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Post: 58225811_1 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:56:18 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:56:18 +0000

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O w O Ohayo~!

XD i like making manga O 3 O but i really dont have time
moi is sorry ill upload the prototype first XD i hope you like it

The story seems to be a little cheesy but O 3 O i have to rush this
its always a problem to me when i really want my manga to look good
so i keep repeating and repeating it i dont get to finish it so here is my rushed one XD

Manga List <---Im suppose to post many different manga XD

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Genre : Shonen,Shonen Ai
Story : Mizuki a young and cute boy was sent by his mother to get the mantao that they requested, Upon returning home a creature suddenly sync with his as he accidentally eating it now he must fight the enemies that are trying to kill the creature. ~

>...< whoaa oki not shota then XP i thought shota is just little boys X3

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Post: 58225811_2 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:56:30 +0000
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Character

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Post: 58225811_3 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:57:12 +0000
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Hello Edurance

Online Read

Page 1 Page2 Page3 Page 4 Page 5 Page 6 Page 7 Page Chapter Ending XD

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Post: 58225811_4 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:57:24 +0000
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Post: 58225811_5 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:58:26 +0000
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Post: 58225811_6 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:58:41 +0000
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Post: 58225811_7 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 13:59:34 +0000
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Post: 58225811_8 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 14:00:32 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 14:00:32 +0000

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Post: 58225811_9 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 14:32:45 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 14:32:45 +0000

meep

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Post: 58225811_10 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 16:39:35 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 16:39:35 +0000

Shota? Are you bloody serious.

EDIT: You seem pretty young, so there's a chance you don't actually know what "shota" is, but if you do ... guh.

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Post: 58225811_11 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:29:39 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:29:39 +0000

"Shota."

Remove yourself. Do not return.

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Post: 58225811_12 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:29:49 +0000
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Shota? Are you bloody serious.

EDIT: You seem pretty young, so there's a chance you don't actually know what "shota" is, but if you do ... guh.

In case you don't, here's a quote from wiki to explain exactly what it is you're advertising you do here:

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'Shotacon (ショタコン?), sometimes shortened to shota (ショタ, shota?), is a Japanese slang portmanteau of the phrase Shōtarō complex (正太郎コンプレックス, Shōtarō konpurekkusu?) and describes an attraction to young boys, or an individual with such an attraction.... It refers to a genre of manga and anime wherein pre-pubescent or pubescent male characters are depicted in a suggestive manner.'

The Gaia TOS actually basically forbid that, and rightly so, so I suggest you reconsider your comic, or your language.

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Post: 58225811_13 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:45:58 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:45:58 +0000

Not even touching on the shota stuff, but why on earth are there 6 empty posts in this thread? It's very unlikely that you couldn't put the information intended for them into one post.

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Post: 58225811_14 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:54:12 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 17:54:12 +0000

I read it and I have absolutely no idea what's going on. Your layouts are atrocious.

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Post: 58225811_15 created on Thu, 28 Jan 2010 18:01:57 +0000
Posted: Thu, 28 Jan 2010 18:01:57 +0000

...that's a boy? I'm not going to touch the subject of shotacon, I'll just go straight into the comic critique.

I read through your online comic on SmackJeeves. I honestly found it very confusing. The layouts distracted from the story/art more than enhanced it, such as this page here. The top of the page is spaced out nicely, but the bottom is CRAMMED. Where the hell did all these people come from? Who is the girl on the bottom-right? You need to show that your character has changed locations via backgrounds. The top panel looks no different than the previous pages' backgrounds.

On the note of layout, even though you're using a ruler, the panels are crooked all over, like this page. I would suggest buying a T-Square, a special ruler designed to make nice 90 degree angles, or working off gridded paper and image editing-out the blue lines. Panels like these are sloppy, and they reflect badly on you as an artist.

Also, proofread more. Get a friend to proofread your work as well. There is no excuse for mistaking "you're" for "your," or misspelling "listen" with "litsen." It's one thing to type comments online, it's another thing to be writing internet-published comics.

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