Custom Bloodline/Clan

[raijin sasori]

Name:

Storm Release

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Description: Developed originally by the third Raikage this kekkei genkai is an advanced elemental release. Essentially combining two elements Lightning and Water the user creates Storm Release. This combination allows them to create intensely powerful Raiton based techniques that otherwise would not be possible. Through this release also came the discovery of Black Lightning. A technique that is far more powerful than normal Lightning techniques it is only possibly through a secret Clan seal (A Lightning Kanji) that is placed on the user upon reaching the stage required to use such a technique.

Strengths:
- Can Use Storm Release Techniques/Black Lightning Techniques
- All Raiton Techniques are 1 rank stronger (Does Not Stack)
- Shinobi's body is naturally resistant to Raiton ( All Raiton attacks of equal rank or lower rank Do 1/2 rank less damage)
- -1 post when learning Lightning techniques (stacks with other posting bonuses)

Weaknesses:

- Wind Techniques do 1 more rank of damage when directly hit against the user.
- Must have Lightning and Water Elements as two elemental slots
- Learning Any other Element ( Katon, Fuuton, Doton) takes +2 posts (Stacks with other weaknesses)
- Learning Taijutsu/Kenjutsu Style takes +1 post. (Stacks with other weaknesses)

Ability:

- All Clan Raiton techniques (Black Lightning techniques) can be in terms of power increased by 1 rank by water (either a natural large body) or a partners jutsu that is being used in combination (depending on the rank of the jutsu combined with it will depend on how much stronger it is). Opponents jutsu cannot be used to increase the potency of their attack.

- Advanced Elemental Achievement Storm Release/Black Lightning Technique

Stage two: This stage unlocks the Black Lightning techniques which are only accessible through the addition of Lightning Kanji. This Kanji can only be received at chunin level and must be given permission to receive by your Kage. Once received it seals the users Raiton chakra for 2 days and must be trained with for a total of 10 posts to reactivate it and achieve the Black Lightning techniques. Upon reaching this stage the user may select 5 normal Lightning Release techniques and training with them for 5 posts to turn them into Black Lightning techniques increasing their rank by 1 (this however only increases the chakra cost by half a rank rounded to the nearest whole number. Only one of these techniques can be S ranked.)

Bloodline/Clan Jutsus:

Storm Release: Laser Pointer
D-Ranked
Description:
The user will lift up any finger and fire a small bright beam about the with of said finger. The beam is not guided but can do heavy damage if direct contact is made. It's speed isn't that fast but if fire at close range it can be difficult to dodge.

Storm Release: Laser Clone
D-Ranked
Description:
The user will form hand signs and a clone will step out of the user, this clone holds no purpose but as a distraction. When it disrupts an extremely bright flash of light easily able to temporarily blind a number of shinobi. It can't physically attack or cast jutsu simply just a technique used to distract the opponent momentarily or to allow the user time to escape.

Storm Release: Light Show
C-Ranked
Description:
The user will clap both palms together after forming a hand sign forming a bright barrier that fairly durable especially against water and fire techniques. Only something with significant force such as earth or a strong wind attack will be sufficient to break the barrier with relative ease.

Storm Release: X-Ray
C-Ranked
Description:
The user will form some hand signs and then crosses both arms in front of them as they begin the glow, the user will slash several times (3 max with each arm) sending out a wave of photon energy that can cut through most substances. These can be fired in rapid succession or slowly depending on the users preference. This techniques cutting power is extremely powerful as it can cut through most stone objects (able to penetrate roughly 1 foot) and some steel/metal objects (about 6 inches). This cannot cut through custom weapons, however things such as kunai and shuriken will be easily cut through.

Storm Release: Concentrated Beam
B-Ranked
Description:
The user will lift up their hand with an open palm and fire off a since concentrated beam that can be guided using the hand that fired it. This beam is very concentrated and can do significant damage causing 3rd degree burns and concussive force when it connects with a person.

Lightning Release: Black Orb Technique
B-Ranked
Description: Focusing chakra into the users palms they creates a large black sphere of black lightning that can be used to A. Fire multiple small bursts of black lightning each one at the rank of C-ranked technique (maximum of only 3 shots). B. This technique can be fired into something causing a large explosion of Black Lightning to erupt outwards in all directions causing a radius of around 15 feet, the 5 foot epicenter causing extreme burns and concussive damage anything outside of there causes minor burning and electrocution.


Storm Release: Laser Shockwave
B-Ranked
Description:
The user will form hand signs then slam their hands into the ground forming a concussive shockwave to erupt out in the desired direction. This attack is meant to be uses against many opponents to disrupt a combination or to destroy a great number of weaker opponents. It's a rather strong attack but can easily be dodged if it's aimed towards a single person. It's strength is in it's concussive force not it's speed, at close range it can be an incredibly tricky technique to avoid though.

Lightning Release: Black Strike
A - Ranked
Description:
By focusing for a split second and simply extending their arm the user fires a bolt of that can be used for both long and short ranges. If fired at a long range and used to strike the opponent it will take the form of a bolt and deal powerful damage in that one area causing massive burns and powerful scorching. If used in a physical strike than the user will cause a wide spread dispersion of the lightning most likely paralyzing the intended target.

Storm Release: Full Laser Jacket
A-Ranked
Description:
The user will coat their whole body in the photon energy allowing them to momentarily become basically indestructible. The resonating frequency of the photons allows the user to penetrate through most physical attacks, that and it excites the chakra flowing just inside them increasing the speed to the point of after images. The draw back is that it only lasts for a few moments (Two posts) and if used more than once in a battle tendons and muscles will be greatly strained or torn.

Ranton: Reizā Sākasu (Storm Release: Laser Circus)
A-Ranked
Description:
The user creates several bright beams and shoots them at the enemy. A halo of bright energy spreads from the user's hands as this technique is activated. The beams are able to alter their direction after being shot, making it possible to strike multiple enemies with pinpoint accuracy, even bypassing hostages held in close proximity. The user can increase the number of missiles to a great amount to pin down an enemy. The maximum number of shots that can be fired from this technique is 10 (that was the number in the anime)



Storm Release: Eternal Rain
S - Ranked
Description:
The user will form hand signs and then a large sphere highly concentrated of photons roughly two meters in diameter will form in their hand, the user will thrust it upwards causing it to fly up typically 40-50 meters before exploding in a very bright flash dispersing into around ten to twenty thousand small needles that the user can their manipulate to pierce whatever the user desires. The amount of chakra it requires to manipulate these allows it so that this technique has a heavy cost to those who decide to keep it active more than necessary. It costs a D-Rank amount of chakra to manipulate them each post after the initial post of manipulation.

Lightning release: Black Lightning Panther
Rank: S
Description: This technique creates a substantial amount of Black Lightning which takes the form of a panther-like creature that seems to emanate from the user's own body. It can be used to affect multiple victims at once by electrocuting them.This techniques is extremely fast as it moves very quickly (being a lightning attack) towards it's target. Anyone of Jonin rank will have difficulties keeping up with the speed of this technique and those below have almost no chance of even tracking it's movements. Like various other Lightning Release techniques, the potency of this ability can be increased through the application of water (Combining this technique with either a large body of water that is in the environment or an A ranked water technique will increase this techniques own potency by 1 rank). This technique can be used for a total of 2 posts the user controlling the panther forcing it to dart back and forth between opponents capable of hitting multiple targets in this manner. If directly hit by this technique the user will cause massive burns and extreme muscle cramping most likely making whatever part of the body hit no longer useable for the duration of the battle or until a medical shinobi is found.

Storm Release: Ole Romer
S-Ranked
Description:
The user will put both hands together interlacing fingers except for the indexes, having them pressed together pointing out a small sphere of photons will form at the finger tips being about 4 inches in diameter. The user will then aim and release a photon beam that moves near to the speed of light, the beam itself is highly concentrated so that when it fires it doesn't dissipate. The kinetic energy from the photon beam is enough to penetrate pretty much anything making it so that as long as this attack is fire on target that target will have a hole on them, The drawbacks are that the user must take time to correctly concentrate the sphere (requiring a whole post of preparation before it's ready to be fired) secondly because of the force that is required to excite the photons this quickly the attack will either dislocate or break both arms in the user (Depending on skilled they are, Anbu and up will merely be dislocated below that arm will be broken upon using this technique) This technique was developed by the Darui himself and named after the danish astronomer who quantitavely measured the speed of light for the first time.

Lightning release: Black Lightning Finale
Rank: SS
Description: Focusing massive amount of black lightning into their body the user takes several minutes (an entire post) to build up the chakra and then in one single instant releases it outwards causing a huge explosion outwards. This technique creates a blast radius of about 300 feet causing massive electrocution to anyone caught inside it. Those within 30 feet of the user of this technique will likely not survive as the shock will be so much it will likely stop their heart. Anyone caught within the radius overall will likely be knock unconscious and suffer severe burns and electrocution requiring a high ranked medical shinobi to heal them. (this technique takes one post to charge before it may be used and it costs two S-ranked techniques worth of chakra to use. This technique causes strong burns to the user himself meaning that using it twice without medical attention will likely cause severe harm to the user)

 

[Lance Fulgurant]

Karnitis

Raijin Sasori

@Karnitis: So sorry for the long wait, but I will try and help you get this bloodline ready as quickly as possible, now down to business.

1. If their chakra is increased by the star, then do they have to have spent time around it, and if so does that mean they are restricted to one village?

2. If their chakra is increased then simply give them an increased number of chakra points, reducing chakra costs for jutsus has to do with chakra control, not chakra levels.

3. What exactly do you mean when you say that Kujaku chakra is resistant to physical attacks? Do you mean that Kujaku techniques are more powerful against taijutsu? I just don't understand how that's terribly important since people don't try and block ninjutsu with taijutsu, generally speaking.

4. The predation skill cannot give you back chakra, we do not allow chakra absorption in POTS, though simply draining chakra might be alright, I'll have to discuss that one with Blue.

5. For Revival you say that they can break other ninjas out of equal level ninjutsu, but you don't say equal to what: the rank of Revival, the rank of the kujaku member, the rank of the effected shinobi, what?

6. What's the difference between a technique and a jutsu in regards to this bloodline, you have both a list for techniques and a list for jutsu, but those words mean the same thing.

7. For chakra rope, how would the byakugan be able to break it, the byakugan is not a technique in and of itself, it's a doujutsu, meaning that it alters the users visual perception of the world. Also can you give a table for exactly how strong the rope is at each rank, just for clarification.

8. For chakra beast, does the user have to spend the chakra for two jutsus in order to summon the two beasts, I believe that would be for the best, unless you can give me a good argument as to why you should get two for the price of one.

9. For the bird technique, how is it different from the wings, is it supposed to be able to block techniques?

10. For Apparition you say that it can only be used when a ninja is in mortal danger, do you mean just any ninja nearby, or just the Kujaku member, and why would they have to be in danger in the first place? Also does the Apparition use the Kujaku members chakra, or does it have it's own chakra pool?

11. For Implantation, you need to come up with a detailed way for people to acquire the star piece, and could you also be more specific as to how much their chakra and strength is increased, "greatly" is just a bit too vague. Also keep in mind that the greater the benefit, the more severe the cost to speed/strength and all that needs to be.

12. For Dragon, how strong exactly are the blasts supposed to be, like SS, because that is too much for an S rank jutsu to produce, unless there is a chakra cost for each blast made by the dragon. Also a rank for the power of the kujaku waves it can send out would be good. And finally, what is the duration for the technique, or do you simply have to pay a chakra cost to keep it active for every post it stays?

Alright, so just make those corrections/clarifications and we'll take another look, and thanks again for your patience. mrgreen



@Raijin: Cool, i've been waiting for someone to come up with a storm release clan, let's take a look shall we.

1. When you say that "all Raiton techniques are 1 rank stronger(stacks)", what do you mean by stacks, and keep in mind that stacking rank increases from different sources usually doesn't fly.

2. For X-ray, it says it can cut through most substances, can you be a little more specific, can it cut through solid rock, steel, and how deep will the cut go through thick objects, such as a stone wall. Also just add in there that it can't cut through custom weapons, as that is a no no.

3. I think that for the Black Orb, you need to decrease the number of small lightning blasts it can fire to maybe three, it's just not fair to essentially get 5 C-ranked techniques at the cost of one B-rank.

4. For Laser Circus can you give a more specific number of beams that can be shot

5. For Eternal Rain, I think that there needs to be a chakra cost to actively control all of those needles, but at just S-rank cost it can be used an an area of effect attack, the chakra cost to manipulate them should be D-rank for every post the user manipulates their movement.

6. For Black Lightning Panther, how fast does it move. Also you say, "the potency of this ability can be increased through the application of water", can you clarify that, and can you do that with multiple techniques.

7. And finally just make the lightning finale a SS ranked technique since you have to pay the cost for two S ranks anyway.

And that's all I got, when you've got that worked out I'll take another look, overall looks good though, very nice.  

[iAkura-kun]

Alchemy (??? Renkinjutsu) is the ancient metaphysical science/mystical art of manipulating and altering matter by using natural energy. The mystical practice of alchemy to create objects out of raw matter or turn one object into another is widely believed to be capable of anything, but it is a science and as such is subject to certain laws and limitations, all of which fall under the concept of Equivalent Exchange (In order to obtain or create something, something of equal value must be lost or destroyed) One must know the different substances found in matter, creating the need for unimaginable intelligence and critical thinking, as well as understanding the concepts needed for alchemy: Comprehension, Reconstruction, and Reconstruction. Alchemy transmutation circles count as seals, so clan members are usually adept in sealing jutsu.

Rules:
-Cannot transmute anything of the opponent until you reach a certain stage
-Cannot transmute anything intangible
-Cannot transmute without a circle until you reach a certain stage
-Cannot wear transmutation circles on clothing or skin until a certain stage
-Transmutations with a circle costs D-rank chakra. Without a circle costs C-rank chakra

Strengths:
-Able to use renkinjutsu (alchemy)
-Heightened intelligence
-Can observe things on a molecular/proteinic level
-sealing jutsu take -1 post to learn
-Chakra is always +5/10


Weakness:
-Physically weaker than others
-Can only learn two elements (no exceptions)
-Cannot be a Taijutsu user.
-If ninjutsu class is chosen, the chakra bonus is canceled.


Genin

The clan member is still new to the concept of alchemy, and as such, is not an adept at the skill. However, he/she knows basic knowledge of the clan jutsus, capable of using them in battle. They can create a basic transmutation circle.

-User can begin transmutation, though must have a transmutation circle
-Transmutations can only change shape of an object. (change a piece of rock to a shield, change a piece of metal to a sword) Still made of the same substance (if you use rock to make a sword, its still rock)
-Drawing a circle takes one post (so, you cannot transmute the same post you draw the circle)
-Can only transmute once per turn
-Cannot transmute anything larger than you

Matter Knowledge A passive ability, the user uses their clan kekkai genkai to learn what exactly lies within an object. By touching the object with a hand, the user can find out what an object is made of.

Chuunin

The clan member is getting better at alchemy, but still has a long way to go before being considered "skilled". They have gotten better at transmutation circles, being able to draw them quickly, and can now use their abilities to help them greater. (can now activate alchemy during turn they draw the circle)

-Can now transmute the same post you draw the circle
-Can not only change shape of an object, but you can:
fix it (if a radio is broken, you can fix it)
create it (if you draw a circle over a piece of earth, you can make a statue)
change it (basically, change the shape)
break it down (if you have a piece of rock, you can transmute it into several smaller rocks
-Can only transmute 2 times per turn
-Cannot transmute anything larger than car

Jounin

The clan member is now considered a master in alchemy, studying the art all their lives. They are able to perform alchemy without a transmutation circle, something many long for, but they are still now perfect in the art.

-Can now perform transmutations without a circle
-Can now bear transmutation circles on clothing (maximum of 2 circles)
-Can now transmute objects belonging to the opponent (custom swords, puppets, weapons, items)
-Can now change an object (metal to gold, earth to iron) costs A-rank chakra. cannot change mass form (liquid to solid, solid to gas, etc)
-Can now animate objects (create hands that move, create earth statues) Cost B-rank chakra
-Can only transmute 3 times per turn
-Cannot transmute anything larger than a house

Sannin The user is now a master of the kekkai genkai, and he/she is deadly. Thier alchemy has reached a level of deadliness, and some are considered "gods". While it is strictly forbidden, some may transmute humans.

-Can now perform water transmutations (can transmute water) follows same rules above.
-Can now perform fire transmutations (can transmute fire) follows same rules as above. Keep in mind, its fire. if you don't have any protection, you will burn.
-Can now bear 5 transmutation circles on body/clothing
-Can transmute 5 times per post
-Can now transmute human flesh (see below)

Renkinjutsu: Carbon: The user can use chakra to enhance his body, making him stronger. By enhancing the carbon levels of his body, the user's body becomes as hard as diamond. The said effect lasts for three posts. While doing this, the suer's speed is decreased by 1.

1 limb (legs and arms): C-rank chakra
2 limbs (legs and arms): B-rank chakra
2 limbs and chest (legs, arms, and whole chest): A-Rank
Whole body: S-Rank

Renkinjutsu: Body Alteration: The user can change shapeshift a body part to almost any weapon they can imagine. (can change arms to any weapon except ranged weapons. swords, hammers, that type of stuff. stays for 1 posts) Costs C-rank chakra

Members:
- Clan Head:

- Akura Bashirou
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