Beyond The Shadows

• Artist: pompoennetje
• Description: I wanted to try something dark but not too depressing.
  I ended up with this. And I am really unsure about the ending of this poem. So many things that rhyme with believe but didn't really matched.
  
  The word 'night' was actually the word 'darkness' but I changed it because I thought the word would be in the poem too much. Not sure if it really fits tho. :/
  Critique is more than welcome.
• Date: 08/18/2011
• Tags: beyond shadows

I face the unknown
Take another step all alone
Further into the darkness
I am too curious

Somewhere beyond the shadows
This place is godless
Filled with demons and lies
But I'm the one in disguise

Here in the darkness
I tear down the walls
Infect everything in my way
It's a game I want to play

With my own bare hands I smash
Tear down the walls till I crash
Trying to break free and explore
What I'm unknowingly long for

In the night I perceive
There must be a way to believe
That I can break through
If I only wanted to

Comments

[pompoennetje]

Really? Thank you!

[Rogue Melody Angel]

I really like this poem, everything fits perfectly!
Everyone can relate to this, especially those who wants to find themselves.