Whoo! I love the Kid's Next Door! And I love this fic. The plot is a bit used but the writing is great. Is there going to be more or is this a one-shot? I think it's a good stand-alone peice but whatever. There were a few grammatical errors:
xdark-phobiax
The Delightful Children
where already on his tail...
This mistake was reapeated throughout. It should be 'were.' 'Where' refers to location.
Quote:
The Delightful Children stood still for a moment, listening for the
leaduh.
I realise you're being true to their speech but it really isn't necessary to use 'leaduh' instead of 'leader.' It interupts the flow of the writing.
Quote:
Numbuh 4 exclaimed, running off without a word in from
Numbuh 1 or 5.
Since you're referring to two people, it sould be 'numbuhs'
There was also a point where I think you used 'there' instead of 'they' but I can't find it
sweatdrop Lovely bit of writing anyway
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