Emily_1404
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This only works on the event page... Found here. Good luck with the, uh, kiss thing...
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| KISS ME IM SINGLE!!!! Go to post | 9 | Chatterbox |
Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:38 am |
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This only works on the event page... Found here. Good luck with the, uh, kiss thing... |
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| Creatrive Writing Contest, CLOSED!!!! Go to post | 17 | Recycle Bin |
Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:28 am |
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Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Hynda preseac Can it be from an original character's point of view? yes, she said it already. it's called narrativa en primera persona, in spanish, but in ensglish I think it's the same, something like 1st person narrative or something. I think that preseac meant that, since the prompt uses second person pronouns (you, yours, etc.), she wanted to know if it had to be our opinion, or if it could be a character's opinion. You never get tired of telling the others to change their threads of forums?. It's a but fun read you anyway. But what difference could make the opinion of anyone in a story like this. It's just a kind of narrative after all. Well... No, I don't. =] Order is my kind of thing. Anyway, let's have an example, because that was a very good question. Say that the author is a civil war-lover, so he would choose to go back to that time period. But the character is a cold war type of person. It would affect the response for the contest and the reasoning. That's probably why she asked. |
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| Creativ Crit Me!!! XD Go to post | 33 | Original Stories/Prose |
Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:07 am |
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Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Debate is awesome. =3 Anyway, Hyndra, you are fighting a lost battle. Please just stop. There is no need to defend yourself. I got irritated with your mannerism and told you just so. I'm blunt like that. So, just screw the arguing, mmkay? And your attempts at belittling me are just sucking. ok, sorry, I already apologized with you. Don't get upset anymore. I won't writte over here again if that's what you want. It has been seen *pokes other thread*, and already forgiven. Just a little bit of a tussle is all. |
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| the story of the boy who killed everyone in his family Go to post | 21 | Original Stories/Prose |
Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:03 am |
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Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Wrong forum. You'll get more responses by putting it in the OS/P at the top of the page where it belongs. look, I know you're upset because I placed you where you belongs, but that doesn't give you the right to come to my thread to try to insult me or anything, because it's too coincidence that you just came to read this thread right after you discussed with me in the other. It's not like I want you to be banned or something, I just thing you must be as respectful as I am with you ok? Don't get mad anymore, and forget all of this for once. o-0 What the heck? I didn't even pause to look at the author. I saw the title, realized it was in the wrong place, and said it needed to be moved. I wasn't even directing any rudeness at you. t's what I do. Talk about being personal... Find the contest on this forum, NOT posted by you, and see that I told the author to move it. It's called following the rules and teaching people new things. Oh, hmm, sorry then. I apologize it was too rude from my part to prejudice you. And it was too rude from your part to prejudice me, because you jugded my thread just by the tittle, so I have noticed why you never speak about the main topic of the threads, and that's because you just read the comentaries. I apologize again, and I hope you forgive me, I will forgive you. Let's forget everything about this and be friends, or at least, not enemies. What's there to forgive? You apologized, and life moves on. Anyway, I saw the story on my way down. wink It wasn't so much as prejudice as it was common sense. |
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| Creativ Crit Me!!! XD Go to post | 33 | Original Stories/Prose |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:58 pm |
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Debate is awesome. =3 Anyway, Hyndra, you are fighting a lost battle. Please just stop. There is no need to defend yourself. I got irritated with your mannerism and told you just so. I'm blunt like that. So, just screw the arguing, mmkay? And your attempts at belittling me are just sucking.
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| the story of the boy who killed everyone in his family Go to post | 21 | Original Stories/Prose |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:54 pm |
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Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Wrong forum. You'll get more responses by putting it in the OS/P at the top of the page where it belongs. look, I know you're upset because I placed you where you belongs, but that doesn't give you the right to come to my thread to try to insult me or anything, because it's too coincidence that you just came to read this thread right after you discussed with me in the other. It's not like I want you to be banned or something, I just thing you must be as respectful as I am with you ok? Don't get mad anymore, and forget all of this for once. o-0 What the heck? I didn't even pause to look at the author. I saw the title, realized it was in the wrong place, and said it needed to be moved. I wasn't even directing any rudeness at you. t's what I do. Talk about being personal... Find the contest on this forum, NOT posted by you, and see that I told the author to move it. It's called following the rules and teaching people new things. |
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| Creatrive Writing Contest, CLOSED!!!! Go to post | 17 | Recycle Bin |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:50 pm |
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Hynda preseac Can it be from an original character's point of view? yes, she said it already. it's called narrativa en primera persona, in spanish, but in ensglish I think it's the same, something like 1st person narrative or something. I think that preseac meant that, since the prompt uses second person pronouns (you, yours, etc.), she wanted to know if it had to be our opinion, or if it could be a character's opinion. |
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| Creatrive Writing Contest, CLOSED!!!! Go to post | 17 | Recycle Bin |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:48 pm |
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This belongs in the Writing Contest forums. Ask a mod to move it there, please.
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| the story of the boy who killed everyone in his family Go to post | 21 | Original Stories/Prose |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:44 pm |
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Wrong forum. You'll get more responses by putting it in the OS/P at the top of the page where it belongs.
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| Creativ Crit Me!!! XD Go to post | 33 | Original Stories/Prose |
Wed Feb 13, 2008 11:38 pm |
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Hynda Imperatrix Xoco Hynda Zeo NekoAlkemy Bathed in the luminescent moonlight, the phantom-like mansion was even more foreboding than usual. It basked in that glow; seemingly absorbing it and knowingly using its radiant power to appear as though it were a living creature. Right off the bat: you're getting bogged down in adjectives. Get to the point and give us an efficient description without getting weighted down with all these flowery descriptions. You're not really pulling me in (and I ADORE creepy mansions). I'm getting the same feeling about this house that I do about the perfect school-girl: this mansion is sounding like a serious Mary Sue. (It's so creepy it's perfect, you know?) NekoAlkemy This creature was bordered on all side by a decaying picket fence, whose purpose, it appeared, was to contain the beast and prevent it from feasting on every being ignorant enough to challenge its strength. Years of harshly guarding this satanic home had beaten this dutiful fence. Don't spell it all out for us. Lure the reader into wanting to know why the house is evil without shoving "It's EVIL! It's EVIL!!!" down our throats. Make us drawn to your monster without stating "ooh, creepy monster!" Nothing turns away a reader faster than being told how to feel about something. I'm pressed for time so I'll stop here. Keep working on it. You've got a good idea forming, and some interesting imagery. I'm vaguely interested in where you'll take it. Focus on making it meaningful to the reader without relying on so many forced emotional responses and purple prose, and your work will come out much stronger. Also, prose should be posted in the OS/P. You'll get more responses there. You wants to fight stupid jerk??, if you don't like it then don't read it. But if you like it, then read it, but how could you know if you like or not if you don't read it?, then you have to read it but then if you don't liked it after read it, what can you do?, I understand your dilemn, because I suffered the same after reading you. Because she uses description, and description gives atmosphere, and atmosphere gives reality. Pardon?! Do you have any idea what you just did? Zeo took the time to tell the author what needed to be fixed. That's what a critique is. If I were to use the same stand point you did, I would say: If you don't like Zeo's comment, don't read it. There isn't anything wrong with stating one's opinion on a subject. Get off your freaking high horse and try to use your brain. As for the story, I rather agree with Zeo. It burns my eyes to see all these adjectives sprinkled all over this. I mean, you have a good concept, but let us readers have some free reign on some aspects of the imagery. wink Fix some things up, and it won't be a half-bad short story. Of course, this does belong in the Original Stories/Prose section on top of the forum. You are the one that didn't understood my comment, I said that if I were to say that if you don't like the story then don't read it, then you were contradicting yourself, so that's why I didn't said it. Why you care that much about it anyways? You are being an illiterate idiot, that is why. Yes, you told Zeo to not read the story if she doesn't like it. That's exactly what your post says. I'm so passionate because there is always room for growth. Don't you get it? You can't be such a jerk when she was helping. It was way out of line. Everyone has their own opinions. Accept it and move on. |
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