Hey I've recently wrote a shorter prolouge in the Writers arena, and I hoped that I could get some criticism on it. The story is written in 2nd perspective so to make it look like your in the story, and its gonna be filled with action if i continue.

Its about the Devil rising to earth, and you've been caught as one of the first ones to see him. I grew inspiration for the devil through the character Vaas from Far Cry 3, and I'm gonna make him look insane, and very dangerous. The devil will be using a gun in the first chapter, and if I can continue with it, i'll explain why.

So please read, and please enjoy, here is the link.

http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=102737387#title