I'm new around here, and I just posted my first short story

[Hugo Vulto]

Hi there,

I don't consider myself a bad writer, not so good though, but I am not sure about how good I am at translating them, they were originally written in portuguese.

So, I'd really appreciate your comments on A laboratory called Earth.

[Blizpeak]

I was wondering why it was so narrative, then I saw it was a diary entry. I like the concept, just some grammar problems here and there. The entry has a very deep history, but a lot of it I feel is implied. Develop your ideas more, I would say. Ultra specific flashbacks, scenes, etc.