Shadowy Phantom

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It seems like it has a good idea behind it...It's really short though, and I would spend less time worrying about that and more time writing other things or expanding on it. If this is an idea you have for something bigger, I would use simple words to convey the idea you want to ask about. You can always add more detail later.