Blood of a Dragon (closed)

[micperson]

Hello there gaians! I am currently working on writing a book call Blood of a Dragon. To read it in the art arena Click here

It is about a girl named Jennifer. Who is having strange dreams about dragons. To make things even more strange she meets a new girl named Carmen who has coincidentaly drawn a picture of the same dragon! Read it please and tell me what you think. dramallama

Take note that all I want is a little constructive critisizm! You don't have to be rude or harsh this is my first time actually posting something like this. Please just take the time to read the story and not the poorly written descritipion of it!

[Doktor Faust]

Lame.



Absolutely lame.

[dah fuzzinator of dewm!]

Wow. That sounds pretty cliche.

[The Phoenix Rises Again]

Why is girl capitalized?

[xXalkalineXx]

I dont mean to be rude..it's just, cookie cutter.

[Narcotic Ritual]

Even if I offered you 10k to write something even more generic and cliched than this, I sincerely doubt you'd be able to do it. neutral

[micperson]

The Phoenix Rises Again

Why is girl capitalized?

It was an accident

[micperson]

Ok why do you people have to be so hurtful? All I wanted was a little constructive critisizm. Somthing tells me you didn't even read the story just the description I wrote! Ok I'm not good with desciptions! Geez...

@Tsoonami: Could you explain what cookie cutter means?

AND IF YOU PEOPLE SAY CLICHE ONE MORE TIME...well I dunno...

[Danny Tourette Guy]

******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers

[micperson]

lord bad assitude

******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers

thank you derek

[Queen Thumbelina]

lord bad ******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers[/quote]

You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



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[align=center]You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



Holy Cow.

[micperson]

Ginny_Ryu

lord bad ******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers[/quote]

You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



Holy Cow.[/align:6pbfbx

6pbfbx1g:1="lord bad ******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers[/quote]
[align=center]You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



Holy Cow.

thank you very much that means alot! blaugh

[iFuN-SiZeD]

wassup cow person! cool post!

[God of Mediocrity]

dah fuzzinator of dewm!

Wow. That sounds pretty cliche.

[kikio ozan]

micperson

lord bad assitude

******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers

thank you derek

yeah i agree. lol. it was better than i thought it would be. KEEP AT IT.