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rinalla

PostPosted: Thu Oct 02, 2008 9:05 am


Well, I think I'm done running right now, so here's a new peice for everyone to read. As always, tell me how I could do better, so on so forth, MEOW!

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The quiet screams forever tearing apart the broken,
Simple pleas begging for the release of their pain,
Yet the hunger for the more begins.

Plunging into the darkness of hatred,
Young hearts grow cold.
Tainted by love and lose,
Scared by truth and lies.

Over and over they fall,
Each finding the pleasure unsurpassed.
Twisting and throwing against the wall again.

Morning comes only after the pain has returned.
Reminding each of the past unsettled,
Rending the heart from the mind,
As the civil war of love begins.

The feelings return as dusk edges forward,
Phantom feelings return,
The flaming touch of a person never there.

Tossing through sleep,
There is no rest from the memories.
Everywhere, glass falls.
Shattering the heart into oblivion.

Once again it returns,
The unholy trinity will over come,
Bringing the heart a numbness,
Matched only by pain.
PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 12:57 am


as always, colorfully dark. twisted

i like it. 3nodding

Cyodie

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