Don't Hide What's Inside--Closed; Judging Begins.

[The Passing of Time]

The Love Mutt

Oh, that's alright then. I feel quite relieved. biggrin

[piggg]

The Love Mutt

Piggg

28

Plot: 7
Plot Development: 6 – I liked where it was heading, but I feel like the structure was set up fairly confusing. I normally don't mind sectioned chunks, but I felt like they read as too short with too choppy of a transitioning between each one.
Grammar/Spelling: 8
Entertainment: 7 – Again, I liked where it was heading, but I felt there were gaps in information that soured my interest.

Thank you for the feedback, always appreciated. PhantomKitsune pointed out a handful of the grammatical errors I had, but if you wouldn't mind noting which ones you found, that would be great.

[cranberry_kiwi]

Thanks to both judges for their honest feedback. After re-reading my piece, I see how I could've expanded on it and sped through things that should've been addressed more. I'm not complaining, but I'm somewhat surprised no one noticed the foreshadowing of Torsten being forced to sleep next to his father. xp Anyway, I had fun with this contest! Thanks!

[Rotsab M. Hyolf]

The Love Mutt

I'm gonna say a few things up front. First, I was honest. It's not always nice. I didn't hold back in my comments on your pieces. If you have any further questions, or (especially in terms of grammar) would like to see more specifically what I meant (i.e. where the comments are on my open office file, etc.), let me know.

Rostab M. Hyolf

36

Plot: 9.5
Plot Development: 9
Grammar/Spelling: 8.5
Entertainment: 9

Mildly confusing structure at times, but overall well put together. Couple very minor spelling errors/typos (it's Plexi-glass, not pexi) that actually made me wonder if your L key was broken, but anyway xD I also think you need to stop and re-examine some of your sentence structures. I liked the idea of the insertion of definitions, but they still should be grammatically sound. I wondered throughout the whole thing, “I'm really enjoying this, but does it fit the prompt?” Then I reached the end, and it was fantastic. I love the sudden realization that it's two males, and how you brought in typical societal ignorance, seeing violence where there was love, etc. Nice job.

As the others have said, the critique is much appreciated! I'm not surprised there's been people in the past who were hostile about it (the WF gets hit by a handful every so often), but upset nonetheless. It seems odd to enter a competition with critiques and then dismiss them. I actually didn't know it was plexi-glass! I feel like an idiot, haha. I get a notice saying plexi- and pexi- are wrong, so I went with the pay I pronounce it. ...I should probably put that poor 'l' back into my pronunciation as well. xD

Do you have any examples off-hand of where it was confusing or grammatically incorrect? I tried to sort of 'rule of cool' it, but if it's distracting I'll definitely edit it (I'm already planning on removing the extra 'h' in lohn once Selbe gives a critique... is she giving a critique?). I very much appreciate both your feedback and Phantom Kitsune's, as I said before it doesn't just help with the individual piece but also makes me more aware of what errors I'm likely to make and miss, and what traps I should avoid in the future. (I swear I read over it like five times, I'll be sure to read it aloud next time!)

I'm glad you found it fit the prompt after all though, and that you loved the ending! Haha, I was admittedly a little afraid that two gay robots might not fit the prompt. I actually went through two different possibilities for the contest before settling on it. Thanks again for the critique and, again, I'm so happy you enjoyed it! <3

[Writer Selbe]

Am I the only person who finds it weird that the OP is never in this thread? I mean, geez, what's wrong with her? Anyway, here's how things look:

In first, Hyolf.

Second Passing.

Third is piggg.

We have yet to determine honorable mentions and judge favorites. To elaborate, while both received the same score (1st and 2nd), Hyolf's was a more unique story, and seeing as there had to be a tiebreaker, this was it. However, both still receive recognition and awesome prizes. If all goes as planned, the first three will also be receiving AGWL points as well as the honorable mentions and judge favorites accordingly.

Also, seeing as a majority of the people in this thread are older than me, and I hired judges to do work for me, I will not be giving a critique unless specifically asked for.

I will send trades as soon as time permits.

[The Passing of Time]

Congratulations to everyone! biggrin

And thank you very much. whee

[Rotsab M. Hyolf]

Oh my gosh, thank you guys so much!!!! I am so, so flattered. Like Passing said though, congratulations to everyone; I have to admit a lot of the stories were insanely cool and just yeah, wow. I was really blown away by a lot of it. Thank you thank you thank you. <3333

Also, Selbe, if it doesn't sound too snooty to ask, I would love to have a critique from you as well? I've loved all of the critiques and feedback, in all honesty, it really helps a super lot.

Thank you thank you again, and thank you to the judges for taking time to critique and judge all the pieces, and thank you everyone who participated and gave me cool things to think about and read!