That was redundant. I think that you need to make the hate for Nepolious amoungst the half-elves more visable, I mean I knew they hated eachother, but gah, I dont wanna read your book if you dont do something about their hate. That's one emotion that really pulls on a readers heart strings,it makes them woder about why they hate to such an extent. You could elaborate on how the half-elves were a happy,peaceful kind nation type thing. That would make it more exciting to me. And the letters they write to eachother. There's nothing there. No emotion.No forshadowing. Nothing at all you shoudl work on that to ~_@ good luck!
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