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I... think I'm stuck.

1. Mr. BT has been kidnapped.

2. His kidnappers have made a not-ransom movie which was broadcast to the nation.

3. They then relocated Mr. BT to a place miles and miles away from where the movie was created.

4. The thing is, they have relocated Mr. BT to a place that he finds frighteningly familiar -- he's been there before.

Thing is, I'm having trouble coming up what this frighteningly familiar place was. He has to have been there many times before, though. And I'm completely stumped. It can't be a childhood home or anything, it has to be something familiar but in a cold, professional manner.

If you want it to be familiar in a "cold, professional manner," try thinking abut the professional aspect of Mr. BT's life. What did/does he do for a living? It could be a now-abandoned office, warehouse (though that may be cliche), some other place of business, etc. Or perhaps a parent took him to work often as a child?

Sounds good. What about an old office building of his, maybe a place where some business deal went wrong, where he got fired once, etc? That event and the fact that he hates his profession could be enough to create the environment you want for your character. OR, you could make the hospital where he was diagnosed now abandoned, and hold him hostage there?

This is a mechanics question. I'm sorry if it doesn't quite fit but I didn't know where else to ask this.

Well I just received my first-ever beta'd chapter...I've already had to admit that I don't use as many commas as I should, especially where compound sentences are concerned but now I have another issue.

I'm not a big user of the word "that." That is to say I don't use it frequently in such contexts as: say that, thought that, felt that, understood that, etc.

Is this stylistically acceptable or simply grammatically incorrect? I hate admitting I'm wrong, but I'd rather fix a mistake than continue to be in the wrong.

I think you miunderstand: I don't use that.

Does this mean I should be wary of where I accept the use of 'that'?

I hope this is the right place to put this, but uhm here I go, I wated to write like a story about these people with powers. There are three branches, Palladins, Demonists, and Knights. They travel in pairs of two and are trying to save the world from the villians 'the Fathers,' who are brainwashing people to sign up for the military, to fight these people with powers. The people can form into groups, I'm not sure how to say it but like, on that episode of DBZ where trunks and goten like became gotenks or what not? Sorry bad analogy, anyways, They can, oh yeah got it, They can Fuse together and make one class. Here is what I have come up with for basics.

Palladin + Knight = Saint

Demonist + Knight = Monster

Palladins + Demonist = Magisters

Palladins + Palladins = Priests

Demonsts + Demonists = Devils

Knights + Knights = Gaurdians.

I have the idea, just no where else to go. I really need help. I was thinking about turning it into an RP just to see where it would go. Help?

So do I just post the portion of the writing that I would like help on??

I have several stories that I would like some constructive criticism and help with smile