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The Pain of Success It hurts when its right When we continue to fight and my chest gets tight from the anger and freight So you blankly stare like you dont care As if your looking at air which pierces so i cant bare Drilling through my body and i lose control and get sloppy Someone please stop me before my rage breaks free Then i cant think of love all i want to do is slash and shove feeling shunned from above as i wipe clean these gloves You made me do it, you pushed me too far and now my heart has a permanent scar where love was supposed to dwell, but now is charred To be left alone deep in the dark........

Posted by: The Brownie Wanter Tue May 15, 2007 @ 01:54am

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Koboshi the Chaos Spirit
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Commented on: Fri May 18, 2007 @ 01:44am


	oooooooo i got first comment!!! 3nodding any way life is unusually cruel to me....................maybe i should attend church for once...........and um i dont entirely understnd poems they make my head spinny lol but this one made me kinda sad.........and i didnt even understand it............. sweatdrop

Commented on: Sat May 19, 2007 @ 02:45am


	dude why are all your poems of negative stuff. try and write on of positives. i like the ones your writing but it makes me sad. write one that is happiness instead of pain. i bet it will be good. i think i showed you my one that looks like a negative but it's a positive. if you wanna see it just tell me. oh and there is more tolfe than pain so don't give me that kind of crap....oh and i need to ask you about something. well it's more of i need advice on what to do.

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Commented on: Mon May 21, 2007 @ 10:41pm


	for me poems tend to draw me to think of negative things as well. when i try to express myself i'm often reminded of the mistakes i've made and the pain i've gone through. except i dont write poems i'm more of a drawer... i draw lots of depressing things often. lol that was random and overly expressive. anyway... thats a horrible thing to go through and i'm talking about the poem. ninja

Commented on: Mon May 21, 2007 @ 11:47pm


	hey its cool it makes me seriously think of life I think that feelings are more important than words but words can be used to express feelings that you want others to know.