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[Enchantress Sabel]

Tink The Great

Sabel when are you going to put the next chapter up? I REALLY want to read it. =D

ah, I have to find the notebook I'm writing it in and see how far I have to go to get some idea. I've been going back through some of my old stories and doing stuff with them, guess I got sidetracked. Sorry!

[Tink The Great]

Enchantress Sabel

Tink The Great

Sabel when are you going to put the next chapter up? I REALLY want to read it. =D

ah, I have to find the notebook I'm writing it in and see how far I have to go to get some idea. I've been going back through some of my old stories and doing stuff with them, guess I got sidetracked. Sorry!

Its fine, I jsut can't wait to see what happens.
(PM me, I need to talk to you soon)

[Enchantress Sabel]

Tink The Great

Enchantress Sabel

Tink The Great

Sabel when are you going to put the next chapter up? I REALLY want to read it. =D

ah, I have to find the notebook I'm writing it in and see how far I have to go to get some idea. I've been going back through some of my old stories and doing stuff with them, guess I got sidetracked. Sorry!

Its fine, I jsut can't wait to see what happens.
(PM me, I need to talk to you soon)

Chapter 12 is partially typed and a little over half done handwritten. (OK)

[The Gestapo Fairy]

Gaia does not recognize indents. For appearances and easier reading, insert a space between each paragraph and make sure to revisit the rules of formatting.

[Enchantress Sabel]

I apologize about the length... though I have reformatted it. Please, let me know if you see any mistakes and where they are, and I'll do my best to correct them.

[princessfafa]

I have to admit, I dislike vampire stories, but yours was very different in a good way. I liked it.

[Enchantress Sabel]

princessfafa

I have to admit, I dislike vampire stories, but yours was very different in a good way. I liked it.

I'm glad you like it. smile

[Enchantress Sabel]

Chapter 12 has been posted. I hope you all enjoy it!

[Enchantress Sabel]

don't forget to vote in the poll. Question changes at least every chapter.

[yuesha]

I tried reading it.
Really, I did.
It's written in a pretty okay manner, definitely not what I could consider bad, but...
You only describe the characters. There's no scenery whatsoever. At all.
I really couldn't pick up any type of personality within the characters, either, or any real motive as to their actions. They just... did and said things.
I'm sure this would be really good with a little editing.

--yüsha

[Enchantress Sabel]

yuesha

I tried reading it.
Really, I did.
It's written in a pretty okay manner, definitely not what I could consider bad, but...
You only describe the characters. There's no scenery whatsoever. At all.
I really couldn't pick up any type of personality within the characters, either, or any real motive as to their actions. They just... did and said things.
I'm sure this would be really good with a little editing.

--yüsha

I'll probably edit it after I get done with Chapter 16.

[yuesha]

Enchantress Sabel

yuesha

I tried reading it.
Really, I did.
It's written in a pretty okay manner, definitely not what I could consider bad, but...
You only describe the characters. There's no scenery whatsoever. At all.
I really couldn't pick up any type of personality within the characters, either, or any real motive as to their actions. They just... did and said things.
I'm sure this would be really good with a little editing.

--yüsha

I'll probably edit it after I get done with Chapter 16.

Cool. c: Good luck!

--yüsha

[Enchantress Sabel]

yuesha

Enchantress Sabel

yuesha

I tried reading it.
Really, I did.
It's written in a pretty okay manner, definitely not what I could consider bad, but...
You only describe the characters. There's no scenery whatsoever. At all.
I really couldn't pick up any type of personality within the characters, either, or any real motive as to their actions. They just... did and said things.
I'm sure this would be really good with a little editing.

--yüsha

I'll probably edit it after I get done with Chapter 16.

Cool. c: Good luck!

--yüsha

thank you.

[Phillip_the_Pineapple]

This is really good story, one of the best i've ever read...here's tip :this story is from Callie point of veiw so instend of she it would be i. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE REST!!!!!! whee

[Enchantress Sabel]

Yasei_Akai

This is really good story, one of the best i've ever read...here's tip :this story is from Callie point of veiw so instend of she it would be i. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE REST!!!!!! whee

Thank you. smile