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Absurd (rant-esk)

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Cyodie

PostPosted: Sun Aug 31, 2008 7:47 pm


i hope you all like this.. i was feeling a little angry, but i feel better now ... uh... please comment! biggrin

Absurd


So you think I'm,
Immature?
Irresponsible?
Unreasonable?
UNREALISTIC?
You dare to call me these,
When you yourself,
Act like a child?
Absurd!
(Absurd!)

My actions realate what i feel,
Or so you say!
Do you even know me?
These years,
Those quite times,
You have talked to me,
Realated to me,
Sypathized with me,
Cryed on me,
Yet you still,
Speak of my actions,
And my thoughts,
As FAULTS!?
ABSURD!
(Absurd!)

Do you know what
I have gone through?
The things i have put up with?
The People i've seen?
The Knowledge i have gathered?
The Work I've put forth
To keep this friendship?
This Relationship?
ALIVE?
Do you know?
DO YOU KNOW?
ABSURD!
(Absurd!)

Was it not,
These very "faults"
That drew you to me?
That made you feel,
Like i am,
The only one,
Who understood you?
Who stood by you?
THROUGH THICK AND THIN?
After all i have gave,
(After all i have kept hidden!),
After everything i have told you,
You still have,
The AUDACITY,
To call me,
WHAT YOU, YOURSELF, ARE?
ABSURD!
(Absurd!)
(Absurd!)
(Absurd!)

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 05, 2008 9:14 pm


Definitely did a good job of conveying the anger. I felt it. The bold and italics, especially the repitition of absurd, really made the poem.

Spastic waffles
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Cyodie

PostPosted: Sat Sep 06, 2008 12:18 am


Wow. Thanks alot. biggrin

yeah, i was pretty mad... >.> i finally know what it means when someone says, "i was feeling ______, so i wrote, and now i feel better!" biggrin
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