Wanna flesh it out? - Informal Roleplay Think Tank

What do you think of the idea?

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[Marble Eyed]

Prolly Naut

You're right. I do need to instill that sense of danger earlier on. For now I just thought that I would just set up a tense atmosphere and then implement the horror part psychologically by using the obsessive wielder guy. What do you think of that?

If this is supposed to take place in another world, you could use the beginning (by which I mean after the sword has been made but before swordsmith is killed) to demonstrate the societal rules of the world, such as the fact that the society is patriarchal, or the fact that only the most powerful men can wield swords, or even possibly explain of the idea of a sword having consciousness (I think I know what you're saying by that [like, the swords have a will of their own? and some are more bloodthirsty than others?], but it would be good to establish it within the story for the reader).

But I have a question. How do you define "power"? Strength (physically or mentally [such as strength of will]) or money or something else? With fantasy it's usually the first, but everybody has their own spin, and I don't want to assume.

Second question: sounds like your heroine is either a slave or a working girl (basically: either she gets a wage or she doesn't). What about the stature of other women in this world? Are there any women considered just as or almost as powerful as a man? Just asking since gender relations tend to figure in a lot of things (and of course my own curiosity).

[Prolly Naut]

2muchBLOOD4U

Hey there Prolly Naut. Thanks for helping out ONLYTONI.

So far this plot sounds way more fantastical than horror-like. Is that on purpose?

To make it more horror like I think there would definitely have to be a more immediate sense of danger - such as, the new wielder knowing from the get-go that she witnessed the murder of the smithy and chasing her all this time, or the evil of the sword infecting the world somehow and other supernatural evil or demon / monster things appearing.

You're right. I do need to instill that sense of danger earlier on. For now I just thought that I would just set up a tense atmosphere and then implement the horror part psychologically by using the obsessive wielder guy. What do you think of that?

[2muchBLOOD4U]

Hey there Prolly Naut. Thanks for helping out ONLYTONI.

So far this plot sounds way more fantastical than horror-like. Is that on purpose?

To make it more horror like I think there would definitely have to be a more immediate sense of danger - such as, the new wielder knowing from the get-go that she witnessed the murder of the smithy and chasing her all this time, or the evil of the sword infecting the world somehow and other supernatural evil or demon / monster things appearing.

[Prolly Naut]

ONLYTONI

So, this ability is secret?

Is there a difference between a sword and a sword?

If swords are magicish, shouldn't sword smiths be able to control that magic? Is it weird to have someone make something they don't understand? Does this make sense?

Thanks for helping out. I feel speeeeeecial.

The ability is a secret between the sword smith and the girl. It is very rare.
As for the sword smith's ability to control the magic, yes he can but only to a certain extent. If you give birth to a child there are certain attributes that you can control and many that you cannot. (ideas, intents, goals, personality)....hmmm let me try to explain it another way? When you have a pokemon at first it can only tackle and growl, but with time it learns stronger abilities based on how it's trained?Does this make sense? :/

Also swords are just regular sharp pieces of metal while swords have special powers.

[ONLYTONI]

Prolly Naut

Yay. Interest. Okay so the sword smith is a MALE. Protagonist is a female with a special ability. Their relationship is servant master based. (IE she serves dinner and cleans his workshop) For the time being I'd to have the sort of "end" that is the beginning so that later on I might take it on as a full length project.

So, this ability is secret?

Is there a difference between a sword and a sword?

If swords are magicish, shouldn't sword smiths be able to control that magic? Is it weird to have someone make something they don't understand? Does this make sense?

[Prolly Naut]

ONLYTONI

Prolly Naut

Great. I could definitely use help fleshing out the plot of a one shot fan fiction I'm making. This may be a long explanation sooorry.

I'm experimenting with the dark fantasy / horror genre and thought that writing an alternate universe fan fiction would be a nice way to do it.

So I want to create a patriarchal society and universe where the most powerful males have the ability to wield a sword. However unlike traditional swords these ones hold a certain level of consciousness. ( Think Harry Potter maybe? The wand chooses you? )

The protagonist is a female who is the servant of a swords-smith. She is actually a sword-whisperer....as in she can access the sword's consciousness.


And now here's the plot part I need help with:

Sword whisperer girl witnesses sword smith guy accidentally create evil Franken-sword. She doesn't tell him that the sword has issues. Somehow sword gets into wrong hands and sword smith guy dies. Girls escapes. TIME SKIP. Evil sword is now well known across the land, and with a new wielder. Now she needs to somehow by fate meet up with the sword and the new wielder. Instead of killing her off the sword recognizes her and feels a soft spot. Wielder discovers her power and becomes obsesses. THE END.

Help. Please.

THE END? That sounds like where the plot really thickens up!
So, only men can wield 'swords' but both sexes can "feel" their power? Or is she special?
Here are some questions: patriarchal society, manly men, and only men can wield the 'swords': I would like to know why a female is a 'sword'smith. Is she special, is it familial, was she pretending to be a boy.

Yay. Interest. Okay so the sword smith is a MALE. Protagonist is a female with a special ability. Their relationship is servant master based. (IE she serves dinner and cleans his workshop) For the time being I'd like to have the sort of "end" that is the beginning so that later on I might take it on as a full length project.

[ONLYTONI]

Prolly Naut

Great. I could definitely use help fleshing out the plot of a one shot fan fiction I'm making. This may be a long explanation sooorry.

I'm experimenting with the dark fantasy / horror genre and thought that writing an alternate universe fan fiction would be a nice way to do it.

So I want to create a patriarchal society and universe where the most powerful males have the ability to wield a sword. However unlike traditional swords these ones hold a certain level of consciousness. ( Think Harry Potter maybe? The wand chooses you? )

The protagonist is a female who is the servant of a swords-smith. She is actually a sword-whisperer....as in she can access the sword's consciousness.


And now here's the plot part I need help with:

Sword whisperer girl witnesses sword smith guy accidentally create evil franken-sword. She doesn't tell him that the sword has issues. Somehow sword gets into wrong hands and sword smith guy dies. Girls escapes. TIME SKIP. Evil sword is now well known across the land, and with a new wielder. Now she needs to somehow by fate meet up with the sword and the new wielder. Instead of killing her off the sword recognizes her and feels a soft spot. Wielder discovers her power and becomes obsesses. THE END.

Help. Please.

THE END? That sounds like where the plot really thickens up!
So, only men can wield 'swords' but both sexes can "feel" their power? Or is she special?
Here are some questions: patriarchal society, manly men, and only men can wield the 'swords': I would like to know why a female is a 'sword'smith. Is she special, is it familial, was she pretending to be a boy.

[Prolly Naut]

Great. I could definitely use help fleshing out the plot of a one shot fan fiction I'm making. This may be a long explanation sooorry.

I'm experimenting with the dark fantasy / horror genre and thought that writing an alternate universe fan fiction would be a nice way to do it.

So I want to create a patriarchal society and universe where the most powerful males have the ability to wield a sword. However unlike traditional swords these ones hold a certain level of consciousness. ( Think Harry Potter maybe? The wand chooses you? )

The protagonist is a female who is the servant of a swords-smith. She is actually a sword-whisperer....as in she can access the sword's consciousness.


And now here's the plot part I need help with:

Sword whisperer girl witnesses sword smith guy accidentally create evil franken-sword. She doesn't tell him that the sword has issues. Somehow sword gets into wrong hands and sword smith guy dies. Girls escapes. TIME SKIP. Evil sword is now well known across the land, and with a new wielder. Now she needs to somehow by fate meet up with the sword and the new wielder. Instead of killing her off the sword recognizes her and feels a soft spot. Wielder discovers her power and becomes obsesses. THE END.

Help. Please.

[2muchBLOOD4U]

LoperDoper

I think your general help is great, thanks. We've expanded it from three/four characters to eight (we've got four characters each), and I think we're going to be fine now. Thank you for the advice, I'll make sure to bear it in mind in future ^.^

(It's a Supernatural, Doctor Who and Sherlock crossover roleplay xD)

Oh, no problemo. Glad things are looking up.

Feel free to come back if you're ever in a rut later!
(Wow dude, that's intense. xD)

[LoperDoper]

2muchBLOOD4U

Is the roleplay a 1 x 1? If you could give me a link or a quote of one of those conversation killing moments maybe I could help a little more.(And knowing what it's a fan roleplay of in case I know it.)

In general however: Adding characters that you haven't already been using into the mix is one way to add a subplot, just give them some purpose relating to your mains. Make some one fall in love with some one else, usually not a great subplot but you see it a lot. Revealing some important part of some one's past by some one from it showing up or them having nightmares, losing it and then blurting it out from pressure. All those devices you see on episodic television really.

I know those are all cliches but if you're having so much trouble that it's dying these will at least get you to write something, hopefully as you develop them you will add a unique twist. Unfortunately I believe the ultimate answer to your problem is creativity.

I think your general help is great, thanks. We've expanded it from three/four characters to eight (we've got four characters each), and I think we're going to be fine now. Thank you for the advice, I'll make sure to bear it in mind in future ^.^

(It's a Supernatural, Doctor Who and Sherlock crossover roleplay xD)

[Lahrette]

Hmm.. I'm liking this idea. I shall be back at some point...

[2muchBLOOD4U]

LoperDoper

Excellent! Just what I might need! A friend and I are attempting roleplay and it's not going well.

We seem to have trouble forming a plot. It's a fanfiction roleplay, so we're fine on the character front. We've got the basic plot of someone being murdered, but every post we do we seem to kill off the conversation, so to speak, and can't seem to continue on.

Have any advice on this, like how to throw in subplots successfully? (We've got one so far, but it's not creating much of a talking point)

Is the roleplay a 1 x 1? If you could give me a link or a quote of one of those conversation killing moments maybe I could help a little more.(And knowing what it's a fan roleplay of in case I know it.)

In general however: Adding characters that you haven't already been using into the mix is one way to add a subplot, just give them some purpose relating to your mains. Make some one fall in love with some one else, usually not a great subplot but you see it a lot. Revealing some important part of some one's past by some one from it showing up or them having nightmares, losing it and then blurting it out from pressure. All those devices you see on episodic television really.

I know those are all cliches but if you're having so much trouble that it's dying these will at least get you to write something, hopefully as you develop them you will add a unique twist. Unfortunately I believe the ultimate answer to your problem is creativity.

[LoperDoper]

Excellent! Just what I might need! A friend and I are attempting roleplay and it's not going well.

We seem to have trouble forming a plot. It's a fanfiction roleplay, so we're fine on the character front. We've got the basic plot of someone being murdered, but every post we do we seem to kill off the conversation, so to speak, and can't seem to continue on.

Have any advice on this, like how to throw in subplots successfully? (We've got one so far, but it's not creating much of a talking point)

[DarknessofHeavenandDreams]

2muchBLOOD4U

DarknessofHeavenandDreams

Well, maybe you can make it so that there's a very low rate of success? Like, they have to roll a 1 on a 6 sided die or something in order to succeed, otherwise they're caught or they run out of food and they can't make the full journey, etc. By the way, the town has been forcefully conquered - are the people being enslaved at all?

(edit: bbl)

Not exactly enslaved, but definitely oppressed in not being allowed to have their own version of religion.

[2muchBLOOD4U]

DarknessofHeavenandDreams

Well, maybe you can make it so that there's a very low rate of success? Like, they have to roll a 1 on a 6 sided die or something in order to succeed, otherwise they're caught or they run out of food and they can't make the full journey, etc. By the way, the town has been forcefully conquered - are the people being enslaved at all?

(edit: bbl)