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 Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 7:58 pm
So, I couldn't find my poetry books but I did find one of the notebooks that I wrote my stories in. So I decide to do this instead.
Prolouge:
The night covered the land in darkness. No light was shone from the moon as it was hidden by the dark clouds. There was an ominous feeling in the air and the stillness of the night was broken when a bolt of light was fired at a tree.
"Aaah! They've found us! What are we going to do?" A girl asked. She wrapped her arms around an object hidden beneath a crimson cloak. She tried to glance at the damage that the bolt of light did to the tree but she was interupted when another bolt of light was fired.
"I think I heard someone scream around here," someone said.
"We can't stay here! We have to keep moving. I will come out in the open and be a distraction. Then I want you to run and find a safe place to escape to, okay?" asked a woman.
" No, I won't leave you behind!" argued the girl.
"Listen, whatever happens we have to try and keep that from getting into the wrong hands. I will catch up with you when I can. Just do as I say please," pleaded the woman.
Before the girl could argue, the woman ran out and the others spotted her. She ran for the river and signaled the girl to go. The girl ran the other way and when she thought she was far enough, she tried to get herself together. The fear was too much for her to handle and now she had to feel guilty about leaving her mentor behind. She started to walk as soon as she pulled herself together, but then she bumped into something or someone.
" Well, well...look who we have here and look, you brought us a present! Why don't we catch up with the others by the river and you can give it to our leader," the man said sarcastically.
He gripped on her arms tightly. So tight that she would probably be bruised the next day. She tried to break free but his grip was too strong. Soon she found herself being dragged to the river.
"Let go!" she yelled! Then she faced what she thought was the most gruesome face filled with hatred and evil that she's even seen.
[Okay, I will post more tomorrow...we're still in the prolouge.]
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Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2008 8:03 pm
Continues prolouge...
"Hello child. How kind of you and your mentor to bring us a present," the ugly lady said. Then she turned to the girl's mentor who is struggling to break free from the two men holding her.
The girl turned to her mentor, then to the ugly lady. She held her gaze and spoke confindently, "It's not for you!"
"Oh, no, no, no. You don't want to mess with me child. You see that thing your holding belongs to me," the ugly lady warned.
"It doesn't have your name on it. Besides someone as ugly as you don't deserve this. Your ugly in and out!" shouted the girl.
The ugly lady was enraged as a dark aura started to surround her. She screamed, " How dare you!" She started to float around the girl threatning her," You think your so clever don't you! Who you calling ugly, little girl! Your angel deciving face disgusts me! Now give me what I want!"
The ugly lady's dark aura flamed out and she oblitirated the guy that was holding the girl with one of her dark fire bolts to ease her anger. She held out her hand and a silver sword appeared. She attacked the girl with the sword, but the girl dodged right on time and started to run toward her mentor. She plunged onto her mentor breaking her mentor free from the two men holding her, but then they tripped over the rocks and landed on the river. The current was so strong that the girl accidently lost her grip on the red cloak which revealed a small chest.
"NO!" screamed the girl. She started to go after the chest but her mentor caught her.
"It's okay! Let the it go!" screamed the mentor.
"What?! No, we have to go get it. In the wrong hands it could-" Her mentor put a finger on her lips to quiet her. They fought against the raging current until they found a huge rock they could hold onto.
" Calm down, my dear. You see this current is too strong and fast. All we needed to do is get it where evil can't go after it. There is a waterfall up ahead, if it falls down, it will be safe because it is protected by magic. It will get itself to its rightful owner," explained the mentor. She looked at drenched confused face of the girl. She nodded and said," I'll explain everything once we get out of this mess."
The river's current was fiercely rapid and was filled with big rocks. On top of that, the river was also pretty wide. The girls tried to swim on the other side of the river to get to land, but then the girl was hit with a dark bolt of energy. The ugly lady was floating up in the air with her posee running along the side of the river.
"No!" gasped the mentor. She dipped herself down the water and brought the girl up on the surface. She tried to swim across but it was impossible to carry the girl and swim with the rapid moving current. Then she saw a rock up ahead in the middle of a river and let the current carry them to it. She gripped tight on the rock as the girl started waking up.
" Wha-what happened?" the girl asked.
"You were attacked, now hurry before-aaah!" screamed the mentor. The ugly lady had hit her just like she hit the girl. The girl screamed and caught her trainer's hand. Hey grip wasn't gonna last any longery, so the trainer instructed her," Whatever happens you must continue on! Swim to the other side of the river and head for cover in the trees!"
The girl lost her grip of her mentor's hand and screamed, "No!" She heard her mentor shout go and get washed away by the current. She looked up at the sky and saw the ugly lady coming toward her. She swam hurriedly to other side of the river. When she finally got on land, she lay on the grassy earth catching her breath and disappeared into the forest before the ugly lady could catch her...
Chapter one will be posted tomorrow...
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Posted: Thu Jul 24, 2008 10:20 am
i like it so far 4/5 or 8/10 what you like more mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Jul 25, 2008 11:58 am
both is fine tnx! Sorry, I've been busy and couldn't post the first chapter yet.
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Posted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 3:40 pm
~~~Chapter One: The Gift~~~
I curled up into a ball as I tried to catch my breath. It was only a dream I told myself. I looked out my window to gaze at the moon and harsh winds that's taking over the night. There must be a storm coming, I though to myself. I sighed and turned to look at my clock. It said that it was exactly 12 midnight. How bizzare, I thought. Although, with so much creepy things that have been happening all week, I'm not surprised. To think that they're happening on the week of my birthday made it even more creepier. I was now 13 since it's already midnight, I told myself laying back down on the bed.
I tried to go back to sleep, but I was too curious of the weird things that have been happening. How was it that every night of the past week, I've been dreaming about that girl and her mentor? Then there were my friends. Ever since I first told them about my dreams, they've been pretty distant and has been holding secret meetings behind my back. Well, they usually do, but not like this. I mean, I was never bothered by the way they talked in private and stuff because I always thought that I just wasn't there on time to hear about some juicy gossip. But this time, I've been suspecting that they never wanted me to hear it because they've been holding too many secret meetings than usual and school gossip has been pretty slow right now. At first, I thought they were gonna throw me a surprise party, but my best friend Felicity couldn't keep a secret like that. She was never a good secret keeper to start with anyways.
I let it go for now and started to relax. Soon, I was drifting off the sleep again.
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*RRRRRIIIIIINNNGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!**
I groaned and my hand searched for the snooze button on my alarm clock. Once I found it, I pulled the covers over my head, but my mom bolted through the door.
"Good Morning Sunshine! Oh goodness me Jane! Why are you still in bed! It's your 13th birthday! You should be excited and should've barely slept a wink!" boomed my mother.
" Ya, I'm excited...Just not this early." I groaned. My mom pulled the blanket away from my grasp hoping that I would try getting up but I didn't.
" Fine, if your gonna be difficult then I have to result to this!" exclaimed my mom. She went over to my window and opened the blinds then blinding light came through the blinds and shined on my eyes.
" AAaaahhh!!! It's too bright!" I complained. I tossed back and forth in my bed until I fell off.
" Oh stop complaining and if you have just gotten up then you wouldn't have fallen off the bed," giggled my mom.
" Alright already! I'm up!" I groaned and started stomping lazily off to my closet.
" Hurry up! You don't want to be late for school on your birthday! You should be happy that your 13th birthday landed on a friday! Now get dressed and don't go back to bed," my mom warned.
I looked at my closet trying to decide what to wear. Today was going to be a nice day and nice temperature. I decided to wear white capri's, a nice baby blue t-shirt, and blue flats. It was a nice outfit for my birthday, spring, and not much dressed up or else it would be obvious that it was a special occasion and I can't have that. I grabbed my school bag, headed downstairs to eat breakfast, and headed for school.
Chapter One Continues next Post...
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Posted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 3:41 pm
When I got to school, people started greeting me happy birthday. Right then I knew something was up since I never told anyone my birthday except for my close friends. Then I was upset because I thought, I could have avoided "the birthday spotlight" at school. I wondered which one of my friends spilled on me. Then, I saw my best friend Felicity running towards me. Of course, I thought. She always did have a big mouth.
She gave me a big squeezing hug and greeted, " Happy Birthday Ella!!!"
Yes, you heard her right. She called me Ella. I always had a problem with people calling me as they like because my real name was Janella. I wasn't too thrilled about it and some people thought it was too long to say, so they either call me Jane or Ella or Janella. I liked both Ella and Jane, so I just made everyone choose on what they want to call me.
" Hey, Felicity...What did you do?!" I accused.
" What? What do you mean what did I do? Hey, why aren't you dressed up. Come on Ella, it's your birthday!" She complained.
I sighed and pointed to her shirt that said "It's Janella's Birthday!" Then I started," Did you really have to advertise my birthday that much? And I don't want my birthday advertised because I don't like making a big deal about it," I complained.
" You call this advertisement?! Oh please, all of our friends are wearing one! Phoebe made it! Isn't it cool?" exclaimed Felicity.
" Adorable..." I said sounding irritated. Phoebe was one of my other best friends. I always thought that it was cool that she knew how to make clothes and wanted to become a fashion designer one day. She was really good at it. Everyday, she had an outfit that would make every girl in the world envious of her. Most of the time, she practiced her designs on me. She said that everything looked great on me and that I surpass every model out there. I don't know what it is with people, they say that I had a beauty that wasn't humanlike. I totally disagree.
I turned around walking away from Felicity because I couldn't handel this right now. I had to get ready for class, but before I could walk away, she grabbed my shoulder and as I turned around, she put a crown on my head. I asked confused," What are you doing?"
" That is a birthday crown! People here compete with each other to put the best adverstisements for birthdays! Don't you dare take it off or I will ask Lucas to force you to sing with him onstage at your party tonight!" Felicity threatened.
" So...what's your point," I answered weakly. I turned away blushing bright red. I despised the way Felicity knew my weakness and that was Lucas Harlan. Lucas was Phoebe's cousin and the guy that I had a crush on ever since Phoebe introduced us in 3rd grade. I'm now in 8th grade and I still haven't told him how I felt about him but Felicity came close to blurting it out for me.
Tonight at my party, Lucas was suppose to sing a song for my birthday. He was an incredible musician and a great singer. Having me up on stage wouldn't be that bad since I'm not that bad of a singer myself but facing him would result me fainting before I could even go up onstage. Lucas wasn't one of those impossible dream guys that other girls might dream off, but he is popular and attractive around school. The only thing that makes him not off limits is that he's one of my friends because of Phoebe. Without her, I would be one of those girls hoping to at least get in our crowd just to have a chance with him.
The bell rang and Felicity winked at me and gave me the I-know-your-weakness look. She turned around and started to go to class. I sighed and did the same. I looked at the ceiling and I knew that this was gonna be a long day!
Chapter 1 continues next post...
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Posted: Sun Jul 27, 2008 5:16 pm
Omg, I luv this story!!!
I can't wait to see the next update!!!
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 8:03 am
Tnx! I'll post it as soon as I can! I'm sorry if it's pretty long. I usually write a lot. sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:09 pm
Hey!!
I'm totally fine with that!!
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Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 6:41 pm
Chapter on Continues...
When I got to class, I saw my friend, Hope staring at Conner. This was too obvious to even ask her what she's staring at. Although, I totally don't get why they can't just ask each other out since they know they like each other. Actually, the whole school knows they like each other. I smiled then I walked over to Hope.
"You know if you walk over to Conner and talk to him maybe some of your fantasies might come true," I teased Hope. She blushed then gave me a hug. Hope was that friend that's shy but very understanding and innocent. She had nothing dark or evil about her except maybe her dark long curly hair. You could easily see the kind of person Hope was when you first met her. She was sweet, kind-hearted, and innocent in or out.
She pulled away from the hug and looked at me with her hazel eyes. She clapped her hands and screamed," Happy Birthday Jane!" I gave her the look that said tnx but your changing the subject. She then added, " I wasn't staring at Conner. I was staring at the butterfly outside the window."
"Hope you were never a good liar. But if it makes you feel any better, you and Conner are would make a cute couple!" I teased.
I looked at Conner who was reading some novel. I was right, they did make a cute couple. Conner was smart, hot, polite, and caring just like Hope. Hope said that she thought that the best thing she like about him was his British accent. Conner transfered here about 3 years ago from England and he still has his accent. It was the first thing that Hope noticed about him because she thought it was so cute.
Hope frowned at me then sat down. This was a surprise because she wouldn't have given up so easily. But then I realized why when Phoebe came through the door shouting, " Happy Birthday Ella!!!"
I sighed as people started crowding around me and greeting me for my special day. Afterwards, the big question starts coming up. The question that asks why I was a year younger than everyone else. Usually 8th graders are supposed to be turning 14, but not me because I started school a year earlier than I was supposed to. I hated explaining the story for this all the time. It's too bad that Phoebe wouldn't make me a shirt that told the whole story about it.
"Oh please! Give me a break! Janella, do you still think that you can sell that story about you starting school early?! Ya right! The reason why she's a year younger is because she's a geek!" Ginger shouted for the whole class to hear. I sighed and tried not to look intimidated by Ginger. She picked me to be the one she despises the most because she couldn't have Lucas when she wanted him. Ginger was the typical beautiful, popular mean girl that could have any guys she wanted except when Lucas rejected her in 3rd grade, then in 6th grade too. Ginger thought that in 3rd grade Lucas was just not ready for relationships, so she gave it a go in 6th grade but she was still rejected. She knew I liked him and since I was closer to him, she hated me for that.
"That's so not true Ginger! Also, how rude are you to be dissing someone on their birthday! That's low even for you!" Phoebe defended. One advantage of people knowing that it's your birthday is that everyone is on your side. Well everyone but Ginger and her posse that is. Everyone in the room started agreeing and shouting at Ginger. She had no choice but to just drop the whole thing.
"Fine! Happy Birthday...Janella!" She stomped away and into her seat with her posse right behind her. Although, she knew she didn't completely lose because she knew that I wasn't as fond to being called Janella than Ella or Jane.
Chapter one continues next post...
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Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 10:48 pm
Chapter One Continues...
The rest of the day wasn't so bad. People still kept greeting me happy birthday, but I kinda got used to it by 3rd period. I even got used to the every class singing happy birthday to me.
At the end of the day, my mom came and picked me up so we could go shopping at the mall. She asked me like a week ago to go shopping for my party outfit and she was so excited I couldn't say no. It wasn't that my mom had bad taste in clothes, it was because she was up on the latest fashions that I didn't want to go shopping with her. My mom was actually cool, but this meant that I would have an awsome outfit and I would get a lot of attention and I didn't want it.
We went through almost every store in the mall trying on dresses, skirts, shirts, shoes and all that stuff. It's almost surprising that it only took us 2 hours to find the perfect outfit. This was no surprise for my mom because she told me she knew what she was looking for. She's been looking up clothes online all week. It was 6 pm already and my party starts in an hour. We were about to go home when my mom saw this store that she really liked. We were about to go in when I saw a bookstore that I usually go to next to the store. I noticed a sign that said, "Store moving, Huge Sale!"
"Hey mom, I'm just gonna check out that bookstore. I'll catch up with in a sec. ok?" I told my mom. She nodded and I entered the store. I looked around for some journals because my other journals were all full. The only thing I was good at was writing. It was my passion and I was sure that it was what I wanted when I grew up. When I couldn't find any, I saw a teenage girl who was probably 16 that had a name tag which meant she worked there.
"Excuse me, but could you tell me where the journals are?" I asked.
"Oh, actually we're packing them up, but if you want to take a look, we still have some out,"she answered.
We headed over to the journals, most of it was packed already. Then, I spotted the most beatiful journal ever. It was silver and there was a golder hearts with wings on it in the middle. She grabbed the journal and opened it. The page was completely blank except for the the golden heart with wings on the bottom of the page.
"So, I'm guessing you like that journal?" She asked.
"Yea, I'll take it!" I said without thinking. Usually, I look at other journals before I decide on one but this one was perfect.
The teenage girl went over to the cashier and scanned the journal. When I looked at my wallet, I realized that I was a few dollars short.
"Umm...oh great. Sorry, I've been shopping with my mom and I'm a few dollars short. Can I just go get my mom and get some money? I'll be right back!" I pleaded.
"Wait! Is your name Janella?" She asked and I nodded in confusion. She took a plastic bag and placed the journal in the bag. "Here, we need to get rid of some stuff anyways. Consider it a happy birthday gift."
"But how did you-" She silenced me before I finished and pointed at my shirt. I totally forgot that Phoebe made me wear one of the shirts she made for my birthday. It said my name and my birthday.
"Oh! Wait here! I almost forgot!" she ordered. I saw her go over to the pens. Then she came back with a pen that had the heart with wings sign. It was as enchanting as the journal. The pen looked more like a mini wand actually, but it was so pretty. "This is a pen that goes with the journal. Your lucky, this was the only set available!"
"The only set?" I asked confused.
"Ya, we had like this book or supplies exchange promo like weeks ago. We had like a corner of a store that people could trade it books, journals, pens, and stuff that they didn't need and trade it in for other books that was in the corner. We sold the stuff on sale that was in good condition that people traded in. One of those things was this journal and pen," She explained and handed me the shopping bag.
I thanked her and she said,"Enjoy your gift!"
Chapter two will be posted tomorrow...
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 10:46 am
OMG
Ella's age is like mine!!!!
I'm also a year ahead 'since my parents put me in school early!!
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 6:24 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 7:14 pm
Chapter Two: The Party
Mom and I got home with 45 minutes left until the party started or until party guests started arriving. Everything was set up because Jewel and Felicity has already set things up while I was with my mom in our shopping trip. I remember when my mom announced that she wanted me to have a big dance party while Felicity was there and they were both practically screaming so loud that the whole neighborhood could hear. After my mom left Felicity picked up the phone and told Jewel about it. Jewel screamed as loud as my mom and Felicity which probably damaged Felicity's ears. Everyone was excited especially Jewel because she had another "mission" as she called it.
Jewel's "missions" were simple to translated. It's just mission equals party planning. She enjoyed this job very well and she was good at it. Just like Felicity, Jewel was one those life of the party peoples. Those two were like sisters but something that seperates them was that Jewel was known as our great party planner. She plans every one of her friends' parties and she's the head of the dance comittee which means that she also arrange those dances.
After I got ready, I realized that I still had 20 minutes left. I heard Felicity talking to me my mom. Then this made me wonder about Felicity and Jewel. Those two had so much in common and yet Felicity picked me as her best friend. Not that there was something between me and Jewel. It's just that I always wondered why Felicity kept holding on to me instead of letting go and reaching her full potential to be popular. She knew this because I tried to do what's best for her but she wouldn't let me. She told me that popularity didn't mean anything to her. I don't think she knew this though because she was pretty popular but not the queen of the school. Sadly, that was Ginger's job.
I put some things away and straightened up my room just in case someone came in my room. I didn't want them to think that I was that messy. Afterwards, I went out my room and asked my mom," Hey mom, weren't you just talking to Felicity? Where'd they go?"
"Oh, ya! She went to find Jewel at the our ballroom area, room, whatever you call," she answered.
Okay, so we were kinda rich. We had a ballroom in our house but it was mostly for parties, like tea parties, big dinners and stuff like that. It was a pretty big space though. It was as bigger than those ballrooms that most people book for their sweet 16 parties. I reached the bottom of the stairs. I walked through the living room and into a small hallway that lead to two big ellegant white doors with golden designs on them. I turned the golden curled handles and entered into a room of surprises...
Chapter two will be continued in the next post...
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Posted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:00 pm
When will the next part of Chapter 2 come?
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