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So I have been working on the male body, mostly because I've always had trouble with it...I think these are the best I’ve drawn in a while but I know I still need to work on a few things...so if you decide to give me some constructive criticism be nice about it say things that will help me please heart


My OCs Marci, Raizin, and Tommy...(in that order)
Raizin and Tommy have different body types so that's what I kinda tried here...
though Tommy's body does kinda bug me a tad bit I think I made him to skinny


This is my vampire OC Angel, he's one of my "cute" characters so I decided to draw him all sexy like...my friend gave me the pose idea lol...and this is the first time I've drawn this pose too so I messed his left leg up and his right knee a little xp lol

OH MY GOD I'M SOOOOOOO SORRY!!!!
I haven't been on for quite some time for two reasons

my parents changed my password cause I got on trouble with grades
AND
my scanner broke again

I feel so bad for just leaveing ya'll like that with no art gonk
I WILL get your art to you as soon as I get my scanner installed again

wich will be tomorrow or the next day or so
again...I AM REALLY SORRY!!!!

okay goto
market then trade

Oh THANK YOU blaugh
that's exactly what I wanted
Thoes were a lot of good points I never really thought about thanks 3nodding

please?

I've been rewriting and rewriting the begining of this story for a long time and I think I finally got a begining that works for the timeline.

please give nice constructive criticism, nothing that won't really help me or is mean please. I've worked hard on trying to get this right.

so here is the Prologue and a part of the first chapter

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My Angel

Prologue

I stared around at my new home, or what would be my new home when I am no longer a student. A dorm room in a private college somewhere in the mountains of Wyoming. As you would expect not a lot of students go here. This also means seclusion for students like me. You see a few hours ago I found out that I had become a monster...A vampire to be precise. I had been one for three weeks and didn't know it; well maybe I knew it, I just didn't want to admit it. Thinking back to the reason I ran away in the first place, it all makes sense.

It still sounds weird to me; "I am a vampire" I almost can't think or say it without it sounding like a joke. It sounded so ridiculous and still does, I just couldn't hold it in when Tristin, the dean and founder of this school, told me. I laughed at him, but then he snapped my neck and said "If your not a vampire you'd die" and that did it. My neck went back into place on its own and I sat there stunned for about 15 minutes. Then it was Tristin's turn to laugh at me. He gave me something to drink and sent me to my dorm. And here I am now.

Contemplating my death, on the way to my dorm I noticed my heart wasn't beating, and that I wasn't breathing. That freaked me out a little and I started to gasp for air until I got a normal pattern back. I probably smell horrible right now; I haven't bathed in three weeks. I need a shower.

I walked into the bathroom and shut the door with my foot. I sat on the toilet and took off my socks and shoes, I forgot to take them off before I got in the bathroom which annoyed me...I guess I'm OCD that way. I pulled off my shirt and saw the mirror, I hadn't seen myself sense I became a vampire.

What I saw made me very uncomfortable. My body was perfect, absolutely no flaws. My skin was pale, my hair was longer and a new shade of black, almost blue, and I still had my purple tips. I got closer to the mirror to see my face, it had no zits! That's a first. The scar I got from falling out of a tree when I was nine that was under my left eye is gone too. I leaned it closer to get more detail; I scanned my face, and stopped at my eyes. My eyes used to be brown, and now they were a pale blue-ish-purple color. I continued to my mouth, it was the part of me that I knew I had to see...But scared me. Slowly I opened my mouth, what I saw confused me.

No fangs, I could have sworn I bit my lip with them earlier. That was right before I had that drink, and found out the drink was blood. When the bitter sweet metal tasting liquid went down my...Oh. Those thoughts about blood made me a tad hungry, and there are my fangs. They came as soon as I started to think about blood. My fangs were long, white and of course sharp, and they are probably going to stay out 'cause I'm starting to get hungry. Great.

After closing my mouth and biting my lip again I looked away from the mirror. I removed the rest of my clothes (that only made me hate my body even more) and turned on the water as hot as I could stand it. I sighed, the hot water felt good against my cold, pale skin. I stayed in the shower until the water ran cold.

Without looking at the mirror I tied a towel around my waist, walked out into the main room, and put on some flannel pants. I lay on my bed and looked around again, and noticed the black curtains, to keep out the sun I think. The clock on my table said 6:30am, time to sleep. I closed my eyes and started to think. I thought about what I would do for the rest of eternity, was I ready to live forever? I thought about hunting again, couldn't wait for that. I thought about tomorrow, what am I going to do? Then I thought about her, the girl I left behind. I wonder if she's worried about me. If she knows I'm still alive...Well to some degree. I wonder if she got my note. Vanessa, I love her so much. I wonder if she knows that.

With the last of my thoughts sleep finally took hold, but it wasn't normal sleep...I was aware of everything around me but I couldn't see anything.



Chapter 1
Three Years Later


"Where are we going Tristin?" The question came out again, this was the fourth time I asked him that and for the fourth time he answered, "You'll see Chris, You'll see" With that answer I sighed and sat back in the car seat, we had been driving for hours.

"Did you eat before we left?" Tristin asked, I looked up at him "No, you told me not to" I paused "What are you planning? Are we going to hunt tonight?" he gave me his 'that's a stupid question' look and I looked away. "You'll see" he said again, I was getting tired of that answer so I let out a frustrated growl. That only made him laugh.

Tristin was turned into a vampire when he was 19...915 years ago. Amazing no? For being so old he can be really immature, like what he's doing right now. He was one of the first vampires ever, created around the time a little before The Crusades. He has an old European look to him that I can't really explain, long dark brown hair held in a pony tail, pale, and he has green eyes. The greenest eyes I've ever seen...creepy old green eyes that could look right through a person.

I looked out the car window, we were somewhere in Casper I think. It's not a big town, easy to get around in. Tristin turned to me "Your 18 right?" I looked back from the widow "Technically I'm 21 now Tristin" I answered back, he should know that "But you look 18 right?" I glared at him, which meant 'yes'. He nodded and continued driving "That's good."
I didn’t even want to know what he meant by that, I just continued staring out the window.

Then I realized we had stopped in an ally. "Where are we?" I asked Tristin, who calmly got out of the car and waited for me to get out too. I did and he grabbed my arm and pulled me to the side of a building. The grin on his face told me that I was in trouble. I was drug to a steal door, the sign above said, Blutsverwandte. Ah, a night club.

"Bluu-tserrr..." I started to read but Tristin interrupted "Its German don't even try to read it" I nodded and he knocked on the door.

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I was going to have it start at the very beginning and have no prologue but then I'd have have three years worth of filler untill I got to the actual plot of the story. So I did the whole progolue thing and it works for me.
so as I asked before please nothing mean, just things that can help this get better, I want to get this thing really going.

comments?

I know ^^

I was going threw my computer and found some of the first thing I scanned from 06. So I decited to redraw some of them ^^

This is a pic of my old OC Obsidian from 2006...when I was still developing her

And this is the same-ish picture of her only I drew it last night...C&C welcome on this pic


I'm quite proud on how I've improved some...hands still get me but feet don't as much as they used to mrgreen

thank you very much=)
You've made my day