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In remembrance

Spastic waffles
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Posted: Sun Oct 05, 2008 5:51 pm

Sunday: Praise and worship, pass the cup and take the bread.
This do in remembrance of Me.

Monday: Lie and cheat, steal and covet.
This do in remembrance of Me?

Tuesday: Curse and slander, hurt and malice.
This do…in remembrance of Me?

Wednesday: Fight and argue, hate and scream.
This do in remembrance of Me?

Thursday: Vanity and pride, selfishness and greed.
This do in remembrance of Me?

Friday: Flesh and body, glutton and take.
This do in remembrance of Me?

Saturday: Batter and bruise, beat and abuse.
This…do in remembrance…of...Me.

Sunday: Praise and worship, pass the cup and take the bread.
Get out of My house.

Author's note:
I'm not going to say anything about this one right now. Explinations as needed, but I want to see what you guys take out of it before I give any explinations about it.

Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 3:35 am

It seems kinda Fun to me... like the ending "get out of my house" made me lol... but meh, i'm a little more light hearted than most. XD

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Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 12:59 pm

I'd say that it's about tha fect that people commit so many sins during the week and then simply pretend to be wonderful people at church and pray it out. Looking for the proverbial God-gasm.

Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 7:56 pm

Cyodie

It seems kinda Fun to me... like the ending "get out of my house" made me lol... but meh, i'm a little more light hearted than most. XD

Eh...definitely not what I was going for...

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Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 7:58 pm

Kurai_kotori

I'd say that it's about tha fect that people commit so many sins during the week and then simply pretend to be wonderful people at church and pray it out. Looking for the proverbial God-gasm.

Yeah, definitely.

I especially wanted to tie in the idea of communion and how we only seem to remember Jesus' sacrifice on Sundays.

Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2008 5:07 am

Spastic waffles

Cyodie

It seems kinda Fun to me... like the ending "get out of my house" made me lol... but meh, i'm a little more light hearted than most. XD

Eh...definitely not what I was going for...

sorry, it may be that i was just in a good mood... I did see what you where talking about, and yet, it seemed slightly humorous to me. i mean, the hypocracies of mankind are funny as hell, if one stops to think for a moment.
everyones a hypocrate, weather they admit it or not.

sorry for my many spelling mistakes, i'm too tired to care.

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Posted: Wed Oct 08, 2008 1:16 pm

The ending was funny, but I like the different inflictions on the second lines as the people did various sins.

Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 11:10 am

I like the different ways that you wrote "This do in remembrance of me"

I like the overall tone of the piece because that really is what people do in between church days. Though most also go on Wednesday as well. This... behavior of my fellow Christians sickens me, and I sort of perversly hope that one day He will tell them to leave from his "house."

Congratulations. You made a strong bold statement about the actions of most Christians without offending one. :3

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