Welcome to Gaia! :: Need Help or Ideas? Come to the Think Tank and Idea Box!

Log In

Forgot your login?

Sign Up

Register
 
GST
 Post Reply
Gaia Forums » Artist's Corner » Writers
Sticky: Need Help or Ideas? Come to the Think Tank and Idea Box!
Export this topic to other sites using WildFire!
forum:15, topic:4803263
|« <<< << < 1 2 3 ... 350 351 352 ... 362 363 364 > >> »|
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5251 created on Thu Jun 12, 2008 2:14 amPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 2:14 am
There is one story that I have been trying to work on for two years called "Eternity Stars". I have come up with different storylines, but none of them ever flew. But now I'm going to revert back to one of my earlier storylines that revolves around an 18 year old named Kyle Maverick (formally Leon Maverick) who is part of the newly established Galactic Interplanetary Guardians Alliance or the GIGA and his female partner Mihira Kirschil who is an alien known as a miershan. Miershans are elven-like aliens. There is also the Alliance Military Federation/Force or AMF who don't exactly see eye to eye with the GIGA, although Kyle is good friends with one of the soldiers named Gregis Lindblum. I'm trying to mix it into a sci-fi/medieval fantasy.
 
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5252 created on Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:36 pmPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:36 pm
 
"Mizuki Hyuuga"
What you want me to be,


Well that was kind of the point, they go about their daily lives for one more day, and then are suddenly mashed together. That's the kind of surprise I had wanted by showing them all at once. But it's worth a shot, huh?

is probably what I won't. . .


Yeah it is. Good luck to ya!
     
It takes a second to learn a persons name, a minute to find somthing you like about them, an hour to appreciate them, and a day to love them. But it takes a lifetime to forget them.
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5253 created on Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:47 pmPosted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 8:47 pm
"Mizuki Hyuuga"
What you want me to be,


I think I know what your getting at. I did that in my spy story. I still haven't said the MC name yet, but described them right before the end. The only problem is that I'd be jumping through 6 PoV to try and describe them, since they've never met before meeting in Antera, but i could try working it out somehow. Thanks again!

is probably what I won't. . .


You could do something like, six character prologues before starting the first chapter or something like that. I mean hey, it was done in Wild ARMS 1-3.
 
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5254 created on Fri Jun 13, 2008 7:53 pmPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 7:53 pm
 
I have a problem with cliches. I begin with a prologue, and it intro's the two main characters. The problem is, the setting seems a bit too, "Tragedy at Midnight". I need the tragedy to happen in the prologue, but it seems cliche with the setting. Any ideas on how to make the scene attention grabbing without it being a "Dark, and Stormy night" type?

Anything else I put really seems to fail at conveying the mood I want properly.
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5255 created on Fri Jun 13, 2008 8:51 pmPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 8:51 pm
There was once a writer who didn't want to name her dog anything cliche. So she named it Cliche. Think outside the box. You'll come up with something.
 
     
Are you ready for darkness
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5256 created on Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:22 pmPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:22 pm
 
In my story Rune Knights, I've decided to end each chapter with a "reflected thought", where the MC, Lukas, will reflect his thoughts. I wrote down three. The first one is thought relfect of the first chapter, while the second and third will be near the end, if I decide to go this "route". They will contain spoilers.

“And so, my first day at the academy; of my new life has come to a close. Already, I have made a friend as well as an enemy. What awaits for me in this chapter of my new life?”

“And so, because of me, of discovering about the terrifying power that is within me, and the truth about my birth, I slowly started to drift into a void of darkness and despair and released my inner shadow. If it weren’t for my friends saving me, even though I’ve caused them a lot of pain, I would’ve been trapped in that void for all eternity.”


“And so, the final battle has finally come to an end. The rune scar on my back, the source of my terrifying power and my inner shadow is no longer and I can now live the rest of my days in peace, knowing that I am free of my cursed destiny. All I can do now is wait and see what the future holds for me. But…..will there even be a future for me?”

The final battle will be against Lukas' own inner shadow that has freed itself from his body. His appearance will be exactly Lukas' of course, except for having red hair/brown eyes, he'll have white hair/glowing red eyes and six black angel wings. The top and bottom wings will be shorter then the ones in the middle.
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5257 created on Fri Jun 13, 2008 11:02 pmPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 11:02 pm
"Mr. Nevermore"
I have a problem with cliches. I begin with a prologue, and it intro's the two main characters. The problem is, the setting seems a bit too, "Tragedy at Midnight". I need the tragedy to happen in the prologue, but it seems cliche with the setting. Any ideas on how to make the scene attention grabbing without it being a "Dark, and Stormy night" type?

Anything else I put really seems to fail at conveying the mood I want properly.
What about making the night a nice, clear, pleasant night with a pleasant mood? That could contrast with the tragedy, making it seem more dramatic, perhaps?
 
     
ED Mod assisstant.

Interested in a literate RP. I'm flexible.

Constructive criticism requested.

There's so much comedy on television. Does that cause comedy in the streets?
-- d**k Cavett, mocking the TV-violence debate


Report this post
Post: 4803263_5258 created on Sat Jun 14, 2008 4:27 pmPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 4:27 pm
 
ok cool i love this idea rolleyes rolleyes rolleyes rolleyes rolleyes
     

sovandas
Get Your License
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5259 created on Sat Jun 14, 2008 5:31 pmPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 5:31 pm
"Mizuki Hyuuga"
What you want me to be,


Damn your good. . .

is probably what I won't. . .


Who are you talking about?
 
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5260 created on Mon Jun 16, 2008 4:50 amPosted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 4:50 am
 
I like the idea behind this thread, count me in. I write various things, poetry, novel, short story, etc. Want help with names for fantasy novels and such? Please feel free to pm me with questions.
     
I make custom banners for gold & MC's, ask me about it. PM for details.

Questing 2 Ancient Katana's & a Nitemare Headband. 19,205 / 2,000,000 gold - Halp???
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5262 created on Tue Jun 17, 2008 10:48 pmPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2008 10:48 pm
I'm in need of a second opinion. It's a small little detail, but it will effect how I write the character, so figuring this out would be a big help.

Okay, so here's the sitch: Post Apocalyptic world, kinda silly tone, lots of action. One of the characters, Rig, is a thirty-something, no nonsense leader of this scavenger tribe. Now about a month before the story starts Rig had a little accident involving a rocket and his face. Since his body was toast, the tribe took what was left of his mind and put it inside the only extra body they had, which happened to be a female sex bot. Initially he has full control of the body, but gradually the bots programming starts to get into his mind.

What I'm unsure about is whether or not his voice should be male or female. From a logical perspective it probably should be female, but I kinda like the idea of it switching back and forth depending on who is in charge. Plus the thought of a rumbling bass voice coming out of an uber female body has potential to be both amusing and a little disturbing.

It's a rather silly question, but I'd appreciate a second opinion.
 
     


PL: 5 GB: 5 BT: 10
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5263 created on Wed Jun 18, 2008 12:29 amPosted: Wed Jun 18, 2008 12:29 am
 
Maybe it doesn't switch with whose in control, but with thoughts. Like he could be thinking of the bots programming (ya know, the icky part) and starts talking in a female voice. Or maybe when shows female traits, like motherly or something like that. I like the idea though. It adds a funny twist to the whole post apocalypse theme.
     
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5264 created on Wed Jun 18, 2008 1:44 amPosted: Wed Jun 18, 2008 1:44 am
Thanks for the feedback. I think I will go with switching back and forth. And oh the awkwardness that will come from it. xd
 
     


PL: 5 GB: 5 BT: 10
Report this post
Post: 4803263_5265 created on Wed Jun 18, 2008 5:21 pmPosted: Wed Jun 18, 2008 5:21 pm
 
Um... I think I'm going to pitch an idea... Is that OK?
Ha-ha... Anyway!

Changed forever only a few years before the plotline, three girls were cursed with super-human abilities: including speed, agility, and in-human fighting skills. They were given these to fight Them, an unnamed race of beings that suck the souls out of humans, like vampires suck blood. They use the souls to give themselves eternal life, but become dependant on it easily... Meaning, with the growing number of Them, someone has to stop them and I can only be the three. That I mentioned up there. -points-
     
|« <<< << < 1 2 3 ... 350 351 352 ... 362 363 364 > >> »|
 Post Reply
Gaia Forums » Artist's Corner » Writers
 Subscribe to Topic  Report this Topic