Neko186
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- Posted: Sun, 03 Feb 2013 23:09:04 +0000
This is something I've been working on for a long time, it's rather long, but I'd like input and opinions on anything to make it flow better.... any likes or dislikes, I take criticism fairly well so please, don't hold back... assuming anyone is even going to read this XP
The Broken Petals of a Bleeding Heart
Prologue
The entire court was busy preparing for the evening to come. The king sat at his chair watching over the servants, he wanted me make sure absolutely everything was perfect.
A messenger approached the king, bowed and whispered in his ear. He stood from his throne, tall and noble, his silver hair, not a sign of his age, but of his courage. He was not old by any means nor did he look it. His beard covered his strong jaw and it laid neatly in its' place. He had changed over the years, he was once a ruthless king, demanding obedience and loyalty, he became the loving king the realm desired. "My guests will arrive at the setting of the west sun," his voice was strong and deep, all of the servants turned to him, "I expect things to be much further along when I return." he turned to the messenger and nodded.
As he walked down the hallway, the sunshine set a glow on the walls as the sky turned from blue the orange and pinks that spread to the horizon. The hallway was wide, guards stood every twenty feet or so, saluting the king as he passed. The servants, all running up and down the halls for the evening, all stood against the wall and bowed at sight of the king.
He stopped at a large wooden door and motioned the guard to let him through. He opened the door to the sight of a beautiful young woman, a Demi-human. Her hair fell to the middle of her back and was a golden brown with the slightest kiss of red that gleamed when the sun brushed off it which kinked and curled and twisted at the tips. A single rose held up part of her hair, matching her dress. Pearls lined the top and waist, lace connected the strapless dress to a necklace she wore tightly around her neck. Her cat ears and tail were as white as the pearls she wore. She looked at the king with eyes as blue as sapphires, "Léandre," her voice was soft, sweet and fell gently on your ears, one could not help but smile at the sound of her voice.
"Valora, my queen," he held his arms out to embrace his wife, calmness overcame Léandre as he affectionately held Valora.
"Can we not discuss this Léandre? Or at the very least postpone it?"
"I promise you, this is for the best. Liam is a good boy, I have known his father since childhood."
"It's not that, I feel as though Asher should also have a suitor before any proposal is made for Aurora."
"We have several opportunities, and if you wish, you may accompany me next week to decide," he kissed her on the forehead, "but the day we present Aurora to the nobles in the west, but it is also Asher and Aurora's fourth birthday, it's a day to celebrate."
Valora smiled in agreement. "Now," Léandre spoke softly, "see to it that the children are ready, our guests will be arriving soon."
The west sun set and the sky faded from a dusty orange to the star lit sky. The moons glowed, illuminating the palace and all of the guests that had begun to arrive with their gifts. The music played as the night wore on, dances were danced, laughs were had, and silence became the palace as the trumpets flared. Léandre stood at his table, "Tonight is a pleasure and a gift, where is Landon?"
A man stepped through the crowd, a young boy, no older than six stood behind him, clinging to his father's trousers, pretending to be invisible.
Léandre smiled, "And this is Liam?" he held out his left hand to the young boy, walking him in front of the long table where his family sat along the other side. He held out his other hand to Aurora, bringing her to the front of the table. He stood there a moment, Liam on his left and Aurora to his right. "Landon here, is my oldest childhood friend." he went on, regaling times in their mischievous childhood, he looked to Liam, seeing his father and smiled, "Aurora, this is Liam, your future husband."
Aurora, let go of her father's hand and took a step toward Liam, "Are you the Duke of Verboten?"
"I am," the boy spoke quietly.
"Then I should like to kiss you now." The crowd awed as Aurora reached up on tip-toes and kissed Liam on his cheek, and then - darkness.
The Broken Petals of a Bleeding Heart
Prologue
The entire court was busy preparing for the evening to come. The king sat at his chair watching over the servants, he wanted me make sure absolutely everything was perfect.
A messenger approached the king, bowed and whispered in his ear. He stood from his throne, tall and noble, his silver hair, not a sign of his age, but of his courage. He was not old by any means nor did he look it. His beard covered his strong jaw and it laid neatly in its' place. He had changed over the years, he was once a ruthless king, demanding obedience and loyalty, he became the loving king the realm desired. "My guests will arrive at the setting of the west sun," his voice was strong and deep, all of the servants turned to him, "I expect things to be much further along when I return." he turned to the messenger and nodded.
As he walked down the hallway, the sunshine set a glow on the walls as the sky turned from blue the orange and pinks that spread to the horizon. The hallway was wide, guards stood every twenty feet or so, saluting the king as he passed. The servants, all running up and down the halls for the evening, all stood against the wall and bowed at sight of the king.
He stopped at a large wooden door and motioned the guard to let him through. He opened the door to the sight of a beautiful young woman, a Demi-human. Her hair fell to the middle of her back and was a golden brown with the slightest kiss of red that gleamed when the sun brushed off it which kinked and curled and twisted at the tips. A single rose held up part of her hair, matching her dress. Pearls lined the top and waist, lace connected the strapless dress to a necklace she wore tightly around her neck. Her cat ears and tail were as white as the pearls she wore. She looked at the king with eyes as blue as sapphires, "Léandre," her voice was soft, sweet and fell gently on your ears, one could not help but smile at the sound of her voice.
"Valora, my queen," he held his arms out to embrace his wife, calmness overcame Léandre as he affectionately held Valora.
"Can we not discuss this Léandre? Or at the very least postpone it?"
"I promise you, this is for the best. Liam is a good boy, I have known his father since childhood."
"It's not that, I feel as though Asher should also have a suitor before any proposal is made for Aurora."
"We have several opportunities, and if you wish, you may accompany me next week to decide," he kissed her on the forehead, "but the day we present Aurora to the nobles in the west, but it is also Asher and Aurora's fourth birthday, it's a day to celebrate."
Valora smiled in agreement. "Now," Léandre spoke softly, "see to it that the children are ready, our guests will be arriving soon."
The west sun set and the sky faded from a dusty orange to the star lit sky. The moons glowed, illuminating the palace and all of the guests that had begun to arrive with their gifts. The music played as the night wore on, dances were danced, laughs were had, and silence became the palace as the trumpets flared. Léandre stood at his table, "Tonight is a pleasure and a gift, where is Landon?"
A man stepped through the crowd, a young boy, no older than six stood behind him, clinging to his father's trousers, pretending to be invisible.
Léandre smiled, "And this is Liam?" he held out his left hand to the young boy, walking him in front of the long table where his family sat along the other side. He held out his other hand to Aurora, bringing her to the front of the table. He stood there a moment, Liam on his left and Aurora to his right. "Landon here, is my oldest childhood friend." he went on, regaling times in their mischievous childhood, he looked to Liam, seeing his father and smiled, "Aurora, this is Liam, your future husband."
Aurora, let go of her father's hand and took a step toward Liam, "Are you the Duke of Verboten?"
"I am," the boy spoke quietly.
"Then I should like to kiss you now." The crowd awed as Aurora reached up on tip-toes and kissed Liam on his cheek, and then - darkness.