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Not sure if I said I'd like to join this! If I didn't then I just want to say that I am o3o

I may do a poem because why not?
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
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Dear Guardian, this piece is for you,
So i hope you hear me clearly,
That is, without crystal

There once was a time,
Backing up here's the rhyme,
I know it aint chill from my heart to thine,

Most people don't rap biblicly
but honestly it sickens me
when people like he take advantage of thee

Here is, what i really want to say,
Here is, just go the ******** away!
Here is, you trying to trick me Which (Witch)
Here is, me stomping your face b***h!!!

How dare you call anyone family!
When all you do is steal and ban from me!
What i deserve! My right, not yours!
I wish the best for you behind locked windows and barred doors!

So here's the reason i spit from all the damage you give me, KIDS!
Bring it on, invite your friends and mom!
Oops, i forgot, you treat them like me,
...
So now they're dead, or gone!

Ladies and gentlemen i apologize
for the take-down
and breakdown
of everything you made of this clown

But im still ******** sick of this!
Bout to take a piss,
on anyone who in this next part
Shuts Their ******** Eyelids!

Im so sick of boys who can't,
MAN UP!
When some thing goes wrong, and they dont
STICK UP!
Their guns in the air
And say who cares!
We're doing good,
...
And who's still there?

I pitty the man who;
can't crawl on stage
To say who he is!
What he believes!
Or the names of his kids!

Oh that b***h mocked me!
let me guess
"I can't believe he did this!"

My only two children
are 'Faithfull' and 'Ligit'
The one who hits back!
For the one who gets hit!!
(Shout-out to my street kids that i left on Olymipis, my heart goes out to you little guys. Always more power to you, every ounce i got. And you better ******** know it.)

b***h!
My Street kids are bad a**!
Graduated Last,
but best...
With...
...
Top class.

So here's a little hint from me,
what this freestyle is meant to be,
is just a speech about integrity.
So if you want to be family
with the name 'Good Company!'
Then just be true to who you're supposed to be.
Which was originally what you wanted to be.

When i was a kid i wanted to be a teacher
but my obsessive mom wanted a preacher.
My dad's never happy less he's with her,
so here's my word,
and i became a rapper,
My mom, please someone slap her,
I can hear her laughter,
From wickin spells cast after
I left a certain place.
scream crying Never to see my BABY! crying scream
Nor baby mama's face!

So here i sit and swallow my fate...
Least i do it like a man,
And take my plate,
And do everything i can,
To follow a ******** plan
that comes from thin air.
And i honestly don't care
If you bash on a god
that i ******** know is there!!!

So here are a few lines,
due to the dedication of this rhyme.

Dude, you know who you are...
What you did, left a scar.
So if you see me, run.
Cause if i see you jump...
ILL GUN!!

Ill see to it personally
that every ounce inside of me
Brings what you did or done to justice
No weapons,
No Tools,
(Not counting you)
JUST-US

No more rhymes?
You spat in my face,
You ******** disgrace!
You lied, then atempted to break my nose
Just so you could shoot black
Do rows,
And ******** some NASTY a** hos.

And now you try to run around acting like a bad a**?
Dude! Your'e weed, tastes like burnt grass,
and your skin looks like it needs a sand blast!!

I laugh when you think you can jump people for black!
Cause when i see it, you'll have a mirror, FLASHBACK!
Not just for me, but for them, and family's back.
And when your a** is behind bars, AGAIN!

BAP!!!



Zacheriah,

Good Company,

Zach Portch (Monk)-ie
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
And, after all, what is a lie?


There's no minimum. If you wanted to put just a sentence you could. Though i doubt that would win. lol xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.
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No questions ma'am.
Feedback please.

TheLastOfUs
Dear Guardian, this piece is for you,
So i hope you hear me clearly,
That is, without crystal

There once was a time,
Backing up here's the rhyme,
I know it aint chill from my heart to thine,

Most people don't rap biblicly
but honestly it sickens me
when people like he take advantage of thee

Here is, what i really want to say,
Here is, just go the ******** away!
Here is, you trying to trick me Which (Witch)
Here is, me stomping your face b***h!!!

How dare you call anyone family!
When all you do is steal and ban from me!
What i deserve! My right, not yours!
I wish the best for you behind locked windows and barred doors!

So here's the reason i spit from all the damage you give me, KIDS!
Bring it on, invite your friends and mom!
Oops, i forgot, you treat them like me,
...
So now they're dead, or gone!

Ladies and gentlemen i apologize
for the take-down
and breakdown
of everything you made of this clown

But im still ******** sick of this!
Bout to take a piss,
on anyone who in this next part
Shuts Their ******** Eyelids!

Im so sick of boys who can't,
MAN UP!
When some thing goes wrong, and they dont
STICK UP!
Their guns in the air
And say who cares!
We're doing good,
...
And who's still there?

I pitty the man who;
can't crawl on stage
To say who he is!
What he believes!
Or the names of his kids!

Oh that b***h mocked me!
let me guess
"I can't believe he did this!"

My only two children
are 'Faithfull' and 'Ligit'
The one who hits back!
For the one who gets hit!!
(Shout-out to my street kids that i left on Olymipis, my heart goes out to you little guys. Always more power to you, every ounce i got. And you better ******** know it.)

b***h!
My Street kids are bad a**!
Graduated Last,
but best...
With...
...
Top class.

So here's a little hint from me,
what this freestyle is meant to be,
is just a speech about integrity.
So if you want to be family
with the name 'Good Company!'
Then just be true to who you're supposed to be.
Which was originally what you wanted to be.

When i was a kid i wanted to be a teacher
but my obsessive mom wanted a preacher.
My dad's never happy less he's with her,
so here's my word,
and i became a rapper,
My mom, please someone slap her,
I can hear her laughter,
From wickin spells cast after
I left a certain place.
scream crying Never to see my BABY! crying scream
Nor baby mama's face!

So here i sit and swallow my fate...
Least i do it like a man,
And take my plate,
And do everything i can,
To follow a ******** plan
that comes from thin air.
And i honestly don't care
If you bash on a god
that i ******** know is there!!!

So here are a few lines,
due to the dedication of this rhyme.

Dude, you know who you are...
What you did, left a scar.
So if you see me, run.
Cause if i see you jump...
ILL GUN!!

Ill see to it personally
that every ounce inside of me
Brings what you did or done to justice
No weapons,
No Tools,
(Not counting you)
JUST-US

No more rhymes?
You spat in my face,
You ******** disgrace!
You lied, then atempted to break my nose
Just so you could shoot black
Do rows,
And ******** some NASTY a** hos.

And now you try to run around acting like a bad a**?
Dude! Your'e weed, tastes like burnt grass,
and your skin looks like it needs a sand blast!!

I laugh when you think you can jump people for black!
Cause when i see it, you'll have a mirror, FLASHBACK!
Not just for me, but for them, and family's back.
And when your a** is behind bars, AGAIN!

BAP!!!



Zacheriah,

Good Company,

Zach Portch (Monk)-ie
And, after all, what is a lie?




I have a question for you was that for this contest?


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
And, after all, what is a lie?


There's no minimum. If you wanted to put just a sentence you could. Though i doubt that would win. lol xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. ^^
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
And, after all, what is a lie?


There's no minimum. If you wanted to put just a sentence you could. Though i doubt that would win. lol xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. ^^
And, after all, what is a lie?




no problem love your avatar btw


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
And, after all, what is a lie?


There's no minimum. If you wanted to put just a sentence you could. Though i doubt that would win. lol xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. ^^
And, after all, what is a lie?




no problem love your avatar btw


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. =D This one or the crow one?
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TheLastOfUs

Zacheriah,

Good Company,

Zach Portch (Monk)-ie
And, after all, what is a lie?




I have a question for you was that for this contest?


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


I was seeing if anyone would object to it being in the contest.

Its about 1/2 of the poem, the poem itself is a story

Or its a story written through a series of poems...

Honestly Im not sure myself.

But its based on true happenstances.
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You said that there is a 10k word max for stories, but is there a minimum?
And, after all, what is a lie?


There's no minimum. If you wanted to put just a sentence you could. Though i doubt that would win. lol xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. ^^
And, after all, what is a lie?




no problem love your avatar btw


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


Thanks. =D This one or the crow one?
And, after all, what is a lie?




The one you have now


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TheLastOfUs

I was seeing if anyone would object to it being in the contest.

Its about 1/2 of the poem, the poem itself is a story

Or its a story written through a series of poems...

Honestly Im not sure myself.

But its based on true happenstances.
And, after all, what is a lie?



I have no problem with it being in the contest, it's the most original contest entry i've ever seen xD


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I was seeing if anyone would object to it being in the contest.

Its about 1/2 of the poem, the poem itself is a story

Or its a story written through a series of poems...

Honestly Im not sure myself.

But its based on true happenstances.
And, after all, what is a lie?



I have no problem with it being in the contest, it's the most original contest entry i've ever seen xD


'Tis but the truth in a masquerade.


That's cool.

I figured i would edit out the extremely violent and disturbing parts,
Due to the fact that im already close to breaking the rules.
But thank you, its nice to have constructive feedback.

I don't really expect such a positive response...

Would you say im in the running to place?
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That's cool.

I figured i would edit out the extremely violent and disturbing parts,
Due to the fact that I'm already close to breaking the rules.
But thank you, its nice to have constructive feedback.

I don't really expect such a positive response...

Would you say I'm in the running to place?
And, after all, what is a lie?



in the running to place? what lol
if you mean for first place i can't say since yours is the only entry so far lol and the contest doesn't end until November lol


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