Mooni Aria
I_Write_Ivre
Mooni Aria
I_Write_Ivre
Mooni Aria
Unlike my last story, this isn't set to be realistic.
This is a fictional story, and in this, they use the minerals they mine as resources.
The thieves steal the minerals to also use as resources.
And the reason for an exit to the mine is because maybe they just hadn't mined it out yet.
I'd appreciate it if you tried less picking apart of my literature.
Pointing out plot holes I part of the purpose of this thread. It points out areas author hadn't considered or prompts further explanation, which leads to better understanding the problem.
Mining is extremely dangerous and not done for small personal gain. This and the exit siuaion sound more like a quarry than a mine. This could definitely affect the transition and timing of the bomb.
again this is fictional
i could call it a quarry then
We'd only have a clue about nonfictional mining bless you explain how it works I you world. This isn't a thread full of psychics.
Is using is quarry any different in your story? How is it different and how is this presented to the reader.
no, calling it a quarry won't make a difference.
Same concept.
Same concept as what?
A nonfictional mine? Those are notoriously dangerous for workers, who are punished for keeping what they mine as personal. Not to mention mined minerals tend to be useless as ore. Miners have had a long history of oppression and exploitation and even today some minerals carry a connection to such harsh treatment (like diamonds and zinc, which are mostly done by forced child labor).
A nonfictional quarry is a bit different as work is seasonal, what's cut or blasted out can immediately be used, quarry workers can take the occasional price home or buy from smaller companies (or keep it if the quarry is jointly owned by them), and quarry work was sometimes associated with the craftsmen who worked the material.
A fictional mine could be in the clouds where marshmallows are mined for all anyone else knows.
Are these people happy, healthy, and able to keep materials mined? We need an actual explanation beyond 'fiction' to understand how they'd react to two strangers. How often and how long do people mine? Is the mine guarded? Why or why not, other than 'fiction'? This will help in how best to recommend anything for the transition.
If 'fiction' is the only reason, then just write 'fiction' for the transition. When you have a made up world, you replace one reason with another; you don't ignore reasons altogether.