dreams slowly fade away

• Artist: Childofthegods
• Description:
• Date: 07/10/2009
• Tags: dream away

what do u do
what do u say
as u watch ur dreams
fade away

ur dreams walk away
ur joy goes too
what are u supposed to say
wen the one u love walks away from u

wen ur life loses its meaning
an u think no1 loves u
what are u supposed 2 say
what are u supposed 2 do

watching rainbows
turn 2 clouds of gray
what do u do
what do u say

Comments

[ClairWest]

Hmm...Spelling mistakes. That's pretty much all I notice.
Yes it is repetitive, but that is actually a poem trait. Some are repeated over and over. I really like it, but it needs to be polished up a bit.
Don't listen to them. Yes. Spelling is very bad. But, the poem, which is what is to be judged, is very good.

[Childofthegods]

thank you shoulda_said_no

[l-Phagnomenal-l]

well your a hoe and i think it is good and its not finished so blah i like it so go die

[The Sixth L]

Poor spelling, words not written out all the way. Repetitive to the point of annoyance. I don't mind it being a fragment, but it doesn't seem like Arena material. 2/5