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 Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 2:04 pm
If only I knew what you wanted to hear
I'd find all the words and I say them without fear
Because I want you to know exactly how I feel
I want you to know that what I'm saying is real
Cause when I close my eyes
It's your smiling face I see
There's a voice in my head
Saying you're the only one for me
I'd pour out my soul and I'd sing it to you
I'd carve out my heart if you only asked me to
But I'll put on my smile and pretend I'm ok
I'll never complain even if you never hear me
And I swear to you that I'll be just fine
You don't even know that you're the only thing on my mind...
Cause when I close my eyes
It's your smiling face I see
There's a voice in my head
Saying you're the only one for me
I'd pour out my soul and I'd sing it to you
I'd carve out my heart if you only asked me to...
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Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 4:45 pm
The rhyme scheme threw me off a little. But then I found the repetition and it worked a little better. I did like the ending two lines in both middle and end.
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Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 9:28 am
Thanks Tak... it's meant to be accompanied to music, something I've been writing. Who knows, maybe I'll record it and link it here.
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Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 6:34 pm
I would love to hear this done to music! it's a pretty piece, and music is always good to have
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Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 7:47 pm
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Posted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 7:19 pm
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Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 1:07 am
Lovely, blaugh Can't wait for the Music link, whenever you get around to it. xp
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