Looking for feedback on my SciFi piece

[Kite Triblade]

Hi their if any of you could spare a few minuites Ive uploaded the first two chapters of a SciFi novel Im writing called Embracing Fusion

I would like to know if their is anything I could improve

Here it is

Embracing Fusion

Thank you for your time biggrin

[Kite Triblade]

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[KaneCares]

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i miss my bros crying crying

[KaneCares]

i miss them so much crying crying crying crying crying crying crying

[Kairi Nightingale]

This is an extremely (and I mean EXTREMELY) slow forum. Chances are your topic is going to remain up on here for at least a month or two, so please, please don't bump until it finally falls off the first page.

I dabble in sci-fi every now and then, so I might read it later when I have more time but do you know you think you could post a little summary of what it's actually about? Or at least what kind of sci-fi it is? (Military/Space exploration/futuristic/post-apocalyptic/etc.) Please and thank you. ^.^