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- Posted: Fri, 03 Dec 2004 01:41:36 +0000
I can't decide if this is a Mary Sue or not.. Any comments, suggestions, constructive criticism would be nice. And very much appreciated. The character is modeled after my avatar, sad, but it must be done!
I listed them in an organized way just to get my head straight, a rough draft before I incorporate her into a story/artwork. (downwards) I need specific help on her last name, and the wording for her appearance. I would like to add more too it, but I'm in a writers block gonk
Name: Marcel -last name unspecified-
Age: 14
Appearance : Marcel's ashened hair, if you could call it that, fell down above her lips with a slight jut outwards. It twisted and tangled into massive tangles that would hide most of her jet blue eyes. Her hair stayed un-frizzled for the most part, which was useful because most of the time she would stick pencil or pieces of charcoal between her ear.
She wore a grey pinstripe vest with a strapless bra under it, and some black, baggy, crafty pants hung below her waist reveal white and blue poke a doted boxers. Her pants were pretty scratched up, with a fake lumpy tail in the back that went to her knees. Handmade by hers truly. Although that wasn't something she liked to brag about. She also wore old beat up black converse.
Personality: Her adolescent appearance fooled many to think she was some punk, out to do no good kind of kid. Even though she would often dress the "part" many had subjected her too, she was a pretty well of youngster.
Marcel, she was an artist. She acted, wrote stories, was starting up another time dwelling activity, singing. She wants to learn how to draw, but can not get the hang of it. Her eyes see the picture, but her hands draw another thing. It frustrates her, and usually ruins her day. Skills in poetry have never been all that great, and because of her struggle to perform all these activities she can loose management of her life. Marcel has never attempted to play any musical instruments, claiming that all the chords and everything would confuse her to a point of no return. Studies are going ok, not as much as her father would like, but she's making good grades on tests, and LIT projects. She's eager to learn, and co-operate though. But, at times can be stubborn, and not budge for the life of her.
Eextra: She weighs 110 lbs, and stands at a 5?6
Background History: Her parents are separated, leaving a gap in Marcel's life. While she does not see what is such a big deal about it, other people will often blame her faults on how she is not raised in a "proper" house hold. Around Holidays though it does seem a little strange, hearing her friends say how they're going to some place with their parents, two parents. All Marcel has to look forward too is the Christmas in her mom's independent run cafe, or in the radio station where her father works.
I listed them in an organized way just to get my head straight, a rough draft before I incorporate her into a story/artwork. (downwards) I need specific help on her last name, and the wording for her appearance. I would like to add more too it, but I'm in a writers block gonk
Name: Marcel -last name unspecified-
Age: 14
Appearance : Marcel's ashened hair, if you could call it that, fell down above her lips with a slight jut outwards. It twisted and tangled into massive tangles that would hide most of her jet blue eyes. Her hair stayed un-frizzled for the most part, which was useful because most of the time she would stick pencil or pieces of charcoal between her ear.
She wore a grey pinstripe vest with a strapless bra under it, and some black, baggy, crafty pants hung below her waist reveal white and blue poke a doted boxers. Her pants were pretty scratched up, with a fake lumpy tail in the back that went to her knees. Handmade by hers truly. Although that wasn't something she liked to brag about. She also wore old beat up black converse.
Personality: Her adolescent appearance fooled many to think she was some punk, out to do no good kind of kid. Even though she would often dress the "part" many had subjected her too, she was a pretty well of youngster.
Marcel, she was an artist. She acted, wrote stories, was starting up another time dwelling activity, singing. She wants to learn how to draw, but can not get the hang of it. Her eyes see the picture, but her hands draw another thing. It frustrates her, and usually ruins her day. Skills in poetry have never been all that great, and because of her struggle to perform all these activities she can loose management of her life. Marcel has never attempted to play any musical instruments, claiming that all the chords and everything would confuse her to a point of no return. Studies are going ok, not as much as her father would like, but she's making good grades on tests, and LIT projects. She's eager to learn, and co-operate though. But, at times can be stubborn, and not budge for the life of her.
Eextra: She weighs 110 lbs, and stands at a 5?6
Background History: Her parents are separated, leaving a gap in Marcel's life. While she does not see what is such a big deal about it, other people will often blame her faults on how she is not raised in a "proper" house hold. Around Holidays though it does seem a little strange, hearing her friends say how they're going to some place with their parents, two parents. All Marcel has to look forward too is the Christmas in her mom's independent run cafe, or in the radio station where her father works.
