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Do any of these hook you or does it push you away? If you were to read one of these lines on the back of a book cover, would you be interested in trying it out? Or is the whole saving the world thing too generic? That's what I want to know.

Short and simple. Vote and or leave a comment if you'd like.

Thank you for that insight. I definitely feel as though everything you've said is true, but I want to combine several ideas into a one sentence concept. Your pointers have pointed out both the flaws and the bonuses between them all. It was enough to give me a chance to re-write the sentence a few times in other ways. I had been stuck repeating the same catch phrases. I still haven't found a sentence I'm completely set on, but I think I may have a working runner for now.

The idea is to make this my check sentence or my stuck sentence. If I start writing on a tangent, but like what I've written, then I'll check it by this sentence. If I get stuck, I'll look back to this and reflect on what's been written compared to where I need to go.

So overall, the sentence only matters to me, but if it's one that can capture the attention of a reader, then I'm hoping it will transfer into the overall writing. We'll see if this works or not, but I thought it would be worth a try.

I chose none of the above because they all seemed to give too much away about the over all story. If I didn't know it was the same old "save the world" thing I see everywhere, and there was a little more about the character(s) who would be featured, I might be a little more interested.

There is also the issue of most "save the world" scenarios I've seen ending in the world being saved, which immediately ruins any tension there might have been. Please do not take that too harshly as a judgment on what you are writing.