Read my stories and let me kno wat u think....

[Spazzy_the_turtle]

Look up spazzy_the_turtle in the art arenas under fiction stoires and you'll find
"A Single Silver Tear"
"Nightmares and Angels"
"Black White and Red"
and some random poetry that you dont have to read but i just got bored and posted it....

For those of you who are lazy or cant find me here are the links:

"A Single Silver Tear": http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101481987#title

"Nightmares and Angels": http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101488579#title

"Black White and Red": http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101712411#title

and if you want the link to the poems: http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=101796993#title

[Resident Skulky]

Ew, gross, over-romaniticized titles. Tears are neither silver nor do they typically fall as single tears, despite what Hollywood will tell you on the matter.

Unless you happen to cry mercury or something, in which case I'd advise that you seek medical attention immediately.

[Tomisatu]

I'm just going to comment on A Single Silver Tear. I don't believe you mean that she litearly shed a silver tear at the end. I think it was meant to be symbolic and to bring out the beauty of a single tear-drop, as well as focus the readers attention on. I'm not sure if you yourself know why you made it a silver tear, however. What does the color silver represent to you, and how can you portray that emotion/symbolism to your audiance? Also, if you use something like a silver tear, use it for meaning and beauty within the story, not for beauty within the sentence.

I got the feeling that this scene should be at the end of a drama/romance style movie (in a good way). I can sense strong emotions behind the words.

the line where Sophia says the words "commit suicide" sounds a little cliche. Consider replacing those two words with something similar, but more romantic. I would presonally recommend "die," "die because of it," "kill yourself," or something along those lines.

I know you didn't mention this much in the story, but it's very easy for me to picture the scene occuring on a stormy night, with the silver rays of the moon, gently gliding into sea, etc. That's very good that you can create imagry like that based only on the emotions in your piece.

It feels as if you hit the major points to quickly. Spend just a little more time building up to each one with 'descriptive sentences.'

The last 3-4 lines are probably the most well-written of the entire story.

Good choice of names, they represent their characters exceptionally well.

Ok, I think that's it. Whatever you take (or don't take) from my comments, please, keep writing.

[Special Agent Nishin]

A single silver/crystalline tear is still a cliche and, thus, should be replaced with more original imagery.