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Fantasy 0.37185929648241 37.2% [ 74 ]
Sci-Fi 0.095477386934673 9.5% [ 19 ]
Gothic 0.030150753768844 3.0% [ 6 ]
Vampire 0.075376884422111 7.5% [ 15 ]
Mystery 0.055276381909548 5.5% [ 11 ]
Horror 0.1105527638191 11.1% [ 22 ]
Romance 0.13065326633166 13.1% [ 26 ]
Werewolf 0.035175879396985 3.5% [ 7 ]
Action/Adventure 0.07035175879397 7.0% [ 14 ]
Periodic 0.025125628140704 2.5% [ 5 ]
Total Votes:[ 199 ]
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Exactly what the title says. It's just like the AAY games in the Word Game Forum sections only involving the Writing Arena.

Look the Avi Above You up in the Arena and then pick one writen peice of work by them to read, rate, and comment (you pansies!) on the author's page NOT in the forum!
You can make small comments or praise or boos if you want but not entire reviews!

If you haven't submitted anything to the arena then don't post here though you can still feel free to read something by any of the people here in this forum. heart
Same goes for other players, please feel limited to reading just the AAY and post here as many times as you want in order to increase your chances of being read. But try not to over do it, thats just annoying. NO SPAM!

Leave any kind of comment as long as its not terribly inappropriate and is in accordance to the rules set by the Administrators of Gaia.


Thank you, heart

Have fun!
done and done darling wink
lol back at ya babe! heart
Please don't bump in this forum unless your thread has fallen off the first page (and at the rate the forum's going, it takes more than a week).
Yes, what she said ^^.
Rated and commented.
"post here as many times as you want in order to increase your chances of being read"

that being said...BUMP! lol!

read, rated, and comment darling!
im glad you feel that way darling...BUMP! lol!
Lots of what's written is not the best. Good writers get a chance to be read. This thread is a good idea.
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Well, first of all, if this is going to be a long term thing would you please clean it up? I'm a bit OCD when it comes to that, and really, you don't have to bump. We'll notice you okay?

To Mr. Crazy,
I read your least rated one, one thing I would have to say I noticed was the fact that you see well there was just too much of that stuff called filler, maybe if you improved your syntax a little?

As much as you use too much filler, sometimes your voice isn't as interesting as you tell it to be, the sentence with "common robin" would've been transformed into a red-breasted robin shrilled a warning call to a nearby blackbird; this familiar saga performed since the birth of these two creatures... and so on and so on.

Differentiated Dialects Divides Dialogue. Maybe make the grandmothers voice different from everyone else?
Same thing with starry sky.

Ending also a little flat.

Don't mistake me, the more I comment on someone's piece the better it is. You did well!
I think you're confussed sweetheart...you're supposed to comment in the arena, not here!

ps: bump! twisted
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Well, there is a comment word limit so I felt it would be nicer if I put it here.

Oh, and next time could you read it instead of asking questions that are already answered in the story? Thanks!

Also, the reason why I made my description that way is because people couldn't get the metaphor no matter how cliche you thought it was.

I choose to read "Diary of the American Lolita" it seemed well rated and had lots of comments. In fact the general idea was very well done, it was details that were lacking.

First of all, me being a Lolita myself, I kind of was disappointed, you see, I was very proud of my clothes often time there were made by myself and all my diary entries reflected what I was wearing. I thought perhaps the story would also follow this. To my dismay, the story didn't sustain my desire.

Who was this she's kissing? Starving children in Africa isn't a laughing matter. It just shows how shallow the character is.She doesn't seem lolita (I am aware of the meaning) she just seems a little cute.

All and all I gave it a four.
I didnt say it was "cliche", i didnt ask you any question other than who's POV and that was a sarcastic question ment to suggest that you should make the transaction a little clearer, and the story description area is still for describing the story and not the writing porcess.

And once again comment on the page NOT the forum. leave two if you must!

leaving a comment or two about the author in the forum is fine but not the whole thing!

read, rated, and commented. heart

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