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Let's see what I got. Hyaaah! *throws die*
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Let's see what I got. Hyaaah! *throws die*
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13 gives me a triolet, so there, a triolet!
... I think I hate what I did. crying

Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again
I shall get lovelier and rid my lies
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
I shall put on my skirts and become wise
I shall be a girl you'd like, but what then?
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again

I roll again and I get...
Edit: 8 gave me an... an... englyn cyrch.
...
Need more research.
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13 gives me a triolet, so there, a triolet!
... I think I hate what I did. crying

Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again
I shall get lovelier and rid my lies
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
I shall put on my skirts and become wise
I shall be a girl you'd like, but what then?
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again

I roll again and I get...
Did you know that if you tie 17 electric eels together they'd create enough electricty to power the town of Looneyville, Texas for 7.35 hours but only in Spring? It's a fact! Ok Bye!
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AnneLaurant
13 gives me a triolet, so there, a triolet!
... I think I hate what I did. crying

Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again
I shall get lovelier and rid my lies
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
I shall put on my skirts and become wise
I shall be a girl you'd like, but what then?
Still, I will never have place in your eyes
For never shall our paths entwine again

I roll again and I get...
Did you know that if you tie 17 electric eels together they'd create enough electricty to power the town of Looneyville, Texas for 7.35 hours but only in Spring? It's a fact! Ok Bye!


Diedrich you're so quirky xp

BelovedNightDance rolled 1 4-sided dice: 4 Total: 4 (1-4)

Eeeek I haven't entered a poetry 'competition' since I was a child but the whole point of coming on here was to challenge myself so here goes... eek

I got Pleiades.... Hmmmm!

Mindful

Meditation I know
Makes one grow up and through
My monkey mind needs peace
Many thoughts scatter wild
Must learn to slow down soon
Most times I try it works
Meeting my mind again

Thanks for the challenge! heart

TeddyEscobar rolled 1 20-sided dice: 10 Total: 10 (1-20)

Let's give this a shot shall we?

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Cageless rolled 1 20-sided dice: 15 Total: 15 (1-20)

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First time I've heard of a Pantoum (haven't heard of most of these, lol).
Okay, okay, learning time. Be back later*

Edit: I've never done a structured poem! =D.

Edit: It is abab in quatrain (four line stanzas) with either no particular limit to line length, or a fixed rhythm of about 8 to 12 syllables (if adopting the Pantun).

Here's how it goes (note the very first lines - 1 and 3 - and the very last lines must match):

1 2 3 4
2 5 4 6
5 7 6 8
7 9 8 10
9 3 10 1



P.S. - I think this came out as an homage to Robin Williams, having, just a day ago now, watched for the first time his wonderful movie, the "Dead Poets Society".
~ Carpe Diem


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I gave it all before my death
Until my hands befell the cold -
When silence overtook my breath,
As thunder passes; not to hold.

Until my hands befell the cold,
I spoke to ears, near and distant;
As thunder passes - not to hold;
Closer - more - they care to listen.

I spoke to ears, near and distant -
Never pushing for their love, yet
Closer, more, they care to listen,
Knowing, voices, they will get.

Never pushing for their love, yet
Through their words I am not gone -
Knowing voices they will get
So, through my verse, I'll carry on.

Through their words, I am not gone
When silence overtook my breath -
So through my verse, I'll carry on;
I gave it all before my death.

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Try, try again.

Edit: Tritina research time!*

Looks like a short poem with line endings. I might try it while rhyming...and may do more than one.
Okay, so...

A, B, C
C, A, B
B, C, A
ABC

Edit: I have a hard time not naturally counting syllables (and wanting them to keep rhythm). . .

The World, Not Us

Sunshine rests upon our face;
Fields - we dance - in every place;
Lively warmth; flowers chased.

We do this now, before we're chased
By old age, from this earthy face -
We won't regret this precious place.

We will not settle long in place -
Far too many sights yet chased;
Lives to share with stranger's face.

A face to hold each place we've chased.

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. . .Third time's the ALSO FUN.


Edit: LOL, okay. I'll have to research this...I don't like most haiku's that are not REALLY good (at least it's actually a style I partially recognize...xD).

Edit: Okay, so.
Literal, with little room for abstract, connecting two ideas, and (as I remember Pi saying) related to nature.

~ Japanese would (due to the degree of terseness) imply the season (saying 'blossom' for spring, or 'crow on a branch' for autumn, 'snow' for winter).

It also takes a view of the universe where the observer and nature are not separated.


Just read some translations (lessening the product, no doubt) of Japanese Haiku's the 'Three Masters" - Matsuo Basho, Taniguchi Buson, and Kobayashi Issa. I remember my amazing poetry professor taking us through these. They became sublime to me - 'Heat-lightning streak' , 'In the old stone pool' , 'On the one-ton temple' , 'Moonrise on mudflats' , 'only one guy' and 'Cricket'. Also 'Cosmos In bloom' by Suiko Mutsushita, and 'Even the croaking of frogs' by 'Hakuro Wada.

To write one, try few adjectives, shun needless conjunctions, and make the tense present.

Basho said that haiku is 'simply what is happening in this place, at this moment.'

You may try to report a situation through the senses, but it will be meaningless unless the reader feels something. It starts us thinking and telling.

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I'm then presented with modern haiku which may not stick to the seven syllables, as it is, more importantly, an art of few words.

A Japanese verse form that has three unrhymed (ahh!) lines of five, seven, and five syllables.


~ These general notes were extracted from my college book 'An Introduction to Poetry', Thirteenth Edition, by X. J. Kennedy and Dana Gioia

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'Clear skies expose these
Beautiful dancing dots'
Is what they tell me.

Cageless rolled 1 20-sided dice: 20 Total: 20 (1-20)

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Good times for funzies.

Edit: I KNEW IT!!

Okayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy............-__- Research commencing. . .


A complex French verse form, usually unrhymed, consisting of six stanzas of six lines each and a three-line envoy.

The form is as follows, where each row indicates the stanza position and the numbers represent end-words:

1 2 3 4 5 6
6 1 5 2 4 3
3 6 4 1 2 5
5 3 2 6 1 4
4 5 1 3 6 2
2 4 6 5 3 1
(6 2) (1 4) (5 3)

The sestina follows a strict pattern of the repetition of the initial six end-words of the first stanza through the remaining five six-line stanzas, culminating in a three-line envoi. The lines may be of any length, though in its initial incarnation, the sestina followed a syllabic restriction.

the closing envoy contains all six words, two per line, placed in the middle and at the end of the three lines.

Info gathered from:
http://www.poets.org/poetsorg/text/poetic-form-sestina
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/learning/glossary-term/sestina

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