This talk was requested the most! (by three people, yay)
Anywho, this talk is going to include the a little some'n some'n about the problems with the fiction, the original author's words (because she's over at my house right now), and what is to come.
Problems with the fiction: We kind of screwed up at Chapter 3, it was fast-paced, and omniscient p.o.v. was a bit confusing. All my fault, I knew nothing of writing scenes like that, trying to put it in a blind man's point of view. Then into Misora's view. And Misora had a very awful reason on running away, to the reader, but that's her character. She's sensitive a bit, and isn't that exposed to society, so she thinks slowing Shuhei down is the worst thing in the world. Which it isn't. Then there's a ton of more problems with the story, grammar, and cringe-making scenes with the fiction.
And I am proud to admit these problems, makes me feel better actually. I'd rather admit them to show I wish I could do better than leave it as it is. I see Quizilla as a rough draft for this story, then after I proof-read it, edit, i'll submit it into Fanfiction.net.
M4SSACRE: Hello, author here, I'd like to speak about the story and what I'm planning to do.
The story, to me, is absolutely a hobby to me. It's the longest I've ever stuck to a fiction of mine, usually I give up and move on, but this fiction is different. I am co-writing it with my best friend, and is creating side stories to myself when I'm bored on a journal app.
I take time trying to figure out what to do with the story, it all has to do with me interacting with my social life, learning what's wrong and what's right. I've been writing this story for quite a while and learned a lot on the way. I keep thinking of making a better version, but that's until we finish it on Quizilla and transfer to Fanfiction.net.
Now, what I'm planning to do is make longer chapters and cram in the carnival scene into chapter 5, or delete all the crap I added into chapter 5 and just put in the carnival scene. Also, I hope to download PaintToolSai safely so I'm not stuck with this crappy demo.
That is all.
Jacob here, so there, a nice IBYNIMT talk.
Have a hot summer day my lovelies