Spadoozle-Spaz
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Here is the beginning of a story that i'm writing, more of the introduction. i would really love to have opinions on this. And if anyone would like to read more PM me. I can send you the rest of the story. (note that i have not yet finished this story, so whatever i send you will be from the beginning up to where i have stopped.)

In a small forest years ago, there lived a little girl named Eva. She was only a young kitsune who was alone and scared, her parents torn from her in the great battle just days before. Every adult and teen were called to fight. They fought willingly and hard to defend their forest, their home, from the great beasts. These beasts were wolf-like in appearance and larger than bears. Their teeth were long and jagged, their saliva an unusual blue. Their fur ranged from brown to black and their giant paws were always yellow. The large claws that slid out of the beast’s paws colored from black to orange. The eyes were always the same: Bright red. When the giant beasts slumbered, they hummed. These beast’s had fallen to the earth when the young girl was a few days old. They took over the forest in a matter of days and enslaved the inhabitants. They spoke of themselves as higher beings, but were in reality very slow minded. Their leader was bigger than all of them. And his features were quite different. He had Red fur and green eyes. his feet were white and his claws brown. His chest had a sort of mane, The thick fur was not as dark as the rest of his fur. and in the middle of his mane, a small, white diamond coloring his fur. No one knew the names of the other beast’s , but he made his name known. His name was Najiro Krad. And he was very intelligent. The beast’s had very acute senses.