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 Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 6:44 pm
Monster
Im the monster in your closet
Im the demon under your bed.
Im the tapping on your window
Im the voice inside your head.
Im the figure in your nightmares
Standing with the axe.
Im the footsteps on your stairs
Now Im right behind your back.
The bump in the attic.
The shadows from outside.
It won't matter where you run
It won't matter where you hide.
(emo and un-rhyming biggrin ) Why
How much have you done this?
Why can't you stop?
You abuse me like im nothing.
Im tired of it.
Im on the edge.
Your pushing me off.
I don't want to fall.
But its my only escape.
From the pain im enduring.
I cant ignore it anymore.
Ive taken notice.
And you relize.
What you've done.
How far you've pushed me.
But its too late.
The damage is done.
Its all over.
You got rid of me.
Im off the edge.
On the floor.
In a heap.
How could you do this?
Are you happy with yourself?
For causing so much pain.
And killing me?
LOL i had to change the monster one a little. only the last stanza though. at first it was really horrible then i made it better because i was STRUCK WITH BRILLIANCE! okey no i wasnt.
i would really like to hear your opinion and maybe some advice to write better poems in the future!
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Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 7:01 pm
Lost
slowly falling
through a darkness so thick
it holds me back
it makes me feel sick
these thoughts in my mind
caused by my pain
i continue to fall
going insane
i land on solid ground
but my head is still high
i start to feel lost
i just want to die
then i see a light
its calling me there
im going some place
but i dont know where
i burst through the light
and land on the grass
i feel sunlight
a breeze lazily pass
the warmth on my face
and the dew on the ground
i feel content here
i have been found
this was hard to write and i did a lot of editing but i think its good. i came up with this mostly off the top of my head... biggrin
AGAIN. i would appreciate to hear your opinion and maybe some critique to make my poems better! biggrin
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Posted: Sat Dec 13, 2008 10:33 am
heyyy, that poem Lost is awsome.Keep it up, I like your work and hope to see more of it.
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Posted: Sun Dec 14, 2008 8:05 pm
in the one called monster i had this beat in my head to go with it from the song called cool for cats
it was very entertaining but now im just thinkign about that song instead of the poem sweatdrop
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