Monochrome

[Nurse Garland]

i am a little new to these submisions on the arenas
so i thought why not post it here. if you like it please rate it.. and leave me a link so maybe i can read some of your writing

e-heh sweatdrop



Monochrome

The blatant expression on your face.

It often gave you away...
Living life in monochrome, where everything fades
Where orders are received and life cascades
When butterflies die, I force my soul to subside
Yet the echoes of your voice, let me soar and glide
The air thick with pain, no joy
I cleverly hide, awaiting my tears deploy…
To live life monochrome … lifeless without emotion
I am forced to give you my hearts devotion



http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=100796419

[SoldiersRain]

Hmm, I like this, but it's flow could be improved a bit. The word choice was good, not too simple, not too intricate.