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Well I recently started to get back into writing and it feels like the larger projects aren't moving along too well so I thought I'd do some short stuff to get myself going.

The piece I have up now is meant to be funny but perhaps because I'm the one that wrote it I have no idea if it's even the littlest bit funny. Sounds silly but it's true, lol. The idea SHOULD be funny... but is it funny...?

Well that's where I'd like some assistance. I don't think you'll find grammar or formatting errors but if you do then that is also fine to critique, I have no problem with people pointing out my mistakes.

Here is a link

http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=102742081#title

Feel free to also look at my other works. There's another new short story that I was going for something entertaining but it might be only me that finds it funny. xp