and thoughtful.
Though thou art but a flower thou
Art as big as a giant and thy heart
Of one too.

Well, thats more like a sonnet but it sucks. I also have to go to the bathroom and need to get ready so thats all I am able to do now. Oh and it is practicaly summed up as you are growing and are kind yet you leave no trace of emotion. So it sucks.