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working on the setting, advice and suggestions appreciated
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 6:15 am
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It looks like you've thought this one out long and hard. Bravo.
I don't agree that the the setting is the most important part though. I believe that everything needs to be balanced out in proportions. For me they are(not in any specific order) :
1) writing ability- a combination of good grammar/spelling, balance of action/speech/landscape description, and fluidity with your words.
2) setting - you've already taken care of this! Yay you!
3) characterization- you wouldn't want cardboard cut out characters so don't let the setting out do them.
4) an interesting plot- manage to keep the reader interested (though I'm sure you have something in mind already )
5) stay away from the deadly literary stereotypes.
With that in mind, good luck with this story. It sounds like something I would read.
smile =0
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Review ( I guess)
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 5:47 am
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>w<
Again good luck, just work on the spelling/grammar thing.=0
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Something I noticed in a Manga
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 5:43 am
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As awesome as it is that it's sonic, you're probably going to get some complaints from people for this not being the right forum to post this in. Seriously though, that was hilarious!
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Review ( I guess)
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 5:34 am
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You may not think this true, but spelling IS important.
Actually I believe that an idea doesn't necessarily have to be utterly original. It all really depends on how well it is written and developed. So I can't judge if all I'm given is a bit of information about it. I can only criticize with a SAMPLE of the actual story. Sorry I was no help.
Good luck with your writing though. =0
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Suneset: The Forbidden Indian < My story.
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 5:26 am
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Sexual Watermelons reindrops medley Sexual Watermelons AN ELLIPSIS HAS THREE ******** DOTS. FOUR IF YOU END A SENTENCE WITH IT. NO MORE, NO LESS.
ellipsis nazi much?
Sieg heil.
Hey if that's how the banner waves.....=0
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Suneset: The Forbidden Indian < My story.
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 4:34 am
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Sexual Watermelons AN ELLIPSIS HAS THREE ******** DOTS. FOUR IF YOU END A SENTENCE WITH IT. NO MORE, NO LESS.
ellipsis nazi much?
Just kidding. =0
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Need Some Help With A Story
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 4:16 am
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It's definitely possible. I've seen plenty of books with homosexuality around. Especially nowadays. Remember though, to get something published it takes lots of effort. Your writing skills will play a huge part in that. Just be sure to stay away from those evil literary stereotypes!
I hope your story turns out well!
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I'm writing a story. and this is how it starts off....
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Thu Jun 18, 2009 4:08 am
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Hmmmm.....It's actually not that bad. It could definitely stand for a few improvements though.
Here are some points that might help improve it.
1) There are no descriptions for any settings. This makes the story seem blank. There are many ways to implement small details of the setting without having to go to far into depth.
2) EDIT!!!!CHARACTERS! You must be very careful when using Japanese names if your characters are not Japanese. It makes me fear that your story is written as if it's an anime...with face faulting people and bright purple anti gravity hair.....that's a big no no.....
3) You use 'and then' a bit too much. It gives everything a rushed feel and suppresses the suspense that the dream is supposed to give. Try to develop a better flow. Right now it's sort of jumpy.
4) There are too many he said I said she yelled we said. Try ' he grumbled she spat, she complained, I bellowed'. Also it might do some good to use more words between dialogue. That way it doesn't become just a dialogue.
smile Don't take anything I said too hard, I just wish to help.
Ps- well developed non cardboard cut out characters are happy characters. =0
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Perfecting a Summary....>_-
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Sun Jun 07, 2009 3:07 am
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reindrops medley Forsaken_Blessing Keep it short and to the point. An example, maybe, from one of mine:
Person A:
"Oh, you're writing a story/novel? What about?"
Me:
"Well, it's about a guy who has to go and live with his father, who he hates. His father's abusive, and started taking it out on his step-sister, who didn't think he was anything but a bad seed. They find companionship when neither one believes that such a thing is possible with the other. Oh yeah, the people all have cat ears."
Yeah, that's about it. Leave them wondering, and don't give everything away. If they're like "Oh, I wanna hear more," just say something like "Well, then, you'll have to pick it up in the bookstore one day." Or let them read it, depending on the type of person you are. Just try to keep it basic, but make sure they know your spin of things. Yes, the people in my story really have cat ears. No, they don't have tails or anything else. Yes, there is a reason behind the cat ears besides anime. No, that's not where the idea came from. Something like that can be added to the summary if someone gets on you about a piece of it.
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Perfecting a Summary....>_-
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Sun Jun 07, 2009 3:06 am
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Forsaken_Blessing Keep it short and to the point. An example, maybe, from one of mine:
Person A:
"Oh, you're writing a story/novel? What about?"
Me:
"Well, it's about a guy who has to go and live with his father, who he hates. His father's abusive, and started taking it out on his step-sister, who didn't think he was anything but a bad seed. They find companionship when neither one believes that such a thing is possible with the other. Oh yeah, the people all have cat ears."
Yeah, that's about it. Leave them wondering, and don't give everything away. If they're like "Oh, I wanna hear more," just say something like "Well, then, you'll have to pick it up in the bookstore one day." Or let them read it, depending on the type of person you are. Just try to keep it basic, but make sure they know your spin of things. Yes, the people in my story really have cat ears. No, they don't have tails or anything else. Yes, there is a reason behind the cat ears besides anime. No, that's not where the idea came from. Something like that can be added to the summary if someone gets on you about a piece of it.
Oooh...more good advice! You guys are just a fountain of knowledge.
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