Hey! This is in reply to a really old thread: I just wanted to say thanks! I bought that one book about inking that you recommended and have been practicing how to make my lines less messy and create decent line-art. xD I'm slowly improving, but I still have a long way to go. You helped steer me in the right direction, though, I think! Thanks!
I was trying to view your site today but its coming up dead. I also wanted to extend and invite to our High Quality gaian artists group on DA if you have an account there: http://gaia-online-artists.deviantart.com/
i'm in the middle of the short story and there are a few things I have to say.
The first is that you REALLY should have someone check your grammar before posting. it really takes someone out of the moment to see the word "here" instead of "hear". The other thing is that your story has no flow. The PICTURES do, but your words jump from one. moment. to. the. next. FURTHERMORE the placement of the words suck. In a comic you really have to keep track of where you are going. If you are in the middle of a sentence or thought it cuts it off if you have to turn the page. Whereas if you need a pause or a moment of suspension in a story THEN you DO want to cut it off and go to the next page. use distance and word boxes to your ADVATANGE. It is not only about looking pretty, but reading smoothly.
I hope this unasked for critique helped ^.^ I would really work on your writing and flow f I were you. One of the best ways to do that is to read a few books. I reccomend Enchanted By Orson Scott Card.