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- Posted: Mon, 07 Mar 2005 21:32:02 +0000
We Lost Her
Chapter 1
The young blonde sat on the wooden table, swinging her legs back and forth. The worried look she had on her face from the past couple days, remained on her face. Dark ciricles formed under her eyes from lack of sleep. Her pale green eyes were fixed on the silver door knob.
The knob on the door quickly turned and the door opened. A young man, in his early twenties, walked in wiht a look of relief. "She's going to be alright. It was a false alarm. She's going to be fine."
The girl's worried look faded and was replaced with a warm, happy smile. "Really?! That's great!" She jumped up, off of the table and ran to grab her coat. "Let's go and visit her, Resho!" Resho placed his ahnd on her shoulder and said. "Not now, Kiki. The doctors want her to rest. We can visit her first thing in the morning. I'll come and pick you up."
Kiki squickly became depressed with that news. Her best friend was lying in some hospital bed, alone, and probally afraid. Yet, at the same time she was angry. Thos doctors, they lied to her friend and her family. They said that she had breast cancer, They said that they were positive, and now they caused so much physical pain to her friend. And her family was now in debt becasue of their stupid mistake.
Resho noticed her saden expression and said. "Listen, She's fine. Em's alright. She's going to be out of the hospital at the end of the month. Everything's fine."
"If everything was fine, Em wouldn't be in the hospital right now!" Kiki yelled. "If the doctors did their job-" She was cut off.
"The doctors did their job!" Resho threw his jacket on the floor in pure frustration. "If they didin't have her go throw with the surgery, my little sister could have died! It could have been cancer! It could have been cancer Kiki. Your best friend could have died!" He finished speaking to her and walked into his room and slammed his door.
She felt hot and cold all over. Kiki was mad at herself for causing Resho to think about his little sister, and her best friend being dead. She placed her ear up to Resho's door and heard him sob. Between sobs she heard him curse himself. "Sorry..." She said softly. Kiki put her jacket on and walked out of the house.
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Well what do you think? This is my first time writing a story like this so I would like some feedback before I go to my meeting on Wendsday and share it with the group. I apologize for any spelling/grammerical errors.
Chapter 1
The young blonde sat on the wooden table, swinging her legs back and forth. The worried look she had on her face from the past couple days, remained on her face. Dark ciricles formed under her eyes from lack of sleep. Her pale green eyes were fixed on the silver door knob.
The knob on the door quickly turned and the door opened. A young man, in his early twenties, walked in wiht a look of relief. "She's going to be alright. It was a false alarm. She's going to be fine."
The girl's worried look faded and was replaced with a warm, happy smile. "Really?! That's great!" She jumped up, off of the table and ran to grab her coat. "Let's go and visit her, Resho!" Resho placed his ahnd on her shoulder and said. "Not now, Kiki. The doctors want her to rest. We can visit her first thing in the morning. I'll come and pick you up."
Kiki squickly became depressed with that news. Her best friend was lying in some hospital bed, alone, and probally afraid. Yet, at the same time she was angry. Thos doctors, they lied to her friend and her family. They said that she had breast cancer, They said that they were positive, and now they caused so much physical pain to her friend. And her family was now in debt becasue of their stupid mistake.
Resho noticed her saden expression and said. "Listen, She's fine. Em's alright. She's going to be out of the hospital at the end of the month. Everything's fine."
"If everything was fine, Em wouldn't be in the hospital right now!" Kiki yelled. "If the doctors did their job-" She was cut off.
"The doctors did their job!" Resho threw his jacket on the floor in pure frustration. "If they didin't have her go throw with the surgery, my little sister could have died! It could have been cancer! It could have been cancer Kiki. Your best friend could have died!" He finished speaking to her and walked into his room and slammed his door.
She felt hot and cold all over. Kiki was mad at herself for causing Resho to think about his little sister, and her best friend being dead. She placed her ear up to Resho's door and heard him sob. Between sobs she heard him curse himself. "Sorry..." She said softly. Kiki put her jacket on and walked out of the house.
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Well what do you think? This is my first time writing a story like this so I would like some feedback before I go to my meeting on Wendsday and share it with the group. I apologize for any spelling/grammerical errors.
