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Good stories biggrin biggrin
I like your style , nice and sarcastic... Very clever... Emm, well, I'm not too good at giving critiques, so I'll just say they're well written but em... Perhaps you use short sentences too much? Does that count? sweatdrop
Ha ha ha! I like it! biggrin I love sarcasm in stories, don't you?
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thanks for all the critiques so far, and i really appreciate everyone's comments on the shortness of the sentences in Logic 3nodding

when i wrote it (about two years ago), i found that when i tried to do sarcasm, it worked better in short sentences than long ones...hence the short sentences..

but, you can't just start making masterpieces straightaway, can you? whee
so i shall try better next time i do a sarcastic piece xd

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