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[Dante Alighini]

BlueDragonX

A storyline that's pretty vague right now and not complete.

It starts off a small island called Orris. For the past weeks, Lenzo "Len" Cyer has been having a recurring dream of a mysterious girl trapped in a giant sphere with ring like objects circling it. One day, soldiers from the mainland's empire, being led by General Valex has raided the island, looking for something. They kidnap Lenzo's older sister and take her to a cave that is forbidden to enter, even to the islanders. Lenzo follows them and as he enters to the deepest regions of the cave, he discovers a hidden room that is both high-tech and ancient at the same time. To his surprise he finds the mysterious girl trapped in a sphere like in his dream. He is discovered and in the confusion frees the girl. Something happens and Lenzo's sister is killed by Valex. Wanting revenge against Valex, Lenzo forms a contract with the mysterious girl who calls herself Nova.

I plan to have that Valex and Nova have some sort of connection with each other and there exists another world that can be seen in plain sight called the "Higher World." It is actually the moon.

What exactly do you mean by "forms a contract?" Like a contract with the devil? Like a contract from the D&D Warlocks? Or like "I'll build you a shed for $100?"

Overall this beginning is interesting. The sister being kidnapped and then killed seems more like a clichéd cop-out though. Is there any other reason that would make him enter the cave? Any other sort of actions Valex might do to incite the people in some way? Just curious.

[BlueDragonX]

Like I said, it's pretty vague right now. Well, besides following them, maybe he hears a faint voice coming from within the cave? Well, it's not really a "contract" per se. Nova is actually a type of droid from the Higher World who uses her "magic" to electronically "rewrite\" Lenzo's brain so that he knows how to fight. But of course he won't be a master warrior or anything. How Nova ended up in a cave of the Lower World is a mystery.

[Kiwi Crime Fighter]

I think that if you tied Nova's story to Len's, it would be very interesting. Also, the contract should have a lot of elements to it, rather than teaching him how to fight, maybe even a doujble-edged sword. I'd find that super entertaining. :'D

Btw, I have a friend named Nova. Haha!

As well as going into that cave, if it's so forbidden, he must have a very hard time getting in. It sounds too easy for him to just follow.

[Iino Kumiko]

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Iino Kumiko

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Okay, I need help and I'm not sure where to go or who to run to for it.....so I stumbled here....anyway I guess my problem is "when is it to much?" I've been working on creating a group of orignial characters (i.e. personalities and looks and basic backgrounds....etc). The story is pretty much a collection of different life situations (from infiltrating and spying on shady buisnesses to dealing cleaning up after dinner) and how the characters react and work in these senerios. Oh yah, these kids aren't normal. The group is split between psychics and a pair with an genetic abnormality that gives them thier powers (nothing to super though, the powers are within a certain realm of reality---for now wink ). There's Cal, Mina, Mackenzie, Ben, and Ryan. My problem is with Ryan.

Now here's my point: Ryan was held in a psychic research facility where they worked on testing and honing abilities...one way of doing this was putting the student's in machines that block senses and allow the person to open up to his or her own full powers. I came up with the idea that Ryan's friend Dominique was put in this machine and Dominique nearly went crazy from the sensory deprivision. Dominique's power is like astrial projection, he can send his spirit/soul into another person and posess the person. He possesed Ryan in an attempt to save his mental state. Only problem is Dominique didn't get back to his own body in time and the body died. Now Dominique is stuck inside of Ryan, the two sharing Ryan's body (almost like disassociative identity disorder but not).

Here's my question: Is this to much? Is having Dominique and Ryan share a body okay or is it to much for one character? I mean at the moment the plot is still a little vauge. It's pretty much the group trying to deal with normal life as well as balance work that they do using their powers (like a help-for-hire group: they use thier abilities to help people)

Here's Ryan's bit:

Ryan Logan Quinn
6’0” lean but muscular, large golden blonde ringlets kept a little long, green gray eyes
Ryan is a creative soul and a bit unique in many senses of the word. He is a bit fanciful as well as quite imaginative and enthusiastic. He doesn’t believe in conforming to the world, often doing things a little differently then what the general public expects, and tends to see the world around him a little differently then most. He is very observant to his surroundings and people near him, often seeing the bigger picture and the small details at the same time. For a guy he is surprisingly sensitive to people and their feelings, often having more insight on a person’s emotions and reasoning then he or she may realize. Ryan is happy in his own little world in his mind, often becoming internally focused when hit by an interesting thought or idea and getting caught up in it. Due to his tendency to be caught up in thought and working off alone, people have deemed him a loner in nature. But this isn’t true, for he does do his best work alone, or at least his best brain storming alone, he is good natured with others and doesn’t mind the company of people he knows. Ryan can be quite persistent in many ways to a point that can annoy others around him if they haven’t been annoyed by his slight forgetfulness or lack of organization. When finally angered Ryan finds unique ways to persistently torment a person, preferring a slow suffering, or will just play mind games with the person until he makes his point.

Here's a bit on Dom (still in the works):
He appears cold and uncaring, he views the world very realisticly and pragmatically. He is quite secretive and even manipulative in a sense, often hiding truths from other people despite how close he maybe to them. He is calculating and often does things that give him the upper hand in situations. He is very competitive with other people, he has a bit of a perfectionist streek in the sense he wants to be the best at what he does. He's very posessive of his belongings (which includes people) and is known for is "varying" people skills, either treating them like items or buisness move to gain higher status. He is very domineering and abrassive too. In fact he is quite the opposite of Ryan in many ways, like he thinks in the now while Ryan is caught away in ideas and such or where Ryan is very sensitive and Dominique is often thought of lacking both sympathy and empathy. Over all Dominique is a very questionable person to be around.

Feed back is very welcomed smile
P.S. If making Dom and Ryan share a body is to much, Dom will become a villian that tends to appear in a few situations the group has.

Here's my question: Is this to much?
I believe this is not too much. I think your idea of two people sharing one body is very very unique.


Is having Dominique and Ryan share a body okay or is it to much for one character?
As long as you write it correctly there should be no problems. If each person has a different personality it will generate conflict. This gives the readers something to hold on to. A set may like ryan as another group may like Dom. This will make the story pop and stand out.

I think you're idea is good and you should try to work with it. If it becomes to be too much you can always try again from a different point of view. You should really develop each character as two different people. And then throw those two personalities into one person. My question for you is do you want Dom to only be a voice in ryan's head or do you want him to be able to take over ryan's body? Try answering these questions. If you perfer Dom being only a voice why not have Ryan simply be the one who went crazy in the machine and to deal with it his mind created Dom? If you perfer the latter try writing a few paragraphs where Dom has control. This could help you develop the relationship between the two characters.

Thank you, thank you, thank you *gets on all fours and hugs lino Kumiko's legs* It's so hard to get feedback sometimes.

Anyway, to answer your question about Dom being a voice or an actual body posession personality. The answer is.......actual body poessesing personality. I chose this from the start because it will create conflict between characters and show a different side to the other group members. Ryan is well liked by his friends where as Dom is obviously someone hard to like. Dom's like the dirty little secret or the white elephant in the room the others don't like to talk about, especially due to the fact Dom doesn't see things the way the others do. I plan on using Dom to create doubt in the others, to be the person who questions the decisions of the group members. Dom isn't evil villian, but he isn't an angel either; he is the guy who throws a wrench in the system, sometime coming out with good and bad results, but this helps the other characters grow. But Dom will grow too so don't think I'm not going to make him change some, the other characters are very persistant in making Dom a little more sympathetic and empathic if it kills them (which it nearly might)

I think you'll do fine. I know what you mean about not getting feedback. I think you should really try writing it this way. Let me know if you have anymore trouble =]

[Iino Kumiko]

Enjolras Teh Rebel

Iino Kumiko

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Iino Kumiko

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..Ah!
Yes!!
I didn't like the IQ thing too much, since it really has NO scientific basis and is as cliche as 'super strong' or flying. I was thinking of Tony Stark/Reed Richards when I thought of this.
The focus is so much better, though.. There are so many things that can branch from that.

Ah love you. :] <3

I wanted him to be behind the scenes, mostly; physically inept, so fighting is out of the question, but mentally superior by a long-shot, to the point where Batman, even with his incredible intellect and gadgets, would have a hard time defeating him. This would definitely work. :'D Then, there's the Schizophrenia, some sort of concocted drug to suppress the effects, but still able to revert to a nearly psychotic state. That could be his downfall, ultimately.

Thanks!!
I'm still open to ANY more ideas~

I just wanted to say that I find this idea to be completely astonishing. I think you're off to a wonderful start, but I can't help but picture Jaden Jett as Goblin from spiderman. I think it mostly has to do with the schizophrenia portion because thats what I thought when I watched those movies. Lol. (Not a big superhero fan xD) However, I wanted to help more with the super hero not so much the villian because he already sounds epic in my opinion.

Why not have both a male and female superhero (wonder twins xD) I think it would be a good idea to sit back and write down a series of names that could help you with this tough struggle. Another way around this is to think of your story how would the villian react to a women? Would he hate her more because he was an orphan? (mother issues) Or would he blame a man for protecting such a horrid city? I think the best way in this situation is to look at it from the villians point of view. It may help you decide who his enemy will be.

I hope that helped. It's not much but I just thought your idea was wonderful and I wanted to help any way I could.

I see exactly what you're saying. Thanks for the compliments, weee!! <3
Anyway, I was wondering myself what his viewpoints on certain things would be. I want his mentality to be the sort of nonchalant, cynical, overly-realistic/scientific type, to the extent where anything even remotely fantastical is automatically ridiculous. With women, I was wondering if he would even have any interest. On one side of the argument, it's human nature. On the other, his mind's not exactly on his own well-being or fun, for that matter. I don't even know if I want romance in my story, though a subtle amount wouldn't be too bad.

Off of the top of my head.. I think I want Jadon's drive to be 'create the cure, make the disease'. Like, misery loves company. At the same time, it becomes a vicious circle. How the hero would play into that, I have no clue. There's the route of making him/her/one of them a standard citizen( Spidurman :B ), or somebody important( Irun Man C: ). I'm leaning towards somebody with some sort of past affiliation with the villain before he was even a villain. Maybe, if I decide to make him an orphan, somebody who was there with him or taking care of him, or maybe a professor at whatever college that's dying for him to be his student. Maybe even both, if I go with two different people.

On top of that, there's the idea of making him more likeable than the bad guy. Seriously, you don't want to go 'NO, HE CAN'T DIE! I HATE -insertherohere-', or else the story is automatically 'bad', like 500 Days of Summer. Great movie, everybody hated it because of the ending. He has to be interesting, relatable.. Maybe do an X-men/Watchmen thing, where there are multiple people? A Hulk thing where he's essentially only an anti-hero, and not by his own volition?

I'm trying to find somebody who could give my villain a challenge and receive a challenge as well, allow for less formulaic plots (Which is why I'm leaning against orphans. A little /too/ cliche, maybe.), allow for character growth between the both, ect.

With Jadon, I was at square one until I found an outline for a story I was planning on writing before. 'Jadon Jett Bassilus' Was the name, or very close to it, as Bassilus was a character in an old story where he betrayed his best friend with power that the best friend gave him in the first place. I might work off of that. Middle names are unnecessary, though, so I cut off the last name. I took the idea for that story and grew off of that to create my villain. Basically, he evolved from his name.
I'm going to look up some names and see what makes me say 'omg, why didn't I think of it before?!'
:'D
This is haard. D': <- Daily whine. [/endwalloftext]

First off, if you want the hero to be likable I would suggest making his backstory more sad as for being relatable try making him seem almost completely normal like just an average Joe trying to find himself in the world. The idea of a professor is good but why not a co-worker? Maybe they're both scientists or something. This would put them together in more then just superhero vs villian mode. We as readers would know them for who they are but each one would simply believe the other is a regular person. The problem with doing multiple main characters is finding a way to make the plot simple and easy to understand. I know from experience this is hard. Also remember that the super hero and villian need super power names I guess. (Peter Parker = Spiderman) Personally I think Bassilus would be an AWESOME villian name for his "Alter-ego villian personality". Please let me know if you come up with a super hero name. I would enjoy being able to help you more. =]

Well, the only reason I chose not to make the hero a co-worker or something is because I thought it was already a stretch to make my villain a teenager. Its another cliche, a seventeen year old bad-a**. XD; I didn't want my hero to be a kid, thered be a little /too/ much naivete. As for the 'average joe' thing, the other name I had from that other story for the good guy was Levon Cade, Levon meaning Lion (proud, revered as kingly, strong) and Cade for lumpy, irregular(greatly flawed), so at the times where he cracked down, he did it well, but ultimately had zero natural talent. He was meant to be a bit part and sort of oblivious to everything, though. I'm not sure about that, I may look up a bit more names, roman ones especially. biggrin Hm. If I have a heroine, she'll be Augustine, like Augustus from Roman history, the most BA conquerer evur(<3).
I've decided that I want him/her/them to be anti-heroes, not out to save everybody, but in disagreement with Jadon Jett. Maybe he'll somehow directly impact them, THEN they get involved? Maybe they get their "powers" by fault of Jadon's? Another thing's for sure, I want them to have a positive idea of Jadon while it's all going on, because they have no idea that Jadon's causing whatever It is that's going on.

I know what you mean when you talk about keeping the plot simple with so many characters.. I had, like, three main characters and three verrry important characters in a recent story. It was NOT easy. X3;;

I'm trying to think of a general skeleton and build on it.. Like, think of how the Joker/two-face used to be in the old, anti-mechanical shark spray batmans. They had NO depth. Then, they evolved incredibly over the years. I'm having a hard time even getting the basics.

I think you're doing great. About the basics, do you mean backstories or like the city, names, places stuff like that? Because from what you've told me I think you have a basic skeleton to start from. You have Jaden and some of his story all you really need is the city and your heros. When you find the name(s) of the hero you'll know just keep looking. Most the names in my story I got from looking through baby names.

[BlueDragonX]

Enjolras Teh Rebel

I think that if you tied Nova's story to Len's, it would be very interesting. Also, the contract should have a lot of elements to it, rather than teaching him how to fight, maybe even a doujble-edged sword. I'd find that super entertaining. :'D

Btw, I have a friend named Nova. Haha!

As well as going into that cave, if it's so forbidden, he must have a very hard time getting in. It sounds too easy for him to just follow.

Hmm, you're right about the entering cave part. Perhaps, the entrance was sealed by some kind of door/control panel and Valex was able to figure it out, since I posted earlier that Nova and Valex have some sort of connection with each other.

[Kiwi Crime Fighter]

Iino Kumiko

Enjolras Teh Rebel

Iino Kumiko

Enjolras Teh Rebel

Iino Kumiko

Enjolras Teh Rebel

..Ah!
Yes!!
I didn't like the IQ thing too much, since it really has NO scientific basis and is as cliche as 'super strong' or flying. I was thinking of Tony Stark/Reed Richards when I thought of this.
The focus is so much better, though.. There are so many things that can branch from that.

Ah love you. :] <3

I wanted him to be behind the scenes, mostly; physically inept, so fighting is out of the question, but mentally superior by a long-shot, to the point where Batman, even with his incredible intellect and gadgets, would have a hard time defeating him. This would definitely work. :'D Then, there's the Schizophrenia, some sort of concocted drug to suppress the effects, but still able to revert to a nearly psychotic state. That could be his downfall, ultimately.

Thanks!!
I'm still open to ANY more ideas~

I just wanted to say that I find this idea to be completely astonishing. I think you're off to a wonderful start, but I can't help but picture Jaden Jett as Goblin from spiderman. I think it mostly has to do with the schizophrenia portion because thats what I thought when I watched those movies. Lol. (Not a big superhero fan xD) However, I wanted to help more with the super hero not so much the villian because he already sounds epic in my opinion.

Why not have both a male and female superhero (wonder twins xD) I think it would be a good idea to sit back and write down a series of names that could help you with this tough struggle. Another way around this is to think of your story how would the villian react to a women? Would he hate her more because he was an orphan? (mother issues) Or would he blame a man for protecting such a horrid city? I think the best way in this situation is to look at it from the villians point of view. It may help you decide who his enemy will be.

I hope that helped. It's not much but I just thought your idea was wonderful and I wanted to help any way I could.

I see exactly what you're saying. Thanks for the compliments, weee!! <3
Anyway, I was wondering myself what his viewpoints on certain things would be. I want his mentality to be the sort of nonchalant, cynical, overly-realistic/scientific type, to the extent where anything even remotely fantastical is automatically ridiculous. With women, I was wondering if he would even have any interest. On one side of the argument, it's human nature. On the other, his mind's not exactly on his own well-being or fun, for that matter. I don't even know if I want romance in my story, though a subtle amount wouldn't be too bad.

Off of the top of my head.. I think I want Jadon's drive to be 'create the cure, make the disease'. Like, misery loves company. At the same time, it becomes a vicious circle. How the hero would play into that, I have no clue. There's the route of making him/her/one of them a standard citizen( Spidurman :B ), or somebody important( Irun Man C: ). I'm leaning towards somebody with some sort of past affiliation with the villain before he was even a villain. Maybe, if I decide to make him an orphan, somebody who was there with him or taking care of him, or maybe a professor at whatever college that's dying for him to be his student. Maybe even both, if I go with two different people.

On top of that, there's the idea of making him more likeable than the bad guy. Seriously, you don't want to go 'NO, HE CAN'T DIE! I HATE -insertherohere-', or else the story is automatically 'bad', like 500 Days of Summer. Great movie, everybody hated it because of the ending. He has to be interesting, relatable.. Maybe do an X-men/Watchmen thing, where there are multiple people? A Hulk thing where he's essentially only an anti-hero, and not by his own volition?

I'm trying to find somebody who could give my villain a challenge and receive a challenge as well, allow for less formulaic plots (Which is why I'm leaning against orphans. A little /too/ cliche, maybe.), allow for character growth between the both, ect.

With Jadon, I was at square one until I found an outline for a story I was planning on writing before. 'Jadon Jett Bassilus' Was the name, or very close to it, as Bassilus was a character in an old story where he betrayed his best friend with power that the best friend gave him in the first place. I might work off of that. Middle names are unnecessary, though, so I cut off the last name. I took the idea for that story and grew off of that to create my villain. Basically, he evolved from his name.
I'm going to look up some names and see what makes me say 'omg, why didn't I think of it before?!'
:'D
This is haard. D': <- Daily whine. [/endwalloftext]

First off, if you want the hero to be likable I would suggest making his backstory more sad as for being relatable try making him seem almost completely normal like just an average Joe trying to find himself in the world. The idea of a professor is good but why not a co-worker? Maybe they're both scientists or something. This would put them together in more then just superhero vs villian mode. We as readers would know them for who they are but each one would simply believe the other is a regular person. The problem with doing multiple main characters is finding a way to make the plot simple and easy to understand. I know from experience this is hard. Also remember that the super hero and villian need super power names I guess. (Peter Parker = Spiderman) Personally I think Bassilus would be an AWESOME villian name for his "Alter-ego villian personality". Please let me know if you come up with a super hero name. I would enjoy being able to help you more. =]

Well, the only reason I chose not to make the hero a co-worker or something is because I thought it was already a stretch to make my villain a teenager. Its another cliche, a seventeen year old bad-a**. XD; I didn't want my hero to be a kid, thered be a little /too/ much naivete. As for the 'average joe' thing, the other name I had from that other story for the good guy was Levon Cade, Levon meaning Lion (proud, revered as kingly, strong) and Cade for lumpy, irregular(greatly flawed), so at the times where he cracked down, he did it well, but ultimately had zero natural talent. He was meant to be a bit part and sort of oblivious to everything, though. I'm not sure about that, I may look up a bit more names, roman ones especially. biggrin Hm. If I have a heroine, she'll be Augustine, like Augustus from Roman history, the most BA conquerer evur(<3).
I've decided that I want him/her/them to be anti-heroes, not out to save everybody, but in disagreement with Jadon Jett. Maybe he'll somehow directly impact them, THEN they get involved? Maybe they get their "powers" by fault of Jadon's? Another thing's for sure, I want them to have a positive idea of Jadon while it's all going on, because they have no idea that Jadon's causing whatever It is that's going on.

I know what you mean when you talk about keeping the plot simple with so many characters.. I had, like, three main characters and three verrry important characters in a recent story. It was NOT easy. X3;;

I'm trying to think of a general skeleton and build on it.. Like, think of how the Joker/two-face used to be in the old, anti-mechanical shark spray batmans. They had NO depth. Then, they evolved incredibly over the years. I'm having a hard time even getting the basics.

I think you're doing great. About the basics, do you mean backstories or like the city, names, places stuff like that? Because from what you've told me I think you have a basic skeleton to start from. You have Jaden and some of his story all you really need is the city and your heros. When you find the name(s) of the hero you'll know just keep looking. Most the names in my story I got from looking through baby names.

As the basics, I mean what I want the general outline of my hero to be. I'm leaning towards the Aladdin type, in this city where aristocracy rules with such an economic gap, he'd be on the poor end while Jadon's on the rich end. I'm not sure about his special abilities, though. He won't be super smart, I don't think. What are some likeable traits? I thought maybe he could lead a tough life, but have a positive attitude about it. That would make a confrontation with Jadon rather heated, as he'd tell him why he's so damn spoiled. x]

Here's an idea:
Jadon was an orphan, blahblah, but once they discover his gifted intelligence (not overly genius, just very capable. IQ in the high 160's), they 'adopt' him into a high-class family, and he goes from there. Still, with a soft spot for the others that were left behind, he often goes back and visits; Another smart orphan will be Laufeia Morta (Goddess of evil&destruction, Greek name for the goddess who cuts the string of life. Foreshadowing much?), his soft spot. Still, in some way, after his defeat, she grows up and becomes the next villain looking for revenge. :'D The hero could be somebody who was also close to her, so she knows them. Maybe somebody who took over taking care of the orphanage, or somebody who makes frequent visits for goodness sake?

I wanna see your stories! :'D I do the same thing with the baby names, but I usually have SOME sort of idea of what I want them to be like. <33

OH! Another idea:
Jadon, initially, has a small schizo attack and in his mental breakdown, purposely concocts something, and with caffeine as the only left ingredient, mixes it with his drink.
Laufeia is the only person who directly knows that Jadon is -insertaliashere-, and requests to be his 'sidekick'. As an older sibling, almost, he goes to create something for her to give her whatever ability it was she wanted, but by strange circumstances, the hero consumes it and gets that power. That could branch Jadon and Laufeia's initial prejudice against him/her. I think it's going to be a him. In accordance, I'm thinking that Jadon's defeat will be in his own school's lab, with Laufeia, as he's readying something for her again. She's wounded terribly by an acidic compound or something, something to rot patches of her skin away (like two-face and the fire!), and as a sequel, she comes back much older, having repaired herself. Her skill will be with the needle and thread, especially to go along with her name Morta. Does that sound epic or obnoxious? XD;

[Kiwi Crime Fighter]

BlueDragonX

Enjolras Teh Rebel

I think that if you tied Nova's story to Len's, it would be very interesting. Also, the contract should have a lot of elements to it, rather than teaching him how to fight, maybe even a doujble-edged sword. I'd find that super entertaining. :'D

Btw, I have a friend named Nova. Haha!

As well as going into that cave, if it's so forbidden, he must have a very hard time getting in. It sounds too easy for him to just follow.

Hmm, you're right about the entering cave part. Perhaps, the entrance was sealed by some kind of door/control panel and Valex was able to figure it out, since I posted earlier that Nova and Valex have some sort of connection with each other.

This reminds me of Code Geass. x]
Would he be the genius type? Maybe he has some sort of clever way of taking a uniform? That would be super interesting, too, if executed well.

I like your concept and names. :'D Keep it up!

[BlueDragonX]

What does double-edge sword mean in literature terms again? Speaking of double-edge swords, I'm thinking of Lenzo's weapon of choice a double-edge sword that can disconnect.

[i S A D G A S M i]

Does anyone know if there are any novels where part of the story involves vampires running a funeral home where they turn people into vampires for their love one's in exchange for blood? Cause, I had the idea for a novel with this back-story/setting, but I don't want to be ripping anyone off "too much."

My idea is that the vampires in my stories are just human's with a disease. The conditions of the vampires are this; garlic and sunlight irritate their cells which causes intense pain and discomfort if they are near either of them for long period of times; they are immortal in the sense that their body constantly repairs itself, they have a super-powerful immune system that eliminates all foreign bodies immediately, they heal quickly so the only way to kill them is with fire or decapitation, and their body quickly ages or revitalizes itself when they become a vampire to what their body would be in if it was in perfect condition after puberty; they have to drink blood to survive, but its only to replenish their old blood, which is fed on by the parasitic vampire disease they have, old blood is sweated out through pours after the nucleus of the cell is consumed by the disease, they still have to eat human food on a regular basis; they are slightly faster and stronger than the most fit of non-infected humans. They can be turned into vampires up to a week after they died, because by then the soul has left the body and so the body has no will to heal itself even with the aid of the disease. The vampires also cannot mate, because they stop reproducing/releasing sex cells. They also lose the majority of their memories when they become vampires if they died before getting the disease, because the brain is damaged as it deteriorates.

Also any opinions or ideas would be a big help. If you want to know more about my idea for a plot, I got a basic idea, I'll tell you if anyone wants to know.

[Ophiucha]

BlueDragonX

What does double-edge sword mean in literature terms again? Speaking of double-edge swords, I'm thinking of Lenzo's weapon of choice a double-edge sword that can disconnect.

A double-edged sword is a situation or choice where both sides aren't without their consequences. Damned if you do, damned if you don't. Catch-22. It can also be something that is beneficial and consequential at the same time - something that hurts your enemy while simultaneously putting yourself at risk, if you will.

[Iino Kumiko]

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As the basics, I mean what I want the general outline of my hero to be. I'm leaning towards the Aladdin type, in this city where aristocracy rules with such an economic gap, he'd be on the poor end while Jadon's on the rich end. I'm not sure about his special abilities, though. He won't be super smart, I don't think. What are some likeable traits? I thought maybe he could lead a tough life, but have a positive attitude about it. That would make a confrontation with Jadon rather heated, as he'd tell him why he's so damn spoiled. x]

Here's an idea:
Jadon was an orphan, blahblah, but once they discover his gifted intelligence (not overly genius, just very capable. IQ in the high 160's), they 'adopt' him into a high-class family, and he goes from there. Still, with a soft spot for the others that were left behind, he often goes back and visits; Another smart orphan will be Laufeia Morta (Goddess of evil&destruction, Greek name for the goddess who cuts the string of life. Foreshadowing much?), his soft spot. Still, in some way, after his defeat, she grows up and becomes the next villain looking for revenge. :'D The hero could be somebody who was also close to her, so she knows them. Maybe somebody who took over taking care of the orphanage, or somebody who makes frequent visits for goodness sake?

I wanna see your stories! :'D I do the same thing with the baby names, but I usually have SOME sort of idea of what I want them to be like. <33

OH! Another idea:
Jadon, initially, has a small schizo attack and in his mental breakdown, purposely concocts something, and with caffeine as the only left ingredient, mixes it with his drink.
Laufeia is the only person who directly knows that Jadon is -insertaliashere-, and requests to be his 'sidekick'. As an older sibling, almost, he goes to create something for her to give her whatever ability it was she wanted, but by strange circumstances, the hero consumes it and gets that power. That could branch Jadon and Laufeia's initial prejudice against him/her. I think it's going to be a him. In accordance, I'm thinking that Jadon's defeat will be in his own school's lab, with Laufeia, as he's readying something for her again. She's wounded terribly by an acidic compound or something, something to rot patches of her skin away (like two-face and the fire!), and as a sequel, she comes back much older, having repaired herself. Her skill will be with the needle and thread, especially to go along with her name Morta. Does that sound epic or obnoxious? XD;

First off, I find the "Aladdin" idea to be very interesting. I think that would really make this super hero different. As for likable traits some of the ones I find I like most are where a character is slightly awkward but sure of themselves enough to know what they want/need to do.

The orphanage owner thing would be awesome. The hero could grow up and actually work out his social problems to become rich. Maybe he's a doctor or something. Lol. Random idea there, but the point of that is for him/her to buy the orphanage to give back to the life he knew as a child trying to make it better for the kids there now OR he could donate money to them once a month or something in order to help out causing him to not only be there but be PART of the orphange plans like rebuilding or whatever. Also maybe Jadon and the orphans are at a benefit being held by the Hero and Jaden plans to give Laufeia the drink that night to help her become super powered but he loses the vile and its found by like a kitchen attendent and is placed in the Hero's drink by mistake. xD Another random thought.

As for the Jadon/Laufeia idea I think that sounds extremely good. Don't get too far ahead of yourself though that can make writing the first part more difficult. You're doing great from what I can see and when I think about it in my head I think this would be an awesome movie. Haha.

[Kiwi Crime Fighter]

Iino Kumiko

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As the basics, I mean what I want the general outline of my hero to be. I'm leaning towards the Aladdin type, in this city where aristocracy rules with such an economic gap, he'd be on the poor end while Jadon's on the rich end. I'm not sure about his special abilities, though. He won't be super smart, I don't think. What are some likeable traits? I thought maybe he could lead a tough life, but have a positive attitude about it. That would make a confrontation with Jadon rather heated, as he'd tell him why he's so damn spoiled. x]

Here's an idea:
Jadon was an orphan, blahblah, but once they discover his gifted intelligence (not overly genius, just very capable. IQ in the high 160's), they 'adopt' him into a high-class family, and he goes from there. Still, with a soft spot for the others that were left behind, he often goes back and visits; Another smart orphan will be Laufeia Morta (Goddess of evil&destruction, Greek name for the goddess who cuts the string of life. Foreshadowing much?), his soft spot. Still, in some way, after his defeat, she grows up and becomes the next villain looking for revenge. :'D The hero could be somebody who was also close to her, so she knows them. Maybe somebody who took over taking care of the orphanage, or somebody who makes frequent visits for goodness sake?

I wanna see your stories! :'D I do the same thing with the baby names, but I usually have SOME sort of idea of what I want them to be like. <33

OH! Another idea:
Jadon, initially, has a small schizo attack and in his mental breakdown, purposely concocts something, and with caffeine as the only left ingredient, mixes it with his drink.
Laufeia is the only person who directly knows that Jadon is -insertaliashere-, and requests to be his 'sidekick'. As an older sibling, almost, he goes to create something for her to give her whatever ability it was she wanted, but by strange circumstances, the hero consumes it and gets that power. That could branch Jadon and Laufeia's initial prejudice against him/her. I think it's going to be a him. In accordance, I'm thinking that Jadon's defeat will be in his own school's lab, with Laufeia, as he's readying something for her again. She's wounded terribly by an acidic compound or something, something to rot patches of her skin away (like two-face and the fire!), and as a sequel, she comes back much older, having repaired herself. Her skill will be with the needle and thread, especially to go along with her name Morta. Does that sound epic or obnoxious? XD;

First off, I find the "Aladdin" idea to be very interesting. I think that would really make this super hero different. As for likable traits some of the ones I find I like most are where a character is slightly awkward but sure of themselves enough to know what they want/need to do.

The orphanage owner thing would be awesome. The hero could grow up and actually work out his social problems to become rich. Maybe he's a doctor or something. Lol. Random idea there, but the point of that is for him/her to buy the orphanage to give back to the life he knew as a child trying to make it better for the kids there now OR he could donate money to them once a month or something in order to help out causing him to not only be there but be PART of the orphange plans like rebuilding or whatever. Also maybe Jadon and the orphans are at a benefit being held by the Hero and Jaden plans to give Laufeia the drink that night to help her become super powered but he loses the vile and its found by like a kitchen attendent and is placed in the Hero's drink by mistake. xD Another random thought.

As for the Jadon/Laufeia idea I think that sounds extremely good. Don't get too far ahead of yourself though that can make writing the first part more difficult. You're doing great from what I can see and when I think about it in my head I think this would be an awesome movie. Haha.

First off, I'd like to mention that I'm working off my phone, incase something's weird and somebody else responded to me. I likely didn't see it.. >_> I'll check back when I get home, lol.

I think that, when I start writing this, a lot more will come to me. I'm usually pretty good with making quirky, strictly realistic, slightly awkward characters, but I'm having a hard time making him good enough to make a 'hero' as opposed to simply a protagonist.
I had another idea with the vial mix-up; maybe instead of Laufeia asking to have any kind of power, she's sick, and Jadon's initially supposed to get her an expensive cure or something, but he either tampers with it or Jadon makes the conscious decision to give her powers on his own accord. That means I don't have to come up with some power that a little girl would want, per se.

Haha, I did get waaay ahead of myself, but it came so naturally! Villains, I think, are actually /exponentially/ easier. These aren't my only villain ideas, either, roflmao.

[Lightly_Amorous]

Lightly_Amorous

Okay, well, I've been writing a story for about a year now. It's one hundred seventy-three pages long and I am completely in love with it.
That's all great and happy and whatnot, but it's still untitled...
I'll give a gist of the story so maybe someone can help me.

Matty is a slave. The world he lives in is (maybe) futuristic or maybe in some alternate world that exists only within my strange little brain. This world is cruel and centers around The Market, which is essentially a slave trade. Those who cannot support themselves have two options. Death by starvation or exposure or a life of servitude.. Matty's parents, when he was young, sold him because they could no longer support him. He was later bought by a woman who is never named except for 'Mistress.' Matty loves his Mistress. She has taken care of him since he was six years old, feeding, housing and training him to the best of her ability. He admires her and pines for her attention. But, after ten years, Mistress has come upon hard times financially and is forced to sell Matty back.
He's crushed, naturally, but has no choice but to move forward. The rest of the story deals with him going from Owner to Owner, enduring the hardship of their every whim and also finding love and friendship along the way.
I think it's a traditional coming-of-age story told a very unconventional way.
Anyway, some titles that have floated through my mind are Bound, Broken, Chained and all things that come with slavery...but they seem too straightforward. So...help?

I named it!
I named it!
-Dances around and around and around-
Finally! It only took terrible stomach cramps and a sleepless night to give me the perfect name. Matty's life is never within his control, and so the story's name is Under Control.
It's wonderful and I'm so proud of myself for actually coming up with a name after a year and a half...I just had to share...