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Post: 54865201_1 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 1:58 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 1:58 am
Hello there gaians! I am currently working on writing a book call Blood of a Dragon. To read it in the art arena Click here

It is about a girl named Jennifer. Who is having strange dreams about dragons. To make things even more strange she meets a new girl named Carmen who has coincidentaly drawn a picture of the same dragon! Read it please and tell me what you think. dramallama

Take note that all I want is a little constructive critisizm! You don't have to be rude or harsh this is my first time actually posting something like this. Please just take the time to read the story and not the poorly written descritipion of it!
 
     
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Post: 54865201_2 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:45 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:45 am
 
Lame.



Absolutely lame.
     
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Post: 54865201_3 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:48 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:48 am
Wow. That sounds pretty cliche.
 
     
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Post: 54865201_4 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:58 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:58 am
 
Why is girl capitalized?
     
http://r.undev.org/?r=8934

Will edit for stuff. Will art for stuff.
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Post: 54865201_5 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:10 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:10 am
I dont mean to be rude..it's just, cookie cutter.
 
     
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Post: 54865201_6 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:13 amPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:13 am
 
Even if I offered you 10k to write something even more generic and cliched than this, I sincerely doubt you'd be able to do it. neutral
     
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Post: 54865201_7 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:54 pmPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 2:54 pm
The Phoenix Rises Again
Why is girl capitalized?
It was an accident
 
     
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Post: 54865201_8 created on Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:01 pmPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 3:01 pm
 
Ok why do you people have to be so hurtful? All I wanted was a little constructive critisizm. Somthing tells me you didn't even read the story just the description I wrote! Ok I'm not good with desciptions! Geez...

@Tsoonami: Could you explain what cookie cutter means?

AND IF YOU PEOPLE SAY CLICHE ONE MORE TIME...well I dunno...
     
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Post: 54865201_9 created on Fri Oct 09, 2009 11:18 pmPosted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 11:18 pm
******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers
 
     

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Post: 54865201_10 created on Sun Oct 11, 2009 3:35 amPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 3:35 am
 
lord bad assitude
******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers


thank you derek
     
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Post: 54865201_11 created on Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:21 amPosted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:21 am
[quote="lord bad ******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers
You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



Holy Cow.
  
     
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Post: 54865201_12 created on Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:45 amPosted: Sat Oct 24, 2009 12:45 am
 
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[quote="lord bad ******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers

You're awesome.

Yeah, Everybody-Except-This-Guy, you're all mean. Jeez.

Be constructive, not hateful mindless auto-piloted zombies. Your posts are so short and contain no thought in them, meaning you didn't even take the time to read her stuff before you said anything, and even if you did, nothing you said was based on what was actually written. There were no quotes, no comment on grammar, no suggestions for wording, nothing. You guys were all assholes. If you think something written is cliche and needs work, and let it make an a*****e of you, then you're a lot worse of a person than the one who needs to improve their writing. Compassion is a lot more valuable of a quality than being able to write a novel everybody will love.



Holy Cow.



thank you very much that means alot! blaugh
     


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Post: 54865201_13 created on Thu Oct 29, 2009 2:16 amPosted: Thu Oct 29, 2009 2:16 am
wassup cow person! cool post!
 
     
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Post: 54865201_14 created on Sun Nov 01, 2009 7:57 amPosted: Sun Nov 01, 2009 7:57 am
 
dah fuzzinator of dewm!
Wow. That sounds pretty cliche.
     
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Post: 54865201_15 created on Wed Nov 04, 2009 10:52 pmPosted: Wed Nov 04, 2009 10:52 pm
micperson
lord bad assitude
******** you guys i liked it you bunch of cocksuckers


thank you derek


yeah i agree. lol. it was better than i thought it would be. KEEP AT IT.
 
     
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